Shoes— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Reduce hesitations and odd word choices, start with a clear topic sentence, and keep answer concise (max 3–4 sentences). Correct vocabulary mistakes (e.g., not “eels and veggies”) and give one clear reason or habit. Use a linking word to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and I usually buy them about once a month. I tend to shop when I get paid, because I like to treat myself. I prefer shoes that are comfortable for everyday use, so comfort is my main priority.

Gợi ý: Be precise with store names and avoid fillers. Begin with a clear statement, then add one or two supporting details using linking words like “because” or “for example.” Mention specific features (variety, price, return policy) succinctly.

Ví dụ: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times. My preferred website is Zappos because it offers a wide variety of shoes, good discounts, and a reliable return policy, which makes shopping risk-free.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct answer and give clear numerical information. Reduce redundancy and correct grammar (use present tense: “I spend” not “I spent”). Explain one reason briefly using a linking phrase like “because” or “due to.”

Ví dụ: On average I spend about $50 on a pair of shoes. I often order internationally, so prices are higher due to shipping and import fees.

Gợi ý: Answer directly, then contrast preferences with a linking word such as “however” or “but.” Fix grammar and be specific: say when you wear each type and why. Limit to 2–3 sentences to avoid repetition.

Ví dụ: I prefer both, but for different occasions. For parties I choose fashionable shoes for style, however for daily wear I pick comfortable, durable shoes so they don’t cause pain or cramps.

× Yes, I absolutely love buying shoes, especially eels and uh, veggies.

✓ Yes, I absolutely love buying shoes, especially heels and, uh, wedges.

The student used incorrect words 'eels' and 'veggies' instead of 'heels' and 'wedges.' This is a vocabulary error that affects meaning and sentence structure; it is not in the provided list exactly but correctable under sentence structure (ID 26). Suggestion: learn common footwear vocabulary and proofread similar-sounding words.

× Uh, I buy shoes once a month when my salary hits and then I buy shoes which are more comfortable on my foot.

✓ I buy shoes once a month when my salary arrives, and I choose shoes that are more comfortable for my feet.

Problems: informal phrase 'when my salary hits' and wrong relative clause and preposition 'on my foot.' These are sentence structure (ID 26) and preposition (ID 11) issues. Use 'when my salary arrives' or 'when I get paid,' use 'choose' instead of repeated 'buy,' and 'comfortable for my feet' is the correct collocation.

× Yes, I have absolutely bought shoes many times online.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes many times online.

Redundant adverb placement 'absolutely' is unnecessary and unnatural here; main issue is adverb placement (ID 20) and tense is present perfect which is correct. Suggestion: place adverbs appropriately: 'I have bought shoes many times online' or 'I have absolutely bought shoes online' though the latter sounds odd.

× My go to place for buying shoes is seen where there are many varieties of shoes like Vegas flats, boots, etcetera at discounted rates and and with uh good refund policy.

✓ My go-to place for buying shoes is Shein, where there are many varieties of shoes like vegan flats, boots, etc., at discounted prices and with a good refund policy.

Multiple errors: 'seen' is incorrect brand name spelling (should be 'Shein') and 'Vegas flats' is likely 'vegan flats' or another type; double 'and and' and 'discounted rates' more natural as 'discounted prices.' Also missing hyphen in 'go-to' and article 'a' before 'good refund policy.' These are sentence structure (ID 26), vocabulary, and article (ID 22) issues. Suggestion: check brand spelling and use correct collocations.

× Yes, I spent quite lots of money to buy shoes because I get my shoes from international orders, so it can get quite expensive considering the fact that you have to pay for logistic as well.

✓ Yes, I spend quite a lot of money on shoes because I order them internationally, so it can get quite expensive considering you have to pay for shipping as well.

Tense inconsistency: 'I spent' (past) vs context present habit; use present tense 'I spend.' 'Quite lots of money' is incorrect; use 'quite a lot of money.' Preposition: 'spend money on.' 'Get my shoes from international orders' is awkward; use 'order them internationally.' 'Logistic' should be 'shipping' or 'logistics' with correct article. These are past/present tense (ID 5/6), quantifier (ID 14), preposition (ID 11), and vocabulary issues. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense and use standard collocations.

× So my average order takes around $50 per shoes.

✓ So my average order costs around $50 per pair of shoes.

Mismatch: 'per shoes' mixes singular/plural; correct phrase is 'per pair of shoes' or 'per shoe' with number. Also verb 'takes' is wrong for cost; use 'costs.' This is singular/plural issue (ID 1) and verb choice. Suggestion: use 'per pair' for footwear and 'costs' for price.

× I prefer both in my opinion.

✓ I prefer both, in my opinion.

Missing comma for clarity, but grammatically acceptable. Main issue is punctuation and style (ID 22). Suggestion: add comma to separate clauses.

× I tend to keep fashionable shoes when I go for parties or celebration, but in my everyday life I tend to wear comfortable shoes and durable shoes with doesn't hurt my feet and muscles cramp.

✓ I tend to keep fashionable shoes for parties or celebrations, but in my everyday life I wear comfortable, durable shoes that don't hurt my feet or cause muscle cramps.

Problems: 'go for parties or celebration' should be 'for parties or celebrations' (preposition and pluralization). Repetition 'tend to' unnecessary. 'Durable shoes with doesn't hurt' is ungrammatical: relative clause needed 'that don't hurt my feet' and 'muscles cramp' should be 'cause muscle cramps.' These are conjunction/use errors (ID 16), subject-verb agreement (ID 27), pluralization (ID 1), and sentence structure (ID 26). Suggestion: use relative pronoun 'that,' ensure subject-verb agreement, and plural forms for count nouns like 'cramps.'