Memory— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one concrete supporting detail with a linking word. Correct small errors (duplicate words) and use varied vocabulary (e.g., "recall" instead of repeating "remember").

Ví dụ: I’m fairly good at memorising things when they have a strong emotional impact. For example, I can recall details of my graduation vividly because it was an important event, but I often forget routine information that I don’t find meaningful.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and avoid fragmented sentences. Use linking words to explain why you forget things and give a specific example of an important thing you forgot. Fix grammar mistakes and avoid repetition of words.

Ví dụ: Yes, I have forgotten important things, especially when I wasn’t emotionally attached to them. For instance, once I forgot to submit a university form because I didn’t realise the deadline mattered to me at the time.

Gợi ý: Give a clearer topic sentence about practical daily reminders (appointments, tasks) or lessons learned, and avoid unclear pronouns ('him'). Use linking words (for example, so, therefore) and provide one specific example of a lesson you apply daily.

Ví dụ: In daily life I need to remember practical things like appointments and also important lessons from past experiences. For example, because I learned the importance of time management after missing deadlines, I now set reminders and plan my day to avoid the same mistakes.

Gợi ý: Good clear answer; make it more fluent by combining sentences with linking words and providing a brief example of a phone method (alarms, apps). Avoid repetition ('very very') and expand vocabulary (e.g., "crucial").

Ví dụ: I usually use my phone’s notes and alarms to remember important tasks, and when something is truly crucial—like my sister’s wedding date—I remember it without reminders because it’s emotionally significant.

× It depends on the memory itself.

✓ It depends on the memory itself.

No correction needed; preposition use is correct. (Included because sentence contains related errors elsewhere but this clause is fine.)

× Sometimes I remember some memories vividly, other times I just can't remember a single detail of of a memory.

✓ Sometimes I remember memories vividly; other times I can't remember a single detail of a memory.

The original has a duplicated word 'of' and awkward phrasing 'remember some memories' is redundant. Use 'memories' alone or 'a memory.' Also replace comma with semicolon or a period to join two independent clauses correctly. Suggest avoiding redundancy: say 'remember memories vividly' or 'remember a memory vividly.'

× So it depends on the memory itself and how it affected my brain back then.

✓ So it depends on the memory itself and how it affected my brain back then.

No correction needed; preposition 'on' is correct and past tense 'affected' matches 'back then.' (Included to indicate sentence is acceptable.)

× Yes I have. I remember for getting a lot of things.

✓ Yes, I have. I remember forgetting a lot of things.

The phrase 'remember for getting' is incorrect. Use the gerund 'forgetting' after 'remember' when recalling past failures to remember. Also add a comma after 'Yes' and correct spacing. Suggest: 'I remember forgetting a lot of things.'

× Sometimes they are important, sometimes not so important.

✓ Sometimes they are important; sometimes they are not so important.

The original is understandable but omits the verb in the second clause, making the sentence less formal. Repeating the verb 'are' clarifies the structure. Use a semicolon or period to separate independent clauses.

× But as I have said, it depends on the emotional connection between me and the and the memory I'm trying to remember.

✓ But as I have said, it depends on the emotional connection between me and the memory I'm trying to remember.

Duplicated 'and the' should be removed. Preposition 'between' correctly introduces the two elements compared. Also 'the memory' is the right noun phrase. Suggest reading aloud to catch duplicated words.

× The things I need to remember in my daily life are my past experience, but not to depress myself, but to remember always the lesson I learned from him.

✓ The things I need to remember in my daily life are my past experiences, not to depress myself, but to always remember the lessons I learned from them.

Use plural 'experiences' when referring to multiple past events. Place adverb 'always' before the verb phrase 'remember' for natural word order. 'Lessons' should be plural if referring to more than one, and pronoun 'them' better refers back to 'experiences' than 'him.' Also remove the repeated 'but.'

× If I keep these lessons up, live in my mind, I can avoid them.

✓ If I keep these lessons in my mind, I can avoid repeating mistakes.

Phrase 'keep these lessons up, live in my mind' is ungrammatical and awkward. Use 'keep these lessons in my mind' or 'remember these lessons.' Also clarify the object 'them' with 'repeating mistakes' to show what will be avoided. This fixes pronoun reference and improves clarity.

× I can avoid doing the same mistakes in the future.

✓ I can avoid making the same mistakes in the future.

Use the verb 'make' with 'mistakes' rather than 'do.' The gerund 'doing the same mistakes' is non-idiomatic. 'Make the same mistakes' is the correct collocation.

× I remember important things by keeping a note on my phone, but sometimes when that thing is very very important to me, I remember it by myself and I don't need anything to remind me.

✓ I remember important things by keeping a note on my phone, but sometimes when something is very important to me, I remember it myself and don't need anything to remind me.

Replace 'that thing' with 'something' for natural phrasing and remove the duplicated adverb 'very.' Use 'remember it myself' rather than 'remember it by myself' (both are possible but 'myself' without 'by' is more natural here). Also remove the second 'I' for smoother flow.