Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like buying shoes? How often?
Thí sinh
Actually not really and I often brought the shoes half year ones and because I don't have the habit to collect the shoes, I think the shoes just suitable for me and comfortable is enough.
Giám khảo
Have you ever bought shoes online?
Thí sinh
Absolutely. And most of my shoes brought online because I think it it is very convenient. I just purchased online and if they not suitable for me, I can return back to the merchant and I can change new one. So I think and buy shoes online is very excellent.
Giám khảo
How much money do you usually spend on shoes?
Thí sinh
I often brought shoes on a moderate price and it approximately between CN¥500 and CN¥2100, because I think this price shoes are very comfortable and not expensive and it's suitable my identity about the student.
Giám khảo
Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?
Thí sinh
And I prefer the fashionable shoes in the to be honest, I am a TikTok celebrity. I need to take the TikTok video frequently. So I need fashionable shoes to suitable for my outfit. So I prefer the fashionable shoes.
Do you like buying shoes? How often?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 你的回答表达不够自然,语法错误较多,且句子结构混乱。建议简化句子,直接回答问题,并用连词连接补充细节,使表达更流畅。
Ví dụ: I don't really like buying shoes often. I usually buy shoes twice a year because I prefer comfort over quantity.
Have you ever bought shoes online?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法错误和重复,表达不够简洁。建议使用更准确的时态和词汇,避免重复,并用连词使句子更连贯。
Ví dụ: Yes, I have bought most of my shoes online because it is very convenient. If the shoes don't fit, I can easily return or exchange them.
How much money do you usually spend on shoes?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答中语法错误较多,表达不清晰。建议简化句子结构,正确使用介词和冠词,并明确表达价格范围和理由。
Ví dụ: I usually spend between 500 and 2100 Chinese yuan on shoes because I find this price range offers comfortable and affordable options suitable for a student like me.
Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答中有语法错误和重复,表达不够自然。建议直接回答问题,使用连词连接理由,并注意语法准确性。
Ví dụ: To be honest, I prefer fashionable shoes because I am a TikTok celebrity and often make videos. Fashionable shoes help me match my outfits better.
× Actually not really and I often brought the shoes half year ones and because I don't have the habit to collect the shoes, I think the shoes just suitable for me and comfortable is enough.
✓ Actually, not really. I often buy shoes every half year, and because I don't have the habit of collecting shoes, I think shoes that are just suitable for me and comfortable are enough.
这里的动词时态错误,学生使用了过去式'brought',但表达的是经常性的动作,应该用一般现在时'buy'。另外,句子结构不完整,缺少介词'of',以及主谓不一致。建议使用一般现在时表达习惯性动作。
× Absolutely. And most of my shoes brought online because I think it it is very convenient.
✓ Absolutely. And most of my shoes are bought online because I think it is very convenient.
这里动词时态错误,'brought'是过去式,应该用过去分词'bought'与助动词'are'构成被动语态,表示鞋子是被买的。
× I just purchased online and if they not suitable for me, I can return back to the merchant and I can change new one.
✓ I just purchase online, and if they are not suitable for me, I can return them to the merchant and exchange for a new one.
缺少动词'are',导致句子不完整;'return back'重复,'return'本身含有返回意思;'change new one'表达不准确,应为'exchange for a new one'。建议注意动词的完整使用和固定搭配。
× So I think and buy shoes online is very excellent.
✓ So I think buying shoes online is very convenient.
句子结构混乱,'think and buy shoes online'不符合语法,应使用动名词'Buying'作主语;'excellent'用词不当,描述便利性应使用'convenient'。建议理清句子结构,选择合适词汇。
× I often brought shoes on a moderate price and it approximately between CN¥500 and CN¥2100, because I think this price shoes are very comfortable and not expensive and it's suitable my identity about the student.
✓ I often buy shoes at a moderate price, approximately between CN¥500 and CN¥2100, because I think shoes at this price are very comfortable and not expensive, and they suit my identity as a student.
动词时态错误,'brought'应为一般现在时'buy';'on a moderate price'应为'at a moderate price',介词错误;'it's suitable my identity'结构错误,应为'they suit my identity'。建议注意时态和介词的正确使用。
× And I prefer the fashionable shoes in the to be honest, I am a TikTok celebrity.
✓ And I prefer fashionable shoes. To be honest, I am a TikTok celebrity.
'in the'使用错误,句子结构不完整,应去掉;句子应分开表达。建议注意介词的正确使用和句子分割。
× I need fashionable shoes to suitable for my outfit.
✓ I need fashionable shoes to suit my outfit.
'to suitable'错误,'suitable'是形容词,动词应为'suit'。建议区分形容词和动词的用法。