Machine— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문장 구조와 시제, 관사 사용을 바로잡고 불필요한 중복(umm, you know)을 줄이세요. 주제문을 더 명확히 하고 구체적인 이유와 예시를 1~2문장으로 연결하십시오. 연결어(for example, because, so)를 사용해 문장 흐름을 개선하세요.

Ví dụ: My favorite machine at home is the vacuum cleaner because it cleans my room quickly when I haven't had time to tidy up. For example, it picks up dust and small debris more effectively than a broom, so I can keep my room hygienic with less effort.

Gợi ý: 단어 선택과 어순(‘sweeping machine’ 또는 ‘vacuum’), 반복 제거, 그리고 구체적 이유를 명확히 하세요. 두 기계의 역할을 비교할 때 연결어(also, furthermore, whereas)를 사용해 논리적으로 연결하십시오.

Ví dụ: Yes, I think both are essential. Sweeping machines or vacuums remove dust and dirt from floors quickly, whereas washing machines clean clothes and dishwashers remove grease from dishes, saving a lot of time and effort.

Gợi ý: 문법(현재형 사용, 동사 형태)과 관사 사용을 고치고 중복 표현을 제거하세요. 이유를 구체적으로 하나나 두 개로 압축해 논리적 연결어(because, so, also)를 사용해 표현하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I usually read the instructions because they tell me how to operate the machine safely and get the best results. Also, the manual often includes troubleshooting tips that help me fix minor problems without calling a technician.

Gợi ý: 문법(조동사와 어법), 어휘(broken 대신 broke), 문장완결성을 고치세요. 이유를 두 가지 정도로 간결하고 구체적으로 말하고 연결어(therefore, for example)를 활용해 마무리 문장을 명확히 하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I believe reading instructions is important because otherwise you might damage the appliance or use it incorrectly. Therefore, reading the manual helps you avoid costly mistakes and ensures the machine works as intended.

× My favorite machine is vacuum cleaner.

✓ My favorite machine is the vacuum cleaner.

'vacuum cleaner' is a specific noun in this context and needs the definite article 'the'. Use 'the' when referring to a particular object known to the speaker and listener. Suggestion: add 'the' before household appliances when speaking about a specific one.

× It's because it can clean my room when I didn't organize and also it is more effective than umm, ordinary cleaner.

✓ It's because it can clean my room when I don't organize and it is more effective than an ordinary cleaner.

Mixing past tense 'didn't' with present ability 'can' is incorrect. Use present tense 'don't' to match the general ability. Also 'ordinary cleaner' needs the indefinite article 'an'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (present simple) for habitual situations and add 'an' before a singular countable noun beginning with a vowel sound.

× You know it can umm, soak up.

✓ You know it can, um, soak things up.

The phrase 'soak up' needs an object to be clear; add 'things' or 'dirt' and place the adverb 'up' immediately after the verb for natural word order. Suggestion: include an explicit object and keep phrasal verb together.

× Yes, I think they are important because with sweep machine I can remove the dust of my room and also with with a washing machine I can clean my dishes effectively.

✓ Yes, I think they are important because with a sweeping machine I can remove the dust from my room, and with a washing machine I can clean my dishes effectively.

Countable singular nouns need an article: 'sweep machine' should be 'a sweeping machine' or 'a sweeper'. Use 'from my room' not 'of my room' to indicate removal. Remove duplicate 'with'. Suggestion: use 'a' before singular countable devices and choose correct preposition 'from' when removing something.

× Yes, I usually using instructions because it let me know how to use it effectively and if you don't read it you can you can not find out the way.

✓ Yes, I usually use the instructions because they let me know how to use it effectively, and if you don't read them you cannot find out how to use it.

After 'usually' use base verb 'use' not 'using'. 'Instructions' is plural so use 'they' and 'them'. 'Let me know' should be 'let me know' but refers to 'them' so 'they let me know'. 'Can not' should be 'cannot'. 'Find out the way' is awkward; use 'find out how to use it'. Suggestion: use base form after adverbs of frequency, match pronouns to plural nouns, and use 'cannot' and natural phrasing for purpose.

× Also sometimes it helps me to repair.

✓ Also sometimes it helps me to make minor repairs.

'Helps me to repair' is grammatically odd; use 'helps me repair' or better 'helps me make minor repairs'. Use noun 'repairs' with 'make' for natural English. Suggestion: choose collocations like 'make repairs' or 'repair it' depending on context.

× Yes, I think it is important because if you don't read that you can easily broke your things and you don't know the way to use, so you cannot use it effectively.

✓ Yes, I think it is important because if you don't read the instructions you can easily break your things and you won't know how to use them, so you cannot use them effectively.

Use 'the instructions' not 'that'. After modal 'can' use base verb 'break' not past 'broke'. 'You don't know the way to use' should be 'you won't know how to use them'. Match pronouns: 'them' for 'instructions' or 'your things'. Use future consequence 'won't' for likely result. Suggestion: keep verb forms after modals in base form and keep pronouns consistent.

× Also it is.

✓ Also, it is important.

The fragment 'Also it is.' is incomplete and unclear. Complete the sentence by specifying what 'it' refers to, e.g., 'it is important.' Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments by ensuring subject and complement convey full meaning.