Part 1
Giám khảo
Do you like buying shoes? How often?
Thí sinh
I like to buy shoes and I usually go to buy shoes every week. It makes me feel relaxed and cheerful because shopping with my parents and all my friends is a fine social activity. I enjoy it.
Giám khảo
Have you ever bought shoes online?
Thí sinh
Yeah, I have bought shoes online and I like to buy shoes that way because I think it's a convenient way. For example, I last month I ordered a pair of running shoes after comparing many, many brands and price.
Giám khảo
How much money do you usually spend on shoes?
Thí sinh
I spend about CN¥500 on shoes and I'd like to, uh, comfortable ones. For example, I bought a pair of running shoes and I pay a bit more for comfortable. More comfortable and better one.
Giám khảo
Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?
Thí sinh
I prefer comfortable shoes, uh, because I think it's a convenient to, uh, go for a walk. And for example, I bought a pair of running shoes last month.
Do you like buying shoes? How often?
Điểm: 68.0Gợi ý: 回答要更直接并减少冗余,首句明确回应问题(喜欢与否及频率),随后用一到两句给出具体原因或细节,并使用衔接词使句子更连贯。注意句子长度不要超过五句,避免重复表达“enjoy”或“shopping”。可以把“shopping with my parents and friends”细化成具体场景或频率。
Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and I usually go shopping once a week. I find it relaxing because I often go with my parents and friends, which makes it a social activity. For example, we usually try on several pairs together and give each other opinions before buying.
Have you ever bought shoes online?
Điểm: 72.0Gợi ý: 回答要更流畅并修正语法错误,首句直接肯定并说明原因;用连接词(for example, because)来引出细节,避免重复词汇如“many, many”。提供具体比较标准(尺码、评价、价格)会更有说服力。
Ví dụ: Yes, I have bought shoes online because it's very convenient and saves time. For example, last month I ordered a pair of running shoes after comparing sizes, customer reviews and prices on several websites.
How much money do you usually spend on shoes?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答要结构清晰:先给出具体数字,再说明原因并提供例子。注意语法(I'd like comfortable ones → I prefer comfortable ones)并去掉犹豫语气。把“pay more”用完整表达并限定比较对象(than what)。
Ví dụ: I usually spend about CN¥500 on a pair of shoes because I prefer comfortable ones. For example, I recently paid a bit more than usual for running shoes because they had better cushioning and support.
Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?
Điểm: 66.0Gợi ý: 直接给出偏好并用一到两句具体说明原因及场景,避免填充词(uh)。说明为什么舒适更重要(例如日常活动、健康或工作需要),并给出简短例子。保持句子简洁且连贯。
Ví dụ: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot and need good support. For example, I bought a pair of running shoes last month that are lightweight and have strong arch support, which makes walking much easier.
× I like to buy shoes and I usually go to buy shoes every week.
✓ I like to buy shoes and I usually go shopping for shoes every week.
句子使用现在时,但“go to buy shoes”是不自然的固定搭配。应使用常见表达“go shopping for shoes”或“go buy shoes”。建议使用“go shopping for shoes”使语义更自然流畅。
× It makes me feel relaxed and cheerful because shopping with my parents and all my friends is a fine social activity.
✓ It makes me feel relaxed and cheerful because shopping with my parents and friends is a nice social activity.
原句中“all my friends”显得冗余且结构稍显笨拙。将“all my friends”改为“friends”更自然;将“fine”改为更常用的“nice”。保持现在时态一致。
× Yeah, I have bought shoes online and I like to buy shoes that way because I think it's a convenient way.
✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online, and I like to buy shoes that way because I think it's a convenient method.
这里使用现在完成时“have bought”是正确的,但口语中“Yeah”改为更书面“Yes”。“convenient way”可接受,但“way”前无需冠词或可改为“method”。保持时态一致。
× For example, I last month I ordered a pair of running shoes after comparing many, many brands and price.
✓ For example, last month I ordered a pair of running shoes after comparing many brands and prices.
原句中“For example, I last month I ordered”有重复主语错误,应为“For example, last month I ordered...”。“many, many brands and price”中“price”应为复数“prices”。时态为过去时,使用“last month”配合一般过去时正确。
× I spend about CN¥500 on shoes and I'd like to, uh, comfortable ones.
✓ I spend about CN¥500 on shoes and I'd like them to be comfortable ones.
原句中“I'd like to, uh, comfortable ones”缺少动词结构和宾语,语法不完整。需要完成宾语从句或用“I'd like them to be comfortable”来表达愿望。保持一般现在时描述习惯性花费。
× For example, I bought a pair of running shoes and I pay a bit more for comfortable.
✓ For example, I bought a pair of running shoes and I paid a bit more for comfort.
句中“pay a bit more for comfortable”错误使用形容词作名词。应使用名词“comfort”或用形容词修饰名词如“for more comfort”或“for being more comfortable”。同时句子前半为过去时“bought”,后半应保持过去时“paid”。
× More comfortable and better one.
✓ A more comfortable and better one.
原句缺主语或限定词,应加冠词形成完整名词短语“A more comfortable and better one”或重写为“It was a more comfortable and better pair.”保持过去叙述一致。
× I prefer comfortable shoes, uh, because I think it's a convenient to, uh, go for a walk.
✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I think they're convenient for walking.
原句“it's a convenient to go for a walk”中“convenient”不能直接跟不定式,且“it”指代不明确。应改为“they're convenient for walking”或“it's convenient to go for a walk”二选一,并注意主谓一致(复数鞋子用they)。
× And for example, I bought a pair of running shoes last month.
✓ For example, I bought a pair of running shoes last month.
句首不需要连词“And”。在回答中直接用“For example”更简洁。时态过去式使用正确,仅需删去多余连词以改善句子结构。