Chocolate— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific reasons. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Ví dụ: Yes, I like eating chocolate because my father often brought me different kinds from his business trips abroad. This exposure made me develop a fondness for chocolates since childhood, and I still enjoy them today.

Gợi ý: Your answer is relevant but has some grammatical mistakes and slight redundancy. Try to combine sentences for better flow and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

Ví dụ: I usually eat chocolate about twice a week, mostly after lunch or dinner because I enjoy having something sweet to lighten my meal. Additionally, I often snack on chocolate while watching movies.

Gợi ý: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and making the sentences more natural. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid awkward phrasing.

Ví dụ: Yes, my dad frequently brought various chocolates for me and my brother, so we grew up eating them quite often. Moreover, my mother didn't believe that chocolate harms our teeth, so we were free to enjoy it without restrictions.

Gợi ý: Your answer lacks clarity and is incomplete. Try to give a clear topic sentence, explain reasons with examples, and avoid repetition. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

Ví dụ: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it comes in many varieties and flavors, such as milk and dark chocolate. For instance, I prefer milk chocolate because it is sweet and offers a range of delicious flavors.

Gợi ý: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and using more precise vocabulary. Also, avoid redundancy and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Ví dụ: My favourite chocolate flavour is the crackle one, which contains rice puffs that add a crunchy texture. Additionally, I enjoy the roasted almond flavour because it gives the chocolate a rich, nutty taste.

Gợi ý: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Ví dụ: I think chocolate makes a good gift if the recipient likes it. Personally, I feel happy when someone gives me chocolate because it is one of my favourite sweets, and receiving it always brightens my day.

× Since my childhood, my dad used to travel to other countries for business purpose.

✓ Since my childhood, my dad has traveled to other countries for business purposes.

The phrase 'Since my childhood' indicates an action that started in the past and continues to the present, so the present perfect tense 'has traveled' is appropriate. Also, 'business purpose' should be pluralized to 'business purposes' to be grammatically correct.

× So he used to drink a lot of chocolates and the chocolates which are famous in that country.

✓ So he used to eat a lot of chocolates and the chocolates which are famous in that country.

The verb 'drink' is incorrect when referring to chocolates; the correct verb is 'eat' because chocolates are solid. Also, 'a lot of chocolates' is correct as chocolates are countable plural.

× So I used to like I started liking chocolates as my childhood until this date I loved them.

✓ So I started liking chocolates in my childhood and have loved them until this date.

The sentence is confusing and mixes tenses. 'Used to like' and 'started liking' are redundant. The correct form is 'started liking' to indicate the beginning of the liking, and 'have loved' to indicate continuing love until now.

× I eat chocolate almost twice a week. After my dinner or lunch.

✓ I eat chocolate almost twice a week, after my dinner or lunch.

The second sentence is a fragment without a subject and verb. Combining it with the first sentence using a comma corrects the sentence structure.

× I like to eat something sweet to lighten my food that I eat, so I eat chocolate.

✓ I like to eat something sweet to lighten my food, so I eat chocolate.

The phrase 'that I eat' is unnecessary and redundant. Removing it improves clarity and sentence flow.

× I eat them al also while watching a movie or sitting as a snack.

✓ I also eat them while watching a movie or sitting as a snack.

The phrase 'al also' is a typo and should be 'also'. The sentence is corrected by removing the typo and improving word order.

× Yes, my dad used to bring all kinds of chocolates for me and my brother, so we grew up eating chocolates more than anything.

✓ Yes, my dad used to bring all kinds of chocolates for me and my brother, so we grew up eating chocolates more than anything else.

Adding 'else' after 'anything' is necessary to complete the comparative phrase correctly.

× Also, my mom didn't believe that chocolate decays our teeth, so there was no stopping us to eat chocolates.

✓ Also, my mom didn't believe that chocolate decays our teeth, so there was nothing stopping us from eating chocolates.

The phrase 'no stopping us to eat' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'nothing stopping us from eating'.

× It is famous around the world for many reasons as there are varieties of chocolates and also the taste differs according to the types.

✓ It is famous around the world for many reasons as there are various types of chocolates and the taste differs according to the type.

'Varieties of chocolates' is better expressed as 'various types of chocolates'. Also, 'types' should be singular 'type' to agree with 'taste'.

× For example there is a milk chocolate and dark chocolate.

✓ For example, there is milk chocolate and dark chocolate.

'A milk chocolate' is incorrect because 'milk chocolate' is an uncountable noun here. Removing 'a' is correct.

× I personally like the milk one as it is sweet and have many flavors to it and also comes and also it comes in.

✓ I personally like the milk one as it is sweet, has many flavors, and comes in various forms.

The sentence is incomplete and repetitive. Correcting verb agreement ('has' instead of 'have') and completing the sentence improves clarity.

× The one I like the most is the crackle one which contains the rice puffs in it so it gives a crunchy taste and texture to it while eating it.

✓ The one I like the most is the crackle one which contains rice puffs, giving a crunchy taste and texture while eating.

Removing redundant pronouns 'in it' and 'to it' and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and conciseness.

× Also the another one which I like is the roasted almond which gives a rusty taste to the chocolate.

✓ Also, another one I like is the roasted almond, which gives a nutty taste to the chocolate.

'The another one' is incorrect; 'another one' is correct. Also, 'rusty' is likely a typo for 'nutty' when describing almond flavor.

× If a person knows that the person who is supposed to receive the gift likes chocolate and I will presume that it is a nice choice of gift.

✓ If a person knows that the person who is supposed to receive the gift likes chocolate, I will presume that it is a nice choice of gift.

The sentence is a run-on and missing a comma before 'I will presume'. Adding the comma corrects the sentence structure.

× If someone gives me chocolate, I am usually happy to deserve it as it is one of my favorite sweet in the world.

✓ If someone gives me chocolate, I am usually happy to receive it as it is one of my favorite sweets in the world.

'Deserve' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'receive'. Also, 'sweet' should be plural 'sweets'.

× Having chocolate can make me feel happy, so as a gift I will really like it.

✓ Having chocolate can make me feel happy, so I would really like it as a gift.

The sentence is awkward; adding 'I would' improves the sentence flow and clarity.