Patience— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and avoid filler words (uh). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific example with a linking phrase. Use correct grammar for clarity (e.g., 'when things don't go the way I expect').

Ví dụ: I'm not a very patient person. For example, when there's an unexpected traffic jam, I become quickly frustrated and nervous because it disrupts my plans.

Gợi ý: Organize the answer: begin with a topic sentence summarizing triggers, then give two brief, specific examples linked by connectors (for example, moreover). Correct small grammar errors ('besides', 'school results'). Avoid repetition (e.g., 'really impatient' used multiple times).

Ví dụ: I become impatient in situations where I have to wait. For example, I get irritable when I stand in a long queue for food because I'm hungry; moreover, I check my school results every day when I am anxious about them.

Gợi ý: State the main idea directly, then support with a clear example and a brief strategy. Fix errors (e.g., 'see patients continuously', 'lose motivation'), and reduce hesitations. Use linking words like 'however' or 'therefore' for coherence.

Ví dụ: If I have to do something for a long time, I may gradually lose interest. For instance, as a future doctor I might feel enthusiastic at first when seeing patients, but over time I could get tired; therefore I remind myself of my initial motivation to stay determined.

Gợi ý: Give a concise direct answer and avoid repeating similar phrases. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I will graduate soon', 'becoming a doctor really needs patience', 'patients are often in pain'). Use one or two specific tasks that require patience and link them logically.

Ví dụ: Yes. As a medical student who will soon graduate, I know that being a doctor requires patience because patients are often in pain; for example, I must calmly explain diagnoses and treatment plans to both patients and their families so they understand their options.

Gợi ý: Begin with a clear comparison sentence, then give one concise specific childhood example and one current strategy. Correct grammar ('impatient', 'when I didn't get', 'I try to hold myself back'). Remove redundancies and hesitations.

Ví dụ: Yes, I'm more patient now. As a child I used to cry when I didn't get a toy, but now I control my reactions better by reminding myself of the consequences and taking deep breaths when I'm upset.

× I would say I'm not a very patient person because I tend to be very overwhelmed and nervous when the thing doesn't go the way I expected.

✓ I would say I'm not a very patient person because I tend to become very overwhelmed and nervous when things don't go the way I expect.

Mixed present and past tense and article use: 'the thing' is unnatural; use plural 'things' for general situations. 'doesn't go' should match present 'I expect' rather than past 'I expected'. Use 'become' instead of 'be' for gradual change. Suggestion: keep present tense for general statements and use plural 'things' for general cases.

× So for example, if there's a traffic jam in the time where I assume it should be no traffic, I'll be really grumpy and, uh, just not feeling really good.

✓ So for example, if there's a traffic jam at a time when I expect there to be no traffic, I'll be really grumpy and just not feel very good.

Incorrect prepositional phrase and verb form: use 'at a time when' instead of 'in the time where', and 'expect there to be no traffic' is the correct 'there be' construction. Also use future/present 'I'll be' with complement 'not feel' rather than 'not feeling'. Suggestion: use standard time expressions and correct 'there be' structure.

× Other than the traffic jam I mentioned just now, uh, another situation is when I'm waiting for a long queue for food, I will also feel very impatient and irritable because I'm very hungry.

✓ Other than the traffic jam I mentioned just now, another situation is when I'm waiting in a long queue for food; I also feel very impatient and irritable because I'm very hungry.

Wrong preposition and run-on sentence: use 'waiting in a long queue' not 'waiting for a long queue'. Combine clauses properly; for general habitual feelings use present 'I also feel' rather than future 'I will also feel'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions with 'wait' and keep tense consistent for habitual actions.

× And beside that, when I'm waiting for some very important result like my school result, I will also tend to check it like once a day just to know because I'm really impatient about it.

✓ And besides that, when I'm waiting for an important result like my school results, I also tend to check them about once a day because I'm really impatient about it.

Word choice and agreement: use 'besides' not 'beside'; 'school results' plural and refer back with 'them'. Use present habitual 'I also tend' instead of future 'I will also tend'. Use 'about once a day' for natural frequency expression. Suggestion: fix adverb form, noun number, and pronoun agreement.

× In my opinion, if I have to do something for a long time, I might gradually lose interest.

