Memory— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, reduce fillers (uh), and use one specific supporting detail with a linking phrase. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., recall, remember) and avoid redundant phrasing.

Ví dụ: Yes — I have a good memory. For instance, I can clearly recall playing with my grandmother and cousins from my childhood, which shows I remember events even after a year.

Gợi ý: Correct grammar and reduce repetition: use past tense consistently and avoid repeated words (‘forgot forget’). Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give a brief reason and a result using linking words (for example, however, but).

Ví dụ: Yes, I have. During my tenth board exams I was so stressed that I actually forgot my own birthday. However, my parents surprised me with a cake and flowers, which made me very happy.

Gợi ý: Be specific and use clearer structure: start with a topic sentence listing key things, then add a specific example and use linking words (for example, such as) for clarity. Avoid wordiness and tense errors.

Ví dụ: In daily life I need to remember items to pack in my backpack and the tasks or notes from my lectures. For example, I always check for my laptop, textbook and assignments before leaving home so I can study later.

Gợi ý: Use correct tense and concise phrasing: state the method clearly, then give one or two specific examples. Replace awkward phrases (e.g., 'so that I didn't get panicked') with natural alternatives like 'to avoid panicking'.

Ví dụ: I use a diary to note important dates and deadlines so I don’t panic. For example, I write exam dates and close family birthdays to plan my study and buy presents in time.

× Yes, I often remember the things or moments which I had spent or seen, uh, even a year ago.

✓ Yes, I often remember the things or moments I have experienced or seen, even from a year ago.

The original mixes past perfect ('had spent') with simple present 'remember'. Use present perfect ('have experienced') to link past events to the present ability to remember. Also 'spent' is inappropriate for moments; 'experienced' or 'seen' is clearer. Avoid unnecessary relative pronoun 'which'.

× For example, I still remember the time when I used to play a lot in my childhood with my grandmother and my cousins.

✓ For example, I still remember the time when I used to play a lot in my childhood with my grandmother and my cousins.

This sentence is grammatically correct; it uses 'used to' to describe past habitual actions, so no change is needed. (Included for completeness per instruction to respond individually.)

× Definitely yes. It was my tenth boards exam and I was so stressed that I even forgot forget my birthday, so at the time I feel a little ashamed that I did so.

✓ Definitely yes. It was my tenth board exam and I was so stressed that I even forgot my birthday, so at the time I felt a little ashamed that I had done so.

Multiple issues: 'forgot forget' is redundant; use simple past 'forgot'. 'Boards' should be singular 'board' in this context. 'Feel' must match past context, so use 'felt'. Use 'had done so' (past perfect) to show the shame was about the earlier forgetting, but simple past 'felt' is sufficient; here improved to past perfect for clarity.

× But in the morning when my parents surprised me with the beautiful cake and a bouquet, I was over the moon.

✓ But in the morning when my parents surprised me with a beautiful cake and a bouquet, I was over the moon.

Change 'the beautiful cake' to 'a beautiful cake' because this is the first mention and indefinite article is appropriate. Tense 'surprised' and 'was' are correct.

× Honestly speaking, in my daily routine I need to remember the things which I need to carry along with me in my backpack and also the work which I had done in my lecture so that I can recall it at home.

✓ Honestly, in my daily routine I need to remember the things I must carry in my backpack and the work I did in my lecture so that I can recall it at home.

Mixing present and past perfect: 'which I need to carry' is fine but 'which I had done in my lecture' should be simple past 'did' because it refers to actions completed during the lecture. Use 'must' or 'need to' for necessity; remove unnecessary 'along with me' and 'which'.

× I keep a diary on which I write all the important dates and deadlines so that I didn't get panicked at the moment.

✓ I keep a diary in which I write all the important dates and deadlines so that I don't get panicked at the moment.

Tense mismatch: 'keep' is present, so the purpose clause should use present tense 'don't' rather than past 'didn't'. Also use 'in which' instead of 'on which' for diary entries. Alternatively, 'so that I don't panic' is more natural than 'get panicked'.

× For example, in my diary I had written the dates for my exams so that I can prepare accordingly and the birthday dates of my closest members such as my friends and my mother and father.

✓ For example, in my diary I write the dates for my exams so that I can prepare accordingly, and the birthdays of my close family and friends.

Consistency with present habit: since keeping a diary is a repeated action, use present simple 'write' rather than past perfect 'had written'. 'Birthday dates of my closest members' is awkward; use 'the birthdays of my close family and friends'. 'Mother and father' can be simplified to 'parents' or 'close family'.