Part 1
Giám khảo
Are you a patient person?
Thí sinh
I think I am. Five years ago I worked as a customer service and every day I received a lot of complaints. But I can always deal with that those complaints carefully and patiently and finally give her better best solution to them.
Giám khảo
What is it that makes you feel impatient?
Thí sinh
Actually, I really feel impatient, but I remember that yesterday our client keep talking a repeated thing again and again. I feel a little bit impatient about that, but I didn't feel angry and I didn't show my impatience on my face.
Giám khảo
How do you feel when you have to do something for a long time?
Thí sinh
I may feel unmotivated when I do something for a long time. For example working in a factory to do handmade things will be boring and sometimes feel unmotivated. But thinking of I can get money I will feel.
Giám khảo
Does your job require you to be patient?
Thí sinh
Yes, actually my boss is a woman that is difficult to get along with but so I have to be super patient to work with her.
Giám khảo
Are you more patient now than when you were a child?
Thí sinh
Yes, when I was young I was a super impatient person, but after I worked as a customer service, I tried to be more patient than before and I did it.
Are you a patient person?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: 答案有明确的主题句并给出经历支持,但存在较多语法和用词错误、冗余与不自然表达(如“customer service”应为“customer service representative”,“give her better best solution”不通顺)。建议: 1) 简化句子,避免冗余,把经历用正确时态和词汇表达; 2) 注意主谓一致和冠词(a customer service representative, many complaints); 3) 用一两个连词衔接细节(For example, As a result)。 具体练习:将两三句压缩为不超过5句的自然回答,注意时态和词汇搭配。
Ví dụ: Yes, I consider myself patient. For example, I worked as a customer service representative for five years, so I handled many complaints daily. I always listened carefully and calmly, asked follow-up questions, and provided practical solutions, which usually satisfied the customers.
What is it that makes you feel impatient?
Điểm: 54.0Gợi ý: 回答表达了情绪但句子重复且语法错误(如“keep talking a repeated thing”应为kept repeating the same thing)。需要更简洁、有逻辑的说明导致不耐心的具体情境,并用连词连接原因和结果。建议: 1) 用过去时态描述特定事件(yesterday the client kept repeating the same point); 2) 用because或so解释原因及你的反应; 3) 避免重复词汇,替换为more precise verbs(repeat, interrupt)。
Ví dụ: I feel impatient when someone repeats the same point many times. For example, yesterday a client kept repeating the same complaint, which tested my patience, but I stayed calm and listened until I could clarify the issue.
How do you feel when you have to do something for a long time?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 回答包含观点和例子,但表达不完整且不流畅(如最后一句不完整,“But thinking of I can get money I will feel.”)。需要明确情绪并补充细节和连接词。建议: 1) 完成句子,说明长期工作的情绪变化并解释原因; 2) 使用连接词(For example, however, although)来组织语义; 3) 提供结论或应对策略(I try to set small goals, take breaks)。
Ví dụ: I usually feel unmotivated if I do the same task for a long time. For example, repetitive manual work in a factory can become boring after a while. However, I stay motivated by setting small goals and reminding myself that the work pays my bills.
Does your job require you to be patient?
Điểm: 56.0Gợi ý: 回答直接但有语法和逻辑问题(“but so”混用、不礼貌地描述上司)。建议更礼貌和明确地说明工作对耐心的要求并给出具体原因或例子。建议: 1) 用中性或礼貌的表述描述同事或上司(difficult to work with); 2) 解释为何需要耐心(e.g. frequent feedback, strict standards); 3) 用连词组织原因和结果(so, therefore)。
Ví dụ: Yes. My job requires a lot of patience because my manager often gives detailed critiques and expects precise work. Therefore, I need to listen carefully, ask clarifying questions, and stay calm when receiving feedback.
Are you more patient now than when you were a child?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答清晰表达比较,但用词和语法可以更自然(“super impatient”口语化且有些夸张,最后一句不够具体)。建议: 1) 使用比较结构(much more patient now than I was as a child); 2) 提供具体改变的原因和例子(working as customer service taught me to listen and manage emotions); 3) 用连接词加强逻辑(because, since)。
Ví dụ: Yes, I am much more patient now than I was as a child. Working as a customer service representative taught me to listen carefully and control my reactions, so I can handle difficult situations calmly.