✓ In my opinion, if I have to do something for a long time, I might gradually lose interest.

No grammatical correction needed: sentence is correct. Retained present conditional and modal 'might' for possibility. Suggestion: none.

× For example, if I become a doctor and have to see patient continuously, I would feel enthusiastic at first, but over time, I might become tired and lost motivation.

✓ For example, if I become a doctor and have to see patients continuously, I would feel enthusiastic at first, but over time I might become tired and lose motivation.

Number agreement and verb form: 'patient' should be plural 'patients' when speaking generally. 'Lost motivation' is wrong tense; use base verb 'lose' after modal 'might'. Suggestion: ensure plural for general people and use base verb after modal auxiliaries.

× So the key is that we always need to, uh, remember our initial motivations and, uh, remind ourselves that we need to be determined.

✓ So the key is that we always need to remember our initial motivations and remind ourselves to stay determined.

Wordiness and awkward phrasing: repeated 'uh' and redundant 'that we need to ... that we need to' makes sentence clumsy. Use parallel structure 'remember... and remind ourselves to...' and 'stay determined' is more natural. Suggestion: simplify and use parallel verbs.

× Yes, I'm currently a medical student. I'm not working but I will be graduate soon in a few months.

✓ Yes, I'm currently a medical student. I'm not working but I will graduate soon, in a few months.

Incorrect verb form: use 'graduate' not 'be graduate' for future action. Place time phrase 'in a few months' after a comma for clarity. Suggestion: use correct intransitive verb 'graduate' for completing studies.

× So becoming a doctor really need to be patients because the patients is often in a very hard situation where they are in pain and suffering from the health conditions.

✓ So becoming a doctor really requires patience because patients are often in very difficult situations where they are in pain and suffering from health conditions.

Multiple errors: subject-verb and word choice. 'Becoming a doctor' requires singular verb 'requires' and the noun should be 'patience' not 'patients'. Then 'the patients is' should be 'patients are' for plural agreement. 'Very hard situation' better as 'very difficult situations'. Suggestion: use correct abstract noun 'patience' and match plural nouns with plural verbs.

× So we need to be patient by explaining their condition nicely to the patient and also to their family members so that they can understand their situations.

✓ So we need to be patient by explaining their condition clearly to the patient and to their family members so that they can understand their situations.

Word choice: 'nicely' is vague; 'clearly' is better for communication. Also 'to the patient and to their family members' is fine, but 'their situations' should be 'their situations' or 'the situation' depending on meaning; here plural is acceptable. Suggestion: prefer 'clearly' for explanations and ensure consistent reference.

× Yes, I would say I'm more patient now compared to when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I would say I'm more patient now than I was as a child.

Comparative structure: use 'more... than' rather than 'compared to' for direct comparison with a clause. 'As a child' is more natural than 'when I was a child' in this sentence. Suggestion: use 'more... than' for clarity.

× So when I was a child, I was really, really impatience that when I don't get the toy or the food that I want, I will just cry in front of everyone.

✓ So when I was a child, I was really, really impatient, so when I didn't get the toy or the food that I wanted, I would just cry in front of everyone.

Word form and tense: 'impatience' (noun) should be 'impatient' (adjective). Sequence of tenses: use past tense 'didn't get' and 'wanted' and past habitual 'would cry' for past habits. Suggestion: match adjective forms and use past tense consistently for past situations.

× Even though my mom tried to stop me but it doesn't work.

✓ Even though my mom tried to stop me, it didn't work.

Conjunction redundancy and tense mismatch: 'Even though' already introduces the contrast; do not add 'but'. Also use past tense 'didn't work' to match 'tried'. Suggestion: choose one contrastive connector and keep tense consistent.

× So right now I try to be more patients that I try to hold withhold myself from throwing.

✓ So right now I try to be more patient; I try to hold myself back from throwing tantrums.

Word form and awkward phrasing: 'patients' (noun) should be 'patient' (adjective). 'Hold withhold myself' is redundant; use 'hold myself back' or 'withhold myself' is incorrect. 'Throwing' needs an object: 'throwing tantrums' is natural. Suggestion: use correct adjective 'patient' and standard phrasal verb 'hold myself back', and specify 'tantrums'.