Shoes— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 답변이 자연스럽고 직접적이지만, 'Umm'과 같은 불필요한 말버릇을 줄이고, 문장을 더 간결하게 구성하는 것이 좋습니다. 또한, 'sports shoes' 대신 'athletic shoes'와 같은 다양한 어휘를 사용해 보세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and usually purchase athletic shoes once a month because I like to stay active.

Gợi ý: 중복된 단어('I I')와 문법 오류('on online')를 수정해야 합니다. 또한, 'rapidest' 대신 'fastest'를 사용하고, 문장을 더 자연스럽게 연결하는 연결어를 활용하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I always buy my shoes online because I think it is the most convenient and fastest way to shop for shoes and clothes.

Gợi ý: 'Umm'과 같은 말버릇을 줄이고, 'monthly money or profits' 대신 'monthly income'을 사용하세요. 또한, 'a great shoes'는 문법적으로 틀리므로 'good shoes'로 수정하고, 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하면 좋습니다.

Ví dụ: I usually spend about 10% of my monthly income on shoes because I believe wearing good shoes is important for making a good impression.

Gợi ý: 문장이 길고 중복된 표현이 많아 명확하지 않습니다. 'convenient' 대신 'comfortable'만 사용하고, 문장을 간결하게 정리하세요. 또한, 문장이 끝나지 않아 완성된 생각을 표현해야 합니다.

Ví dụ: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because they affect not only my appearance but also how I feel throughout the day.

× Yes, actually I I buy my shoes on online always because I think buying some shoes or accessories or clothes on online is the most convenient and rapidest way.

✓ Yes, actually I always buy my shoes online because I think buying shoes, accessories, or clothes online is the most convenient and fastest way.

The phrase 'on online' is incorrect; 'online' is an adverb and does not require a preposition 'on'. Also, 'always' should be placed before the verb 'buy' for correct adverb placement. 'Rapidest' is not commonly used; 'fastest' is the correct superlative form. Additionally, the sentence structure is improved by removing unnecessary words and correcting word order.

× Umm, I think I usually spend 10% of my monthly money or profits because I think wearing a great shoes is the important thing to our appearance.

✓ Umm, I think I usually spend 10% of my monthly income or profits because I think wearing great shoes is important for our appearance.

'Monthly money' is not a natural phrase; 'monthly income' is more appropriate. 'A great shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'the important thing to our appearance' should be 'important for our appearance' for correct preposition use.

× I definitely prefer buying comfortable shoes because I think wearing a convenient and comfortable shoes is the most significant thing that we consider about our appearance because it can affect our.

✓ I definitely prefer buying comfortable shoes because I think wearing convenient and comfortable shoes is the most significant thing we consider about our appearance because it can affect us.

'A convenient and comfortable shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'consider about' is incorrect; 'consider' does not require 'about'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'affect our.' It should be completed as 'affect us' or 'affect our appearance' for clarity.