Shoes— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Câu trả lời đã rõ ràng nhưng cần sửa lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ, giảm bớt thông tin rườm rà và dùng liên từ hợp lý để mạch lạc hơn. Cụ thể: (1) Sửa lỗi danh từ/động từ (ví dụ: “wide variety of designs”); (2) Tránh lặp ý ("comfortable and durable" đủ); (3) Dùng một câu chủ đề ngắn rồi bổ sung 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ nguồn mua, tần suất) để không vượt 5 câu.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, especially sneakers; I usually buy a new pair about once a month. I collect different styles from brands like Adidas and Nike because they offer a wide range of designs and are generally comfortable and durable.

Gợi ý: Câu trả lời truyền đạt được ý nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và mạch lạc: (1) Sửa lỗi động từ/giới từ (ví dụ: "on Lazada and Shopee" thay vì "the Lazada and Subway platform"); (2) Dùng liên từ để nối ý (e.g., "because" + cụm mô tả rõ ràng); (3) Cung cấp 1 ví dụ cụ thể về lợi ích khi mua online (ví dụ: so sánh giá hoặc đọc đánh giá) để câu thêm thuyết phục.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often buy shoes online on sites like Lazada and Shopee. I prefer shopping online because it’s very popular in Vietnam and makes it easy to compare styles and prices, and to read customer reviews before I buy.

Gợi ý: Ý chính rõ ràng nhưng cần rút gọn câu, chỉnh ngữ pháp và dùng liên từ hợp lý: (1) Thay "new release" bằng "new releases"; (2) Sửa cấu trúc "even I don't wear all of them" thành "even if I don't wear them all"; (3) Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn về số tiền rồi giải thích bằng một câu bổ trợ với ví dụ cụ thể.

Ví dụ: I usually spend about 1,000,000 VND a month on shoes. I buy new sneaker releases regularly to expand my collection, even if I don’t wear every pair.

Gợi ý: Câu trả lời có ý nhưng chứa nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ dùng sai: (1) Dùng số nhiều khi nói chung ("comfortable shoes"); (2) Sửa từ không chính xác như "supported next girl" (có lẽ ý là "supportive sneakers" hoặc "supportive shoes"); (3) Rút gọn thành 1–2 câu rõ ràng, cung cấp một ví dụ cụ thể về loại giày bạn mặc và lý do (giải thích lợi ích rõ ràng).

Ví dụ: I prefer comfortable shoes because they make it easier to walk and do daily activities. For example, I usually wear supportive sneakers when I have to be on my feet all day because they reduce pain and provide good cushioning.

× I enjoy collecting different styles from Global Rent like Adidas, Nike because they offer wide variety of design and the two are usually comfortable and durable.

✓ I enjoy collecting different styles from brands like Adidas and Nike because they offer a wide variety of designs and both are usually comfortable and durable.

The noun 'variety' needs the article 'a' and 'design' should be plural 'designs' to match 'variety of'. 'Global Rent' seems incorrect as a brand phrase; 'brands' is more natural. 'the two' is awkward; use 'both' to refer to the two brands. Suggestion: use 'a wide variety of designs' and 'both' for clarity.

× Yes, I have bought many shoes online from the Lazada and Subway platform.

✓ Yes, I have bought many shoes online from the Lazada and Subway platforms.

When referring to multiple platforms, 'platform' should be plural 'platforms'. Also drop 'the' before platform names unless specific: 'from Lazada and Subway' or 'from the Lazada and Subway platforms'. Suggestion: use plural for countable nouns when referencing more than one.

× I usually use online for many things because it very popular in Vietnam and is made easy to browse different style, design, compare prices and read customer reviews.

✓ I usually shop online for many things because it is very popular in Vietnam and makes it easy to browse different styles and designs, compare prices, and read customer reviews.

'use online' is incorrect; use 'shop online'. The subject 'it' needs 'is' before 'very popular'. 'is made easy' is passive and awkward; 'makes it easy' is active and grammatical. 'style, design' should be plural 'styles and designs'. Also add commas and 'and' for list clarity.

× To be honest I'm not sure about the exact number but I guess I usually spend around 1,000,000 per month on shoes because I'm a big fan of sneakers so I often buy new release to add into my collection even I don't wear all of them.

✓ To be honest I'm not sure about the exact amount, but I guess I usually spend around 1,000,000 per month on shoes because I'm a big fan of sneakers, so I often buy new releases to add to my collection even if I don't wear all of them.

Use 'amount' for money rather than 'number'. 'new release' should be plural 'new releases'. 'add into my collection' is better as 'add to my collection'. Missing conjunction: 'even if I don't wear all of them'. Commas improve readability.

× I prefer the comfortable shoe because they make it easy for me to walk or do daily activity.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because they make it easy for me to walk or do daily activities.

Do not use 'the' with a general plural preference; use plural 'comfortable shoes'. 'daily activity' should be plural 'daily activities'. Ensure subject plurality ('they') matches 'shoes'.

× For example, I usually wear the supported next girl when I have to be on my feet for the whole day because they reduce pains and are practical for any activity I think.

✓ For example, I usually wear supportive sneakers when I have to be on my feet for the whole day because they reduce pain and are practical for any activity, I think.

'supported next girl' is nonsensical; likely intended 'supportive sneakers'. Use adjective 'supportive'. 'reduce pains' should be 'reduce pain' (uncountable). Add a comma before 'I think' and use 'sneakers' to match earlier vocabulary.