Singing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Correct basic idea but fix grammar and reduce redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague or incorrect phrases (e.g. "singing in", "seeing pop song").

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy singing because it relaxes me and boosts my mood. For example, my mother used to sing lullabies when I was a child, which sparked my interest in music. Now I mainly sing pop songs, and sometimes I try jazz or J‑pop to challenge myself.

Gợi ý: Good structure and relevant details. Improve naturalness by combining sentences with linking words and being slightly more concise. Check minor grammar (e.g. use 'mother' for formality) and avoid repeating similar ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, I have. My mother, who is a music teacher, taught me basic techniques such as breathing and pitch control when I was a child. Moreover, I took several lessons at school, which improved my vocal range and confidence.

Gợi ý: Clear idea but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use a direct topic sentence, then add one specific example and a linking word. Make endings complete (avoid sentence fragments).

Ví dụ: I would like to sing for my family because it lets me express affection. For instance, I often perform a gentle song at family gatherings to help everyone relax and show my appreciation.

Gợi ý: Answer has good points but contains serious errors (e.g. 'Senate') and an unfinished final sentence. Use linking phrases and give a complete, specific example. Keep to at most four sentences and check word choice.

Ví dụ: Yes, definitely. Singing is uplifting because it helps people express emotions and relieve stress. In addition, it brings people together; for example, a community concert or sing‑along night can create a strong sense of belonging among participants.

× Yes, I love singing in.

✓ Yes, I love singing.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect and unnecessary after 'singing'. Use no preposition after 'love' plus verb-ing. Suggestion: say 'I love singing' or 'I love to sing'.

× My mother used to sing to me when I was a child which inspired my interest in music and now singing makes me feel happy and relaxed.

✓ My mother used to sing to me when I was a child, which inspired my interest in music, and now singing makes me feel happy and relaxed.

This sentence needs commas to connect clauses clearly and separate the nonrestrictive relative clause 'which inspired my interest in music'. The original runs clauses together causing structure problems. Suggestion: add commas as shown to improve readability.

× I especially enjoy seeing pop song and occasionally try jazz or J pop.

✓ I especially enjoy singing pop songs and occasionally try jazz or J-pop.

The verb 'seeing' is wrong; use 'singing' to match context. 'Pop song' should be plural 'pop songs'. 'J pop' should be hyphenated as 'J-pop'. Suggestion: use 'singing pop songs' or 'listening to pop songs' depending on meaning.

× Yes I have.

✓ Yes, I have.

Missing comma after 'Yes' is a punctuation issue affecting fluency. Adding a comma is standard in written responses. Suggestion: write 'Yes, I have.'

× My mom is a music teacher and she taught me how to sing when I was a child, so I learned basic techniques like breathing and pitch control.

✓ My mom is a music teacher and she taught me how to sing when I was a child, so I learned basic techniques like breathing and pitch control.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable. No change to pronoun usage is required. (Included for completeness.)

× I also took several lessons at school which helped me improve my confidence and range.

✓ I also took several lessons at school, which helped me improve my confidence and range.

Add a comma before 'which' to mark the nonrestrictive clause. Tenses are consistent past. Suggestion: include the comma for clarity.

× I would like to sing for my family because singing helps me express my love and emotions to them.

✓ I would like to sing for my family because singing helps me express my love and emotions to them.

The sentence is acceptable. 'Express ... to them' is grammatical, though 'express my love and emotions' without 'to them' could be smoother. No obligatory preposition error.

× Sometimes I think a gentle song at family gathering to make them feel relaxed and appreciate.

✓ Sometimes I sing a gentle song at family gatherings to make them feel relaxed and appreciated.

Original lacks a verb and has noun number errors. 'I think' is incorrect here; context requires 'I sing'. 'Family gathering' should be plural 'family gatherings' for general statements. 'Appreciate' should be passive adjective 'appreciated'. Suggestion: use active verb 'sing' and correct noun forms and adjective.

× Yes, definitely Senate is very uplifting because it helps people express emotion and relieve stress, which makes them feel happier.

✓ Yes, definitely singing is very uplifting because it helps people express emotion and relieve stress, which makes them feel happier.

'Senate' is a wrong word; likely intended 'singing'. Replace with 'singing'. The rest of the sentence is fine; use commas to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: proofread for mispronounced words transcribed incorrectly.

× Not only that, but it also brings people together for example, a community concert or sing along night creates a strong sense of belonging and.

✓ Not only that, but it also brings people together. For example, a community concert or sing-along night creates a strong sense of belonging.

The original runs clauses together and ends unfinished. Split into two sentences: introduce the example with 'For example,' and use 'sing-along' with a hyphen. Remove the trailing 'and'. Suggestion: finish thoughts and avoid run-on sentences.