Machine— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 你的回答表达了喜爱PS-5游戏机的原因，但语言不够自然，句子结构混乱，且有语法错误。建议简化句子结构，使用更自然的表达方式，并注意时态和冠词的使用。

Ví dụ: My favourite machine at home is the PS5 in my bedroom. Whenever I feel stressed from work or studies, I go to my room and play video games to relax and disconnect from the busy world.

Gợi ý: 回答中有重复和口语填充词，表达不够流畅。建议减少重复，使用更准确的词汇，并且结构更清晰。

Ví dụ: I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important because they help people save time and effort in daily housework, making cleaning more efficient.

Gợi ý: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议使用简单句子直接表达观点，避免重复和口语填充词。

Ví dụ: I usually don't read the instructions before using a machine because I prefer to learn how to use it by practicing.

Gợi ý: 回答不完整且语法混乱，表达不清楚。建议明确表达观点，使用完整句子，并给出具体原因。

Ví dụ: I think it depends on the machine. For complex machines, especially in factories, it is very important to read the instructions to avoid accidents or mistakes.

× Every time when I got much stress on works or studies, I return my bedroom and not play some video games that which will make me disconnect from the hustle and bustle.

✓ Every time when I get much stress from work or studies, I return to my bedroom and play some video games which help me disconnect from the hustle and bustle.

这里的时间状语“Every time”表示习惯性动作，应该用一般现在时，而不是过去时“got”。另外，“works”应为不可数名词“work”，“return my bedroom”缺少介词，应为“return to my bedroom”，“not play”应改为“play”以符合句意，去掉多余的“that”。

× Every time when I got much stress on works or studies, I return my bedroom and not play some video games that which will make me disconnect from the hustle and bustle.

✓ Every time when I get much stress from work or studies, I return to my bedroom and play some video games which help me disconnect from the hustle and bustle.

“stress on works or studies”中的介词“on”用错，应使用“from”表示“来自于”；“return my bedroom”缺少介词“to”，正确表达是“return to my bedroom”。

× Every time when I got much stress on works or studies, I return my bedroom and not play some video games that which will make me disconnect from the hustle and bustle.

✓ Every time when I get much stress from work or studies, I return to my bedroom and play some video games which help me disconnect from the hustle and bustle.

“works”应为不可数名词“work”，表示工作；“video games that which”中“that which”重复，应简化为“which”。

× Every time when I got much stress on works or studies, I return my bedroom and not play some video games that which will make me disconnect from the hustle and bustle.

✓ Every time when I get much stress from work or studies, I return to my bedroom and play some video games which help me disconnect from the hustle and bustle.

“that which”在句中重复使用，造成冗余，应只用“which”来引导定语从句。

× For me, I think it's a it's a machine that can, you know, free the free men from those busy daily house working and, you know, improve the efficiency when someone doing their house working.

✓ For me, I think it's a machine that can, you know, free people from the busy daily housework and, you know, improve efficiency when someone is doing their housework.

“free men”不合适，应该用“free people”表示“人们”；“house working”应为不可数名词“housework”；“when someone doing”缺少助动词，应为“when someone is doing”。

× For me, I think it's a it's a machine that can, you know, free the free men from those busy daily house working and, you know, improve the efficiency when someone doing their house working.

✓ For me, I think it's a machine that can, you know, free people from the busy daily housework and, you know, improve efficiency when someone is doing their housework.

“free men from those busy daily house working”中“from”使用正确，但“those busy daily house working”表达不自然，应改为“the busy daily housework”。

× I like to say I won't, you know, read the instructions before you think a machine cause I'm a carefree.

✓ I like to say I won't, you know, read the instructions before using a machine because I'm carefree.

“before you think a machine”表达不清，应改为“before using a machine”；“cause”应为“because”的口语缩写，但书面语中应完整表达；“I'm a carefree”缺少名词，应为“I'm carefree”或“I'm a carefree person”。

× I like to say I won't, you know, read the instructions before you think a machine cause I'm a carefree. I'm a carefree person because I like to, you know, quiet and how to use the machine through, through the, the, the practice.

✓ I like to say I won't, you know, read the instructions before using a machine because I'm a carefree person. I like to learn how to use the machine through practice quietly.

“before you think a machine”应改为“before using a machine”；“quiet”用作形容词，句中应使用副词“quietly”；“through, through the, the, the practice”重复且多余，应简化为“through practice”。

× I like to say I won't, you know, read the instructions before you think a machine cause I'm a carefree. I'm a carefree person because I like to, you know, quiet and how to use the machine through, through the, the, the practice.

✓ I like to say I won't, you know, read the instructions before using a machine because I'm a carefree person. I like to learn how to use the machine through practice quietly.

“how to use the machine through the practice”中“through the practice”介词短语使用不当，应为“through practice”表示“通过练习”。

× It's, I mean, it depends on what mission, what machines you're using now, especially in those factories that know some machines that make some products.

✓ It depends on which machines you're using now, especially in factories that have machines making products.

“what mission”不合适，应为“which machines”；“factories that know some machines”表达错误，应为“factories that have machines”；“that make some products”改为“making products”更自然。

× So it's vital to to read the instructions or or you may 'cause you know, bad effects and.

✓ So it's vital to read the instructions, or you may cause bad effects.

“or or you may 'cause you know, bad effects and”重复且不完整，应简化为“or you may cause bad effects”。