Singing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Jawaban Anda agak bertele-tele dan kurang terstruktur. Cobalah untuk memberikan jawaban yang lebih singkat dan langsung ke inti, serta gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan efektif. Hindari pengulangan kata dan ungkapan yang tidak perlu.

Ví dụ: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. Although I'm not very skilled, I love singing along to karaoke songs with my friends because it creates a fun and lively atmosphere.

Gợi ý: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan agak membingungkan karena penggunaan kalimat yang tidak terstruktur dan banyak pengulangan. Cobalah untuk menjawab dengan kalimat yang lebih teratur dan gunakan linking words untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren.

Ví dụ: Yes, I wanted to join a choir when I was in high school. There are three main voice parts: soprano, alto, and tenor. I aimed to be an alto because I usually sing the lower melodies in songs.

Gợi ý: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik, namun ada beberapa kalimat yang kurang alami dan agak panjang. Cobalah untuk menggunakan kalimat yang lebih singkat dan jelas serta gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih lancar.

Ví dụ: I prefer to sing in front of my loved ones, such as my parents, boyfriend, and best friend. Singing with them makes me feel comfortable because they support me and sometimes even join in, which feels like a warm hug.

Gợi ý: Jawaban Anda mengandung ide yang baik, tetapi kalimatnya kurang terstruktur dan ada pengulangan. Cobalah untuk menyampaikan pendapat dengan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan gunakan contoh atau alasan yang spesifik untuk mendukung jawaban Anda.

Ví dụ: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it is a hobby that people enjoy. Moreover, singing can act as a form of therapy, helping to reduce stress and improve mental health.

× I just love to shout just to have a melody and to hear music like karaoke basically.

✓ I just love shouting just to have a melody and to hear music like karaoke basically.

The verb 'love' is commonly followed by a gerund (-ing form) when expressing enjoyment of an activity. Using 'love to shout' is not incorrect but 'love shouting' is more natural in this context.

× You just have to sing out of your lungs, be happy and just shout man.

✓ You just have to sing from your lungs, be happy and just shout, man.

The correct preposition to describe singing using one's lungs is 'from' rather than 'out of'. Also, a comma before 'man' is needed as it is a vocative.

× And there's the three groups, right?

✓ And there are the three groups, right?

The subject 'three groups' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' ('there's').

× And I want this Alto 1 So and I want a choir group.

✓ And I wanted to be in Alto 1, so I wanted to join a choir group.

The sentence mixes present and past intentions. Since the context is past ('when I was in middle high school'), past tense and correct pronouns should be used. Also, 'want this Alto 1' is unclear; 'be in Alto 1' is clearer.

× I always got the lower, uh, melody to sing.

✓ I always got the lower, uh, melody to sing.

This sentence is acceptable in past tense as it refers to a past habit. No correction needed.

× Probably in front of my beloved ones like my parents, my boyfriend and my best friend.

✓ Probably in front of my beloved ones, like my parents, my boyfriend, and my best friend.

Adding commas improves clarity. 'Beloved ones' is acceptable but adding commas around the list is necessary.

× I feel like when I'm singing in front of them I'm not being judged and of course they will probably laugh at me and also join me to sing.

✓ I feel like when I'm singing in front of them, I'm not being judged, and of course, they will probably laugh at me and also join me in singing.

Commas are needed to separate clauses for clarity. 'Join me to sing' should be 'join me in singing' for correct verb usage.

× So I feel like when singing in front of them it's giving me like a warm hug in time.

✓ So I feel like when singing in front of them, it's like receiving a warm hug in time.

The phrase 'giving me like a warm hug in time' is awkward. 'It's like receiving a warm hug' is clearer. Also, a comma after the introductory clause improves readability.

× People sing, it's because of hobbies, it's because what they love.

✓ People sing because of their hobbies and because of what they love.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Combining the ideas with proper pronouns and conjunctions improves clarity.

× You know, melody, it can be work for your brains.

✓ You know, melody can work for your brain.

'Be work' is incorrect; 'can work' is correct. Also, 'brain' is usually singular when referring to the organ in general.

× It's really, it's really one of the therapy in psychology that melody or singing can be one of the things when you are stressed, you can do singing too.

✓ It's really one of the therapies in psychology that melody or singing can be one of the things you can do when you are stressed.

'Therapy' should be plural 'therapies' here. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.