Part 1
Giám khảo
What is your favourite machine in your home?
Thí sinh
My favorite machine at home is the oven. I've been using it for two years. It's very convenient because it can cook in several different ways. Not only it can reheat, but it can also automatically steam and toast.
Giám khảo
Do you think washing machines and sweeping machines are important?
Thí sinh
Yes I do. I don't have washing machines in my house but I use them at my part time job. They are very important because they wash dishes faster than people can by hand. As for sweeping machines, I use it at home every morning.
Giám khảo
Do you read the instructions before using a machine?
Thí sinh
Actually, I don't. I think I can learn more quickly by actually trying things myself than by reading instructions.
Giám khảo
Do you think it is important to read the instructions?
Thí sinh
In terms of household machines, you don't have to read instructions in my opinion, because they're easy to figure out how to use them. In contrast, you have to read instructions when they use scientific equipment for experiments because they are very delicate.
What is your favourite machine in your home?
Điểm: 78.0Gợi ý: 全体的に答えは明確で自然ですが、話の流れや文法を少し改善するとより高得点が望めます。具体的には: 1) トピックセンテンスを維持しつつ、接続詞(for example, moreover, also)を使って情報を整理してください。2) 文法的な小さな誤り("Not only it can" → "Not only can it")を修正してください。3) 具体例や個人的な好み(例えば、よく作る料理や機能のどれが一番役立つか)を加えて内容を豊かにしてください。
Ví dụ: My favorite machine at home is the oven because it’s very versatile. For example, I often use it to roast vegetables and reheat leftovers, and it also has steaming and toasting functions which save time. Moreover, I appreciate that I can cook different dishes at once, making meal preparation much easier.
Do you think washing machines and sweeping machines are important?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 答えは要点を押さえていますが、詳細と論理的つながりが弱いです。以下を改善してください: 1) 質問全体に対する明確な導入(Yes, I think they are essential because...)を述べる。2) 洗濯機と掃除機の違いを明確にし、具体的な利点や頻度を示す。3) 接続語(for instance, because, whereas)で文を繋ぎ、情報の流れを滑らかにする。
Ví dụ: Yes, I think both washing machines and sweeping machines are important because they save time and effort. For instance, I use industrial washing machines at my part-time job to clean large volumes quickly, whereas at home I rely on a sweeping machine every morning to keep the floors tidy without spending much time. Overall, these machines help me maintain cleanliness more efficiently.
Do you read the instructions before using a machine?
Điểm: 74.0Gợi ý: 短く率直な答えですが、根拠や具体例があると説得力が増します。改善点は: 1) トピックセンテンスの後に理由を明確に述べる(because節を使う)。2) 実例や条件(どんな機械なら読まないか、危険な場合は読むか)を加える。3) 接続語を使って論理的に展開する。
Ví dụ: Actually, I usually don’t read the instructions because I find I learn faster by trying the machine myself. However, if the device looks complicated or potentially dangerous, I will read the manual first to avoid mistakes or accidents.
Do you think it is important to read the instructions?
Điểm: 76.0Gợi ý: 意見の対比は良いですが、構文と語法の改善、より具体的な理由付けが必要です。改善点: 1) 文法的に正しい構造("In my opinion, you don’t have to...")を使う。2) household machines と scientific equipment の具体例を示す。3) 接続詞(however, whereas, because)で比較を明確にする。
Ví dụ: In my opinion, it isn’t always necessary to read instructions for simple household machines because they’re usually intuitive. However, for scientific or laboratory equipment, you must read the manual carefully because such devices are delicate and misuse can cause serious problems.
× My favorite machine at home is the oven.
✓ My favorite machine at home is the oven.
No change needed. The use of the definite article 'the' before 'oven' is acceptable when talking about the specific oven in the speaker's home. (説明: 家にある特定のオーブンを指しているため定冠詞'the'は適切です。)
× I've been using it for two years.
✓ I've been using it for two years.
No change needed. Present perfect continuous correctly expresses an action that started in the past and continues to the present. (説明: 継続する状態を表すため現在完了進行形は適切です。)
× Not only it can reheat, but it can also automatically steam and toast.
✓ Not only can it reheat, but it can also automatically steam and toast.
The correlative structure 'not only ... but also' requires inversion of the auxiliary verb after 'not only' when it starts the clause. Move 'can' before 'it'. (説明: 'not only'で始まる節では助動詞の倒置が必要です。)
× I don't have washing machines in my house but I use them at my part time job.
✓ I don't have a washing machine in my house, but I use one at my part-time job.
When referring to a single household item, use the singular 'a washing machine' and match pronouns accordingly ('one' instead of 'them'). Also add a hyphen in 'part-time'. (説明: 家庭内の機械を単数で指す場合は冠詞'a'を使い、対応する代名詞も単数にする必要があります。)
× They are very important because they wash dishes faster than people can by hand.
✓ They are very important because they wash clothes faster than people can by hand.
Context: the student is talking about washing machines, so the verb 'wash' should take 'clothes' as its object, not 'dishes'. Change the noun to match the machine's function. (説明: 洗濯機の機能に合った目的語(服)を使う必要があります。)
× As for sweeping machines, I use it at home every morning.
✓ As for sweeping machines, I use one at home every morning.
Use a singular pronoun 'one' to refer back to 'sweeping machines' when speaking of a single machine used regularly. 'It' is possible but 'one' is clearer after a plural noun. (説明: 複数形の名詞に続けて特定の単数の機械を指すときは'one'を使う方が明確です。)
× Actually, I don't. I think I can learn more quickly by actually trying things myself than by reading instructions.
✓ Actually, I don't. I think I can learn more quickly by trying things myself than by reading instructions.
Remove the redundant 'actually' for conciseness. The comparative structure 'more quickly ... than ...' is correct. (説明: 'actually'が二度使われているため冗長です。)
× In terms of household machines, you don't have to read instructions in my opinion, because they're easy to figure out how to use them.
✓ In terms of household machines, you don't have to read instructions in my opinion, because they're easy to figure out how to use.
Avoid the redundant pronoun 'them' at the end; 'figure out how to use' already includes the object. Also 'they're easy to figure out how to use' correctly refers to 'household machines'. (説明: 文末の重複した代名詞'them'は不要です。)
× In contrast, you have to read instructions when they use scientific equipment for experiments because they are very delicate.
✓ In contrast, you have to read instructions when you use scientific equipment for experiments because it is very delicate.
The subject should be 'you' (the user), not 'they'. 'Scientific equipment' as a collective noun can be treated as singular 'it' (or plural 'they'); here use 'it is very delicate' referring to the equipment. Also change 'they use' to 'you use' to keep the second-person perspective. (説明: 視点を'you'に合わせるため主語を修正し、機器を指す代名詞を一貫させる必要があります。)