Shoes— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 답변이 자연스럽고 명확하지만, 문장 길이가 다소 길고 중복되는 표현이 있습니다. 좀 더 간결하게 핵심을 전달하고, 연결어를 사용해 문장 간 논리적 흐름을 강화하세요.

Ví dụ: I don't buy shoes often because my current ones last a long time. Therefore, I usually purchase new shoes only when the old ones are worn out, which happens about once or twice a year.

Gợi ý: 답변이 자연스럽고 구체적이며 연결어도 적절히 사용되었습니다. 다만, 'Plus' 대신 더 공식적인 연결어를 사용하면 좋겠습니다.

Ví dụ: Yes, I have bought shoes online before. It was very convenient because I didn't have to visit a physical store or try on multiple pairs. Moreover, I could easily compare different styles and prices from various websites, which saved me a lot of time.

Gợi ý: 답변에 문법적 오류와 중복 표현이 있습니다('visit invest', 'last long longer'). 문장을 명확하고 간결하게 수정하고, 연결어를 사용해 논리적 흐름을 개선하세요.

Ví dụ: I usually spend at least $100 on shoes each year because I don't buy them often. However, I prefer to invest in good quality shoes that last longer. Although I try to save money, replacing worn-out shoes is necessary to stay comfortable and look presentable.

Gợi ý: 답변이 전반적으로 좋으나, 'so worth worth'와 같은 중복 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 더 간결하게 다듬고, 연결어를 적절히 사용해 보세요.

Ví dụ: I prefer shoes that are both fashionable and comfortable because I believe it's important to look good and feel good. For example, when I buy shoes costing over $100, I expect them to be stylish and comfortable, making the investment worthwhile due to their durability.

× I prefer to visit invest in good quality shoes that last long longer.

✓ I prefer to invest in good quality shoes that last longer.

The phrase 'visit invest' is incorrect because 'visit' is unnecessary and causes confusion. The correct phrase is 'invest in' when talking about spending money on something valuable. Also, 'last long longer' is redundant; 'last longer' is sufficient.

× Although I try to save money, it's necessary to replace worn out shoes from time to time to stay comfortable and look presentable.

✓ Although I try to save money, it's necessary to replace worn-out shoes from time to time to stay comfortable and look presentable.

The phrase 'worn out' should be hyphenated as 'worn-out' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. This clarifies that the shoes are in a worn-out condition.

× For instance, when I buy shoes that cost over $100, I expect them to be stylish, but they're so worth worth the investment in terms of comfort and durability.

✓ For instance, when I buy shoes that cost over $100, I expect them to be stylish, but they're so worth the investment in terms of comfort and durability.

The word 'worth' is repeated twice ('worth worth'), which is a typographical error. Removing the duplicate 'worth' corrects the sentence.