Singing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is quite long and a bit redundant. Try to be more concise and directly answer the question first, then add specific supporting details using linking words for coherence. Avoid vague phrases like 'some sort of boredom' and clarify your points.

Ví dụ: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax when I'm bored. For instance, I often sing while showering or studying alone. Additionally, I took music classes as a child, which increased my interest in singing.

Gợi ý: Your answer lacks clarity and has some grammatical errors. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect ideas. Be specific about what you learned and avoid vague expressions like 'sometimes'.

Ví dụ: Yes, I learnt to sing during the lockdown. At school, we had basic lessons focusing on folk and traditional songs. Additionally, I took private lessons where I mostly studied classical music and even took my first singing exam.

Gợi ý: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and some repetition. Use correct expressions like 'makes me happy and cheerful' and avoid repeating 'for myself'. Also, try to explain why you prefer singing for yourself with specific reasons.

Ví dụ: I usually sing for myself because it makes me feel happy and cheerful. I enjoy singing K-pop, Hindi, rap, and R&B songs since they suit my voice well and bring out my best performance.

Gợi ý: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words. Instead of repeating 'everyone', try synonyms and explain why singing brings happiness with more detail.

Ví dụ: Yes, singing can definitely bring happiness to people. For example, at a flea market, there was a live singing show where the audience enthusiastically joined in. This created a joyful atmosphere as everyone sang wholeheartedly together.

× Well, that's a really interesting and personal question. I would say.

✓ Well, that's a really interesting and personal question, I would say.

The original sentence 'I would say.' is a sentence fragment and does not form a complete sentence on its own. It should be connected to the previous sentence with a comma to form a complete thought.

× Also, I like to mention that I used to do music a lot as a child and even took a couple of local classes to enhance my.

✓ Also, I like to mention that I used to do music a lot as a child and even took a couple of local classes to enhance my skills.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'enhance my' which is incomplete. It needs an object such as 'skills' to complete the meaning.

× Yes, I learned how to sing during lockdown.

✓ Yes, I learnt how to sing during lockdown.

In British English, which is commonly used in India, the past tense of 'learn' is 'learnt' rather than 'learned'. Using 'learnt' is more appropriate here.

× I took some lessons in school but they weren't particularly advanced in or in depth.

✓ I took some lessons in school but they weren't particularly advanced or in depth.

The phrase 'advanced in or in depth' is incorrect. The preposition 'in' before 'or' is unnecessary and should be removed for correct usage.

× Some students had private lessons of course, and also me.

✓ Some students had private lessons of course, and so did I.

The phrase 'and also me' is incorrect. The correct form is 'and so did I' to indicate that the speaker also had private lessons.

× We learned sometimes and some folk songs to accompany traditional music.

✓ We learned some hymns and some folk songs to accompany traditional music.

The phrase 'learned sometimes' is incorrect and unclear. It likely intended to say 'some hymns' or a similar phrase. Correcting to 'some hymns' makes the sentence meaningful.

× I usually sing for myself as it gives me happy and cheerful.

✓ I usually sing for myself as it makes me happy and cheerful.

The phrase 'gives me happy and cheerful' is incorrect because 'happy' and 'cheerful' are adjectives and need a verb like 'makes' to describe the effect on the speaker.

× When I was in a flea market, they had a live singing show.

✓ When I was at a flea market, they had a live singing show.

The correct preposition to use with 'flea market' is 'at' rather than 'in' to indicate location.

× It was very happy moment for everyone as everyone from the bottom of their hearts sang.

✓ It was a very happy moment for everyone as everyone sang from the bottom of their hearts.

The phrase 'very happy moment' needs the article 'a' before it. Also, 'everyone from the bottom of their hearts sang' is awkward; it should be 'everyone sang from the bottom of their hearts' for correct word order.