Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like singing? Why?
Thí sinh
Yes, I like singing so much when I was a child and now I'm a home singer. It's like a little professional, but I love singing you and I was started to 8 I think, with an American songs.
Giám khảo
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
Thí sinh
No, but I went to musical instrumental courses and piano, guitar and etcetera, but never singing. But I learned by myself at home.
Giám khảo
Who do you want to sing for?
Thí sinh
My family. This is my dream. I want to write a song for my family because I really love my family. I'm really obsessed about my family and my pets, so if I had a chance, I'd ride. I'll write for my family and my pets.
Giám khảo
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
Thí sinh
Yes, of course, everyone likes singing, but generally some people don't like singing because they don't have any talent about singing. They think like that. But if I if we gave a chance to anyone, they really love singing. Singing is really good, like dancing. I don't like dancing, but I like dancing by myself.
Do you like singing? Why?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: Cevabınızda dilbilgisi ve anlam açısından daha net ve doğal ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, cümlenizi daha kısa ve öz tutarak, neden şarkı söylemeyi sevdiğinizi açıkça belirtmelisiniz.
Ví dụ: Yes, I have loved singing since I was a child. I started singing at the age of eight, mostly American songs. Now, I enjoy singing at home as a hobby.
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: Cevabınızı daha akıcı ve tutarlı hale getirmek için bağlaçlar kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, "etcetera" yerine spesifik örnekler vermek daha etkili olur.
Ví dụ: No, I have never taken singing lessons, but I attended courses for musical instruments like piano and guitar. However, I taught myself how to sing at home.
Who do you want to sing for?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: Cümlenizde bazı ifadeler anlam açısından karışık. Daha açık ve mantıklı cümleler kurmalısınız. Ayrıca, "obsessed" kelimesi yerine daha uygun bir kelime seçmelisiniz.
Ví dụ: I want to sing for my family because they mean a lot to me. My dream is to write a song dedicated to them and also to my pets, who I love very much.
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: Cevabınızı daha mantıklı ve akıcı yapmak için cümlelerinizi sadeleştirin ve gereksiz tekrarları azaltın. Ayrıca, fikirlerinizi daha net ifade edin.
Ví dụ: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to people. Although some think they lack talent and avoid singing, if given a chance, most would enjoy it. Singing is similar to dancing; I don't like dancing in public, but I enjoy it alone.
× Yes, I like singing so much when I was a child and now I'm a home singer.
✓ Yes, I liked singing so much when I was a child and now I'm a home singer.
The verb 'like' should be in the past tense 'liked' to correctly refer to a past habit or feeling when the subject was a child.
× It's like a little professional, but I love singing you and I was started to 8 I think, with an American songs.
✓ It's like I'm a little professional, but I love singing and I started at 8, I think, with American songs.
The phrase 'like a little professional' is unclear; 'like I'm a little professional' is clearer. 'I love singing you' is incorrect; it should be 'I love singing'. 'I was started to 8' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I started at 8'. Also, 'an American songs' is incorrect; 'American songs' without 'an' is correct.
× No, but I went to musical instrumental courses and piano, guitar and etcetera, but never singing.
✓ No, but I went to musical instrument courses for piano, guitar, etc., but never for singing.
The phrase 'musical instrumental courses' is awkward; 'musical instrument courses' is better. Also, 'and etcetera' is redundant; 'etc.' suffices. Adding 'for' before 'piano, guitar' clarifies the meaning.
× But I learned by myself at home.
✓ But I have learned by myself at home.
Since the learning is relevant to the present, the present perfect tense 'have learned' is more appropriate than simple past 'learned'.
× Who do you want to sing for?
✓ Who do you want to sing to?
The verb 'sing' is usually followed by 'to' when indicating the audience or person receiving the singing.
× so if I had a chance, I'd ride.
✓ so if I had a chance, I'd write.
The word 'ride' is incorrect in context; the intended verb is 'write' as the student wants to write songs.
× I'll write for my family and my pets.
✓ I'll write songs for my family and my pets.
Adding 'songs' clarifies the object of 'write' and improves sentence clarity.
× everyone likes singing, but generally some people don't like singing because they don't have any talent about singing.
✓ everyone likes singing, but generally some people don't like singing because they don't have any talent for singing.
The preposition 'about' is incorrect here; 'talent for singing' is the correct collocation.
× They think like that.
✓ They think that way.
The phrase 'think like that' is less natural; 'think that way' is the correct idiomatic expression.
× But if I if we gave a chance to anyone, they really love singing.
✓ But if we gave anyone a chance, they would really love singing.
The sentence has redundancy and incorrect conditional structure; 'if we gave anyone a chance' and 'they would really love singing' is the correct conditional form.
× Singing is really good, like dancing.
✓ Singing is really good, like dancing is.
The comparison is incomplete; adding 'is' after 'dancing' completes the comparison.
× I don't like dancing, but I like dancing by myself.
✓ I don't like dancing with others, but I like dancing by myself.
Clarifying 'dancing by myself' by contrasting with 'dancing with others' improves meaning and pronoun use.