Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like buying shoes? How often?
Thí sinh
I really like buying shoes and I'm really into Jordans and some campers and I mostly prefer Nike and editors for my shoes and I frequently buy it like every month you can say or maybe after every two months.
Giám khảo
Have you ever bought shoes online?
Thí sinh
Yeah, I've got some of them. Like I used online platforms from Nike and it does and they were quite fast and had a good experience because I'm pretty sure with my shoe size, so I don't need to bother myself to go to a physical store.
Giám khảo
How much money do you usually spend on shoes?
Thí sinh
It depends over the quality of the shoe and how popular they are. So if I'm really into it, so I'm ready to spend about 100 to $200 and if it's just a normal day shoe I'm just keeping it till $100. And yeah, mostly my shoes ranges from 100 to $300.
Giám khảo
Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?
Thí sinh
For me for me the basic rule is the shoe should be fashionable and it should be comfortable. So I don't really bother to go for either one of them because I know it's something in between what I prefer. So I have no clear answer for it.
Do you like buying shoes? How often?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some grammatical errors and redundancies. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating phrases, and use correct brand names. Also, keep your answer concise and natural.
Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, especially brands like Jordans, Camper, Nike, and Adidas. I usually buy new shoes every one or two months, depending on my needs.
Have you ever bought shoes online?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: Your answer lacks clarity and contains some awkward phrasing. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, use linking words to connect ideas, and avoid unnecessary fillers. Also, be specific about your experience.
Ví dụ: Yes, I have bought shoes online, mainly from Nike's official website. The delivery was fast, and since I know my shoe size well, I find online shopping very convenient compared to visiting physical stores.
How much money do you usually spend on shoes?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: Your answer is generally clear but could be more concise and better structured. Avoid repeating phrases and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, be consistent with currency format.
Ví dụ: The amount I spend on shoes depends on their quality and popularity. For shoes I really like, I usually spend between $100 and $200, while for everyday shoes, I keep it under $100. Overall, my shoe budget ranges from $100 to $300.
Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: Your answer is repetitive and a bit unclear. Try to give a direct response with a clear opinion, supported by reasons or examples. Avoid repeating phrases and keep your answer concise.
Ví dụ: I prefer shoes that are both fashionable and comfortable because I believe style and comfort are equally important when choosing footwear.
× I really like buying shoes and I'm really into Jordans and some campers and I mostly prefer Nike and editors for my shoes and I frequently buy it like every month you can say or maybe after every two months.
✓ I really like buying shoes and I'm really into Jordans and some Campers and I mostly prefer Nike and Adidas for my shoes and I frequently buy them like every month, you can say, or maybe after every two months.
The word 'campers' should be capitalised as it is a brand name 'Campers'. 'Editors' seems to be a mistake for 'Adidas', another shoe brand. Also, 'buy it' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural, so it should be 'buy them'. This is a singular and plural issue (ID 1).
× Yeah, I've got some of them. Like I used online platforms from Nike and it does and they were quite fast and had a good experience because I'm pretty sure with my shoe size, so I don't need to bother myself to go to a physical store.
✓ Yeah, I've got some of them. Like I used online platforms from Nike and they were quite fast and I had a good experience because I'm pretty sure about my shoe size, so I don't need to bother myself to go to a physical store.
The phrase 'it does' is unclear and incorrect here; it should be removed. 'They were quite fast' correctly refers to 'platforms' (plural). Also, 'pretty sure with my shoe size' should be 'pretty sure about my shoe size'. The main issue is with singular/plural reference and preposition use (ID 1 and 11).
× It depends over the quality of the shoe and how popular they are. So if I'm really into it, so I'm ready to spend about 100 to $200 and if it's just a normal day shoe I'm just keeping it till $100. And yeah, mostly my shoes ranges from 100 to $300.
✓ It depends on the quality of the shoe and how popular they are. So if I'm really into it, I'm ready to spend about $100 to $200, and if it's just a normal day shoe, I keep it till $100. And yeah, mostly my shoes range from $100 to $300.
The phrase 'depends over' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'depends on' (ID 11). Also, 'shoes ranges' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; it should be 'shoes range' (ID 27). The phrase 'I'm just keeping it' is better as 'I keep it' for clarity and tense consistency.
× And yeah, mostly my shoes ranges from 100 to $300.
✓ And yeah, mostly my shoes range from $100 to $300.
The subject 'shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'range' not 'ranges'. This is a subject-verb agreement error (ID 27).
× So if I'm really into it, so I'm ready to spend about 100 to $200 and if it's just a normal day shoe I'm just keeping it till $100.
✓ So if I'm really into it, I'm ready to spend about $100 to $200, and if it's just a normal day shoe, I keep it till $100.
The conjunction 'so' is unnecessarily repeated after 'if' clause; it should be removed for correct sentence structure (ID 16). Also, commas are needed for clarity.
× For me for me the basic rule is the shoe should be fashionable and it should be comfortable. So I don't really bother to go for either one of them because I know it's something in between what I prefer. So I have no clear answer for it.
✓ For me, the basic rule is the shoe should be fashionable and comfortable. So I don't really bother to choose either one of them because I prefer something in between. So I have no clear answer for it.
The phrase 'for me for me' is repeated unnecessarily. 'Bother to go for either one of them' is awkward; 'bother to choose either one of them' is better. 'It's something in between what I prefer' is unclear; better phrased as 'I prefer something in between'. These are pronoun and sentence structure issues (ID 12 and 26).