Singing— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 答えは明確ですが、文が長くて繰り返しがあり、文法ミスと語順の不自然さがあります。まずトピック文で直接答え（例：Yes, I enjoy singing.）を述べ、その後に1〜2の具体的な理由を短い文でつなぎ語（because, so, and）を使って説明してください。また、動詞の形や語順（singing out loud relieves stress → singing loudly relieves my stress）を修正し、5文以内に収めて自然な流れにしてください。

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy singing. I find that singing loudly relieves my stress and helps me relax. Also, singing songs I love usually improves my mood and makes me feel happier.

Gợi ý: 内容は伝わりますが、文法ミス（時制や接続詞）、口語表現の混在（wanna）と冗長さがあります。まず簡潔に否定で始め、その後短い過去の説明と未来の希望を明確に分けて述べてください。例：I haven't had the opportunity to take lessons. If I had the chance, I would like to learn to improve my singing. また“wanna”のような口語は避けてください。

Ví dụ: No, I haven't had the opportunity to take singing lessons. I only sang in my high school music class. If I had the chance, I would like to take lessons to improve my singing.

Gợi ý: 答えは感情的で明確ですが、“my mother”の繰り返しや不自然な表現（raised me up）があります。トピック文で直接答え、その後に1〜2の理由を具体的に述べ、言い換えや代名詞を使って繰り返しを避けてください。例えば“she”を使い、“raised me”の方が自然です。また具体例を一つ加えると良いです（例：sing her favorite song）。

Ví dụ: I'd like to sing for my mother. She loves music and raised me on her own, so singing for her would be my way of showing gratitude. For example, I would sing one of her favourite songs.

Gợi ý: 意見は明確ですが文が不自然で語順や表現に誤りがあります（‘feels them good’は誤用）。論理を明確にするためにまず肯定し、2つの理由を簡潔に述べてください。接続詞（for example, and, if）を適切に使い、具体例や結果を加えると説得力が増します。

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. Singing together can create a strong sense of connection among people, and when voices blend well it can lift everyone's mood. For example, people at a concert or a choir rehearsal often feel happier afterwards.

× Yes I do because I like music and like singing out loud relieves stress and relaxes me and also singing the songs that I really like makes my mood good.

✓ Yes, I do, because I like music, and singing out loud relieves stress and relaxes me; also, singing the songs that I really like improves my mood.

The sentence uses 'makes my mood good' which is awkward; an adverb/adjective choice is incorrect. Use 'improves my mood' for natural expression. Also add commas and a semicolon to separate clauses for clarity. Ensure parallel structure: 'relieves stress and relaxes me; also, singing ... improves my mood.' Suggestion: Use more natural collocations (improves my mood) and punctuation to separate ideas.

× No, I didn't have any opportunity to learn how to sing.

✓ No, I didn't have any opportunity to learn how to sing.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable for past-tense situation. No change required. (Included for completeness.)

× I just sang songs in the music class in my high school and that's it.

✓ I only sang songs in my high school music class, and that was it.

The original word order is clumsy. Reordering to 'only sang songs in my high school music class' makes the meaning clearer. 'That's it' in past context is better as 'that was it.' Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and place modifiers next to the words they modify.

× I if I have an opportunity or wanna learn how to sing because I want to sing better than now.

✓ If I have an opportunity, I would like to learn how to sing because I want to sing better than I do now.

Multiple issues: incorrect word order and informal 'wanna'. Use conditional 'If I have an opportunity, I would like...' or 'I will learn' depending on meaning. Also add 'I do' after 'better than' to complete the comparison. Suggestion: Avoid informal contractions in formal speech and complete comparative structures.

× I want to sing for my mother because my mother likes music and my mother is the most important person for me because she raised me up.

✓ I want to sing for my mother because she likes music, and she is the most important person to me because she raised me.

Repeating 'my mother' is redundant; use pronoun 'she'. 'Most important person for me' is better as 'most important person to me.' 'Raised me up' is nonstandard; use 'raised me.' Suggestion: Use pronouns to avoid repetition and choose standard prepositions (to me).

× I want to show how thankful I am through singing.

✓ I want to show how grateful I am by singing.

'Thankful' is acceptable but 'grateful' is more natural here. 'Through singing' is grammatical but 'by singing' is a more common collocation. Suggestion: Prefer natural collocations: 'show how grateful I am by singing.'

× Yes I do, because singing a song together enables them to feel a strong bond and also if a great harmony is created during their song it really feels them good.

✓ Yes, I do, because singing a song together enables people to feel a strong bond, and if a great harmony is created during the song, it makes them feel really good.

Problems: pronoun reference 'them' unclear; use 'people' or 'listeners'. 'It really feels them good' is ungrammatical—correct form is 'it makes them feel good.' Word order and adverb placement improved: 'feel really good.' Suggestion: Use clear subjects and proper verb patterns: 'make someone feel adjective.'