× I think I am. Five years ago I worked as a customer service and every day I received a lot of complaints.
✓ I think I am. Five years ago I worked as a customer-service representative and every day I received many complaints.
句子中使用了不准确的量词和名词搭配。“a customer service” 用法错误,应该用“a customer-service representative”(客服代表)或“in customer service”。“a lot of complaints” 在正式叙述中可改为“many complaints”。建议:注意职业名词的固定搭配和量词在正式语境中的选择。
× But I can always deal with that those complaints carefully and patiently and finally give her better best solution to them.
✓ But I could always deal with those complaints carefully and patiently and finally give them the best solution.
句中有多处问题:1) 时态与上下文一致应使用过去式“could”;2) “that those” 是多余重复,应为“those complaints”;3) “give her better best solution to them” 结构混乱,应为“give them the best solution” 或“give a better solution to them”。建议:理清代词指代对象并保持时态一致,避免重复词。
× Actually, I really feel impatient, but I remember that yesterday our client keep talking a repeated thing again and again.
✓ Actually, I really felt impatient, but I remember that yesterday our client kept repeating the same thing again and again.
问题在于情态/时态搭配:描述过去的事件应使用过去式“felt”与“kept”。此外,“keep talking a repeated thing” 不是自然搭配,改为“kept repeating the same thing”。建议:描述过去的事件统一使用过去时,并使用正确的动词搭配(keep/keep + -ing -> kept + -ing)。
× I feel a little bit impatient about that, but I didn't feel angry and I didn't show my impatience on my face.
✓ I felt a little impatient about that, but I didn't feel angry and I didn't show my impatience on my face.
前后时态不一致。句中在叙述同一过去事件,应将“I feel”改为过去式“I felt”。“show my impatience on my face” 可接受但更自然为“show my impatience on my face” 保持原意。建议:叙述过去事件时统一使用过去时态。
× I may feel unmotivated when I do something for a long time.
✓ I may feel unmotivated when I do something for a long time.
此句语法上可接受,时态与情态动词搭配正确。原句可保留。说明:使用“may”表达可能性,后面用现在时描述一般情况下持续的动作,符合语法规则。
× For example working in a factory to do handmade things will be boring and sometimes feel unmotivated.
✓ For example, working in a factory making handmade products would be boring and sometimes make me feel unmotivated.
原句结构不完整:1) 缺少逗号分隔插入短语;2) “to do handmade things” 搭配不自然,改为“making handmade products”;3) 主语与谓语不一致,需加“make me feel”。建议:使用现在分词作主语时注意后续谓语和主语的人称一致,必要时加入宾语。
× But thinking of I can get money I will feel.
✓ But thinking that I can get money, I feel better.
原句缺乏完整谓语结构,“thinking of I can get money I will feel” 不完整且语序错误。应改为“thinking that I can get money, I feel better” 或“just thinking that I can earn money makes me feel better”。建议:保证从句连接词(that)和主句谓语完整,表达情感变化时使用明确的结果谓语。
× Yes, actually my boss is a woman that is difficult to get along with but so I have to be super patient to work with her.
✓ Yes, actually my boss is a woman who is difficult to get along with, so I have to be very patient when working with her.
问题包括:1) 关系代词“that”指人时建议用“who”;2) 句中“but so” 连词使用重复,应仅用“so”;3) “have to be super patient to work with her” 更自然为“have to be very patient when working with her”。建议:使用正确的关系代词,避免重复连词,并用自然的动词短语表达原因和方式。
× Yes, when I was young I was a super impatient person, but after I worked as a customer service, I tried to be more patient than before and I did it.
✓ Yes, when I was young I was a very impatient person, but after I worked in customer service, I tried to be more patient than before and I succeeded.
问题:1) “a super impatient person” 的“super”口语但可改为“very”更自然;2) “worked as a customer service” 错误,职位应为“worked in customer service” 或“worked as a customer-service representative”;3) “I did it” 表达不够明确,改为“I succeeded”。建议:注意职业短语的固定搭配,选择恰当的副词以及更明确的完成结果表达。