Part 1
Giám khảo
What is your favourite machine in your home?
Thí sinh
My favorite My favorite machine in my home is dishwashers because they save me a lot of time and effort. After I have this machinery, I don't need to clean the dishes after I cook dinner and also I can use this time to do some more meaningful things.
Giám khảo
Do you think washing machines and sweeping machines are important?
Thí sinh
Yes, I think they are important because they can save people's energies and effort. For examples, when someone UMM has start using washing machines, they can use the saving time to do more meaningful things like studies or sportings which will keep them be healthy.
Giám khảo
Do you read the instructions before using a machine?
Thí sinh
Yes, because it is really difficult for me to use these machines by myself without the help of instructions. For example, when I have a washing machines, I need to read the instructions to know how to use it and when to clean it again.
Giám khảo
Do you think it is important to read the instructions?
Thí sinh
Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions because without the help of guidance some people will use the machines incorrectly which could damage them. For example, if someone doesn't follow the safety steps, it will cause the machine to break down or even to lead accident.
What is your favourite machine in your home?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: 回答时出现了重复("My favorite My favorite"),影响了语言的自然流畅性。建议避免重复表达,简洁明了地回答问题。同时,可以增加一些具体细节来丰富内容,例如说明洗碗机如何节省时间。
Ví dụ: My favorite machine at home is the dishwasher because it saves me a lot of time and effort. For example, after cooking dinner, I simply load the dishes into the dishwasher, which allows me to relax or focus on other tasks.
Do you think washing machines and sweeping machines are important?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答中出现了语法错误和口语填充词("UMM"),影响表达的准确性和流畅性。建议避免使用填充词,注意语法正确性,并使用连接词使句子更连贯。
Ví dụ: Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are important because they save energy and effort. For example, when people start using washing machines, they can use the saved time to study or exercise, which helps them stay healthy.
Do you read the instructions before using a machine?
Điểm: 80.0Gợi ý: 回答较为清晰,但有语法错误("a washing machines"应为"a washing machine"),建议注意单复数一致。同时,可以使用连接词使表达更自然。
Ví dụ: Yes, I always read the instructions because it is difficult to use machines without guidance. For example, when I get a washing machine, I read the manual to learn how to operate it and when to clean it.
Do you think it is important to read the instructions?
Điểm: 85.0Gợi ý: 回答内容完整且有逻辑,但句子结构稍显复杂,部分表达不够地道("lead accident"应为"lead to an accident")。建议简化句子结构,使用更准确的表达。
Ví dụ: Yes, I think reading instructions is very important because without guidance, people might use machines incorrectly and cause damage. For example, not following safety steps can make the machine break down or even lead to an accident.
× My favorite My favorite machine in my home is dishwashers because they save me a lot of time and effort.
✓ My favorite machine in my home is the dishwasher because it saves me a lot of time and effort.
这里“machine”是单数,后面却用了复数“dishwashers”,主谓不一致。应保持单数形式,并且“dishwasher”前加定冠词“the”。
× After I have this machinery, I don't need to clean the dishes after I cook dinner and also I can use this time to do some more meaningful things.
✓ After I got this machine, I didn't need to clean the dishes after I cooked dinner and I could also use this time to do some more meaningful things.
句子描述过去的情况,时态应使用过去时。原句用了现在时,时态不一致。
× Yes, I think they are important because they can save people's energies and effort.
✓ Yes, I think they are important because they can save people's energy and effort.
“energy”通常不可数,复数形式“energies”不合适,应使用单数形式。
× For examples, when someone UMM has start using washing machines, they can use the saving time to do more meaningful things like studies or sportings which will keep them be healthy.
✓ For example, when someone has started using washing machines, they can use the saved time to do more meaningful things like studying or sports which will keep them healthy.
“For examples”应为“for example”;“has start”应为“has started”;“the saving time”应为“the saved time”;“studies or sportings”应为“studying or sports”;“keep them be healthy”应为“keep them healthy”。这些都是介词、动词形式和词汇搭配错误。
× For example, when I have a washing machines, I need to read the instructions to know how to use it and when to clean it again.
✓ For example, when I have a washing machine, I need to read the instructions to know how to use it and when to clean it again.
“a washing machines”中“a”表示单数,但“machines”是复数,主谓不一致,应改为单数“machine”。
× Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions because without the help of guidance some people will use the machines incorrectly which could damage them.
✓ Yes, I think it is very important to read the instructions because without guidance some people will use the machines incorrectly which could damage them.
“without the help of guidance”表达不自然,通常直接用“without guidance”。
× For example, if someone doesn't follow the safety steps, it will cause the machine to break down or even to lead accident.
✓ For example, if someone doesn't follow the safety steps, it will cause the machine to break down or even lead to an accident.
“to lead accident”缺少冠词且结构不完整,应为“lead to an accident”。