Patience— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is relevant but a bit long and slightly unclear. Try to make your response more concise and clear by directly stating your opinion first, then giving a specific example with linking words to improve coherence.

Ví dụ: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I can wait calmly in difficult situations. For example, once I waited all day for an important reply from a friend, and I remained patient because the information was crucial.

Gợi ý: Your answer is somewhat unclear and lacks structure. Try to start with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words to add specific examples. Avoid repeating similar ideas and focus on clarity.

Ví dụ: I feel impatient mainly when my close relatives are admitted to the hospital. For instance, waiting for a diagnosis or treatment plan can be very stressful, especially when I am anxious about their health.

Gợi ý: Your answer shows good reflection but is a bit wordy and repetitive. Try to express your feelings more clearly and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Ví dụ: When I have to do something for a long time, I sometimes feel doubtful and confused about my decisions. Moreover, I can feel discouraged if the results do not appear despite my efforts.

Gợi ý: Your answer is relevant and detailed but could be more concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repeating similar points to make your answer more effective.

Ví dụ: Yes, my job requires a great deal of patience because I work with patients and their anxious relatives. Therefore, I always try to be compassionate and kind, which helps me manage these daily challenges effectively.

Gợi ý: Your answer is thoughtful and shows personal growth. To improve, try to use clearer linking words and slightly simplify your sentences for better clarity and naturalness.

Ví dụ: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. Over the years, I have consciously chosen patience over anxiety by practicing meditation and mindfulness, which helps me stay calm in difficult situations.

× I have encountered situations where I was required to wait for a friend for a long day to get a reply from her and I managed to wait for her as it involves an important information.

✓ I have encountered situations where I was required to wait for a friend for a long day to get a reply from her and I managed to wait for her as it involves important information.

The word 'information' is an uncountable noun and should not be preceded by the article 'an'. Using 'an important information' is incorrect; it should be 'important information' without an article.

× ...or I'm waiting for a friend in the operation data to get a reply back if my patient is doing say saved or fine.

✓ ...or I'm waiting for a friend in the operation theatre to get a reply back if my patient is doing, say, safe or fine.

The phrase 'operation data' is incorrect; the correct term is 'operation theatre' which refers to the surgical room. Also, 'say saved or fine' is unclear; 'say safe or fine' is more appropriate to express uncertainty or example.

× ...if my patient is doing say saved or fine.

✓ ...if my patient is doing, say, safe or fine.

The word 'saved' is incorrect in this context; the correct adjective is 'safe' to describe the patient's condition. Also, commas are needed around 'say' to indicate it is an interjection.

× ...because of the long wait and the results that never come to fruits, and those are in this moment.

✓ ...because of the long wait and the results that never come to fruition, and those are in this moment.

The phrase 'come to fruits' is incorrect; the correct idiom is 'come to fruition' meaning to produce results or success.

× ...and the relatives who are already frustrated and anxious with their situations of the patients.

✓ ...and the relatives who are already frustrated and anxious about the situations of the patients.

The correct preposition to use with 'frustrated and anxious' is 'about' rather than 'with' to indicate the cause of these feelings.

× ...to be the best, compassionate and a patient person for them.

✓ ...to be the best, most compassionate, and most patient person for them.

When using multiple adjectives before a noun, especially in a superlative sense, it is better to use 'most' before each adjective for clarity and correctness.

× Yes, I have been more patient now.

✓ Yes, I am more patient now.

The present perfect 'have been' is not appropriate here because the sentence refers to the current state. The simple present 'am' is correct to express a current quality.

× It was a long year of conscious decisions made to choose patients over anxiety, and it involves a lot of practice and a lot of meditations to really be patient in moments.

✓ It was a long year of conscious decisions made to choose patience over anxiety, and it involves a lot of practice and a lot of meditation to really be patient in moments.

The word 'patients' is incorrect; the intended word is 'patience' (the quality). Also, 'meditations' should be singular 'meditation' when referring to the practice in general.