Singing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 문법적 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 예를 들어, 'helped me to relax more of the time' 대신 'helps me relax most of the time'가 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 'my vitamin'은 의미가 불분명하므로 명확한 표현으로 바꾸는 것이 좋습니다. 문장을 간결하게 유지하고, 주제 문장과 구체적인 이유를 명확히 연결하는 연습을 하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax most of the time. Even though I'm not a good singer and my voice isn't perfect, singing allows me to enjoy my favorite songs and feel better emotionally.

Gợi ý: 답변에 시제 일치와 문법 오류가 있습니다. 예를 들어, 'I always watch'는 과거 시제인 'I always watched'로 수정해야 합니다. 또한, 'it become a little kind of my dream'은 'it became somewhat of a dream for me'로 자연스럽게 표현할 수 있습니다. 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 구성하는 연습을 하세요.

Ví dụ: No, I have never had the opportunity to learn how to sing. However, when I was a child, I always watched singing programs on TV, and it became somewhat of a dream for me, even though I knew I wasn't a good singer. Singing made me happy, even if only for a short time.

Gợi ý: 답변이 주제에 직접적으로 답하고 있으나, 문장 연결과 표현이 다소 어색합니다. 예를 들어, 'I am my only public' 대신 'I am my only audience'가 더 적절합니다. 또한, 문장 간 연결어를 사용하여 답변을 더 논리적이고 자연스럽게 만드세요.

Ví dụ: Most of the time, I sing for myself because it's a way to enjoy my favorite songs and relieve stress. I am my only audience since I feel shy singing in front of others, so I prefer to sing alone where I feel comfortable.

Gợi ý: 답변에 문법적 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 예를 들어, 'Of course is an art'는 'Of course, it is an art'로 수정해야 하며, 'mail make'는 'make'로 고쳐야 합니다. 또한, 'the word can share with each other'는 'people around the world can share'로 명확히 표현하세요. 문장을 명확하고 자연스럽게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

Ví dụ: Of course, singing is an art that many people around the world enjoy. It can make people happy through meaningful lyrics and beautiful melodies. Singing is something that connects people and allows them to share emotions.

× I really love singing 'cause it helped me to relax more of the time and also I can enjoy my favorite songs in this way, even though I'm not a good singer.

✓ I really love singing 'cause it helps me to relax most of the time and also I can enjoy my favorite songs in this way, even though I'm not a good singer.

The verb 'helped' is in the past tense, but the context indicates a present habitual action, so it should be 'helps' in the present tense to match the meaning.

× I really love singing 'cause it helped me to relax more of the time and also I can enjoy my favorite songs in this way, even though I'm not a good singer.

✓ I really love singing 'cause it helps me to relax most of the time and also I can enjoy my favorite songs in this way, even though I'm not a good singer.

The phrase 'more of the time' is incorrect; the correct quantifier is 'most of the time' to express frequency.

× No, never had the opportunity, but when I was a child I always watch like singing programs on TV and it become a little kind of my dream.

✓ No, I never had the opportunity, but when I was a child I always watched singing programs on TV and it became a little kind of my dream.

The verbs 'watch' and 'become' should be in the past tense 'watched' and 'became' to agree with the past time reference 'when I was a child'.

× No, never had the opportunity, but when I was a child I always watch like singing programs on TV and it become a little kind of my dream.

✓ No, I never had the opportunity, but when I was a child I always watched singing programs on TV and it became a bit of a dream for me.

The phrase 'a little kind of my dream' is awkward; 'a bit of a dream' is a more natural quantifier and expression.

× But yeah, it's something that just helped me to feel better with myself and my vitamin.

✓ But yeah, it's something that just helped me to feel better about myself and my mood.

The phrase 'feel better with myself and my vitamin' is incorrect; 'feel better about myself' is the correct expression. 'My vitamin' seems out of context and likely a mishearing or error; 'my mood' fits better.

× So yes, I am my only public and I just feel comfortable in that way 'cause I can feel shy with other people.

✓ So yes, I am my only audience and I just feel comfortable that way because I can feel shy with other people.

The phrase 'I am my only public' is incorrect; 'my only audience' is the correct term. Also, 'in that way' is better as 'that way' for natural phrasing.

× It's like something that the word can share with each other.

✓ It's like something that the world can share with each other.

The word 'word' is a typo and should be 'world'. Also, 'share with each other' is acceptable, but 'share among each other' or 'share with one another' might be more natural.

× While most of the time for myself, 'cause it's a way to enjoy my favorite songs and also relieve my stress.

✓ Most of the time, I sing for myself because it's a way to enjoy my favorite songs and also relieve my stress.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb, making it incomplete. Adding 'I sing' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.