Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you make a list when you shop?
Thí sinh
Yes, I will make a list when I go shopping because it helps me save the time and buy the things more quickly. For example, if I want to buy a bed and pillows, I'll ask the waiters where they where they are and I can go there.
Giám khảo
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
Thí sinh
Yes I do. I often create A to do list in the morning for example, I plan to finish the work and write them down and I compress the thing 1 by 1 and finally I finish it. It really works.
Giám khảo
Why don't some people like making lists?
Thí sinh
Because some people think it is time consuming for them to make list, but actually making A to do list can help them finish the work or do things more efficiently.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
Thí sinh
I prefer to make a list on my phone because I can set up a timesheet for my plan. The phone will ring when the plan is coming so I can do the thing 1 by 1.
Do you make a list when you shop?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答总体清晰,但存在重复和一些语法/用词错误(如“waiters”应为“staff”或“shop assistants”,以及重复短语“where they where they are”)。建议:1) 开头用一句主题句直接回答(例如:Yes, I always make a shopping list.);2) 用一到两句具体支持并用连接词(for example, so, because)保持连贯;3) 避免冗余,注意正确词汇和语法。可在练习中替换不准确词汇并修正句子顺序。
Ví dụ: Yes, I always make a shopping list because it saves time and helps me shop efficiently. For example, when I need a bed and pillows, I check my list and ask the store staff where those items are, so I can go straight to that section.
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答表达意图明确但存在语法和用词问题(大写不当、短语“compress the thing 1 by 1”不自然)。建议:1) 用清晰的主题句(Yes, I make a to-do list every morning.);2) 用连词连接细节(for example, then, so);3) 用更自然的动词短语(work through tasks one by one, tick items off)。练习用正确短语描述步骤并避免直译表达。
Ví dụ: Yes, I make a to-do list every morning. For example, I write down the tasks I need to complete, then I work through them one by one and tick them off, which helps me stay organised.
Why don't some people like making lists?
Điểm: 68.0Gợi ý: 回答包含观点和反驳,但句子有些笨拙(time consuming, make list 的冠词和形式问题)。建议:1) 先给出原因(Some people find lists time-consuming or restrictive),2) 随后用逻辑连接词说明你的看法(however, in fact)并给出具体好处;3) 注意冠词与词序。
Ví dụ: Some people find making lists time-consuming or restrictive. However, in fact, a to-do list can help them prioritise tasks and complete work more efficiently.
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
Điểm: 72.0Gợi ý: 回答明确且有理由,但词汇和表达可以更自然(timesheet 不太合适,the phone will ring when the plan is coming 不够地道)。建议:1) 用更合适的词汇(set reminders, notifications);2) 用连接词解释好处(so, which means);3) 用简洁句子避免口语化数字“1 by 1”。
Ví dụ: I prefer making lists on my phone because I can set reminders and get notifications. This means I can follow my schedule and complete tasks one by one without forgetting anything.
× Yes, I will make a list when I go shopping because it helps me save the time and buy the things more quickly.
✓ Yes, I make a list when I go shopping because it helps me save time and buy things more quickly.
你使用了“will”表达习惯性或经常发生的动作时不恰当。此处讨论的是经常性的习惯(每次去购物都会做),英文通常用一般现在时表示习惯性动作,所以应改为“I make a list”。另外去掉“the time”和“the things”中的定冠词,英文中谈论泛指的“时间”或“东西”不用“the”。
× For example, if I want to buy a bed and pillows, I'll ask the waiters where they where they are and I can go there.
✓ For example, if I want to buy a bed and pillows, I'll ask the sales assistants where they are and then I can go there.
句中有重复“where they where they are”,属于多余重复。还使用了“waiters”指商店里的人不准确,应使用“sales assistants”或“shop assistants”。在连接两个动作时用“and then”更自然,表示先问再过去。
× Yes I do. I often create A to do list in the morning for example, I plan to finish the work and write them down and I compress the thing 1 by 1 and finally I finish it.
✓ Yes I do. I often create a to-do list in the morning. For example, I plan the tasks, write them down, and complete the tasks one by one until I finish them.
“A to do list”中冠词和词形应为“小写a”和连字符“to-do list”;“the work”不够具体,改为“the tasks”更贴切;“write them down”保留,但原句缺少标点且句子拼接混乱。“compress the thing 1 by 1”是错误用词,应使用“complete/finish the tasks one by one”。最后代词一致性也需调整。
× Because some people think it is time consuming for them to make list, but actually making A to do list can help them finish the work or do things more efficiently.
✓ Because some people think it is time-consuming for them to make a list, but actually making a to-do list can help them finish work or do things more efficiently.
“make list”缺少不定冠词,应为“make a list”。“A to do list”大小写和连字符不正确,应为“a to-do list”。“time-consuming”为复合形容词需连字符。“the work”在泛指时去掉“the”。
× I prefer to make a list on my phone because I can set up a timesheet for my plan.
✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because I can set up a timetable or reminder for my plan.
“timesheet”通常指工作时长记录,不是用于计划提醒,应使用“timetable”或“reminder”。时态本句为一般现在时,用法正确,只需改词以符合语境。
× The phone will ring when the plan is coming so I can do the thing 1 by 1.
✓ The phone will ring when the reminder goes off so I can do the tasks one by one.
原句“the plan is coming”不自然,用“when the reminder goes off”更贴切。“the thing 1 by 1”也不地道,应为“tasks one by one”。保留“will ring”表示将来的动作是可以的,但更自然的是用具体名词“reminder”。