Shoes— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and avoid filler words (uh). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details about frequency or examples. Use linking words to connect ideas. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes but not very often. I usually purchase new shoes only when I really need them, for example when my old ones wear out or for a special occasion. Because I'm budgeting, I try to limit impulsive buys.

Gợi ý: Remove repetition and combine ideas with linking words. Give one specific reason why you shop online versus in-store. Aim for a clear topic sentence followed by a supporting detail.

Ví dụ: Yes, I have bought shoes online because it's convenient and often cheaper. However, I also prefer visiting stores so I can try shoes on and make sure they fit properly.

Gợi ý: Be precise and avoid vague phrases like "the whole thing." State a clear range and give one reason for the variation. Use correct currency phrasing and smoother linking.

Ví dụ: It depends on the type of shoes, but I usually spend between $150 and $200 for running shoes because I value cushioning and durability. For everyday shoes I tend to spend much less.

Gợi ý: Use correct grammar for conditionals and avoid filler words. Start with a topic sentence that states your general preference, then give two specific examples with linking words (for instance, however). Keep sentences concise.

Ví dụ: I choose shoes based on the occasion rather than picking one over the other. For example, I wear fashionable shoes for business meetings to look professional, but I always choose comfortable trainers for the gym or long walks.

× I'm trying to be mindful of how much I spend in any, uh, any clothes, any expenses.

✓ I'm trying to be mindful of how much I spend on clothes and other expenses.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'spend' in this context; use 'spend on'. Also 'any, uh, any clothes, any expenses' is repetitive and ungrammatical; combine to 'clothes and other expenses'. Use the gerund 'spend on' + noun phrase.

× So I only buy when it's a necessity, uh, or when.

✓ So I only buy when it's a necessity or when I really need something.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. Add a clause to complete the idea, for example 'when I really need something.' This fixes the sentence structure error.

× Yes of course I definitely bought some shoes online, but I also like to go to the to the store as well so I can try my size and see what actually fits me or not.

✓ Yes, of course I have bought some shoes online, but I also like to go to the store so I can try sizes and see what actually fits me.

The present perfect 'have bought' is more appropriate for life experience questions ('Have you ever...'). Remove repeated 'to the' and 'as well' redundancy. Use plural 'sizes' and omit 'or not' which is unnecessary.

× Let's say if I need to buy shoes for the gym or running example, I can spend around 150 and $200.

✓ Let's say if I need to buy shoes for the gym or for running, I can spend around $150 to $200.

Use 'for running' or 'for running shoes' instead of 'running example'. Add dollar sign before numbers and use range 'from $150 to $200' or 'around $150 to $200'. Include 'for' before 'running' for parallelism.

× It really depend of the event that I'm attending to, uh, if I have a business meeting, I like to buy like fashionable shoes so I can follow the trend.

✓ It really depends on the event I'm attending. If I have a business meeting, I like to buy fashionable shoes so I can follow the trends.

Use 'depends' to agree with singular subject 'it'. The correct preposition is 'on', not 'of', and 'attending to' is unnecessary; use 'attending'. Remove filler 'like' before 'fashionable' and use 'trends' plural or 'the trend' depending on meaning.

× And if I need to go to the gym, I prefer to buy to have like more comfortable shoes or on the day-to-day if I walk outside.

✓ And if I need to go to the gym, I prefer to buy more comfortable shoes for daily use or for walking outside.

The phrase 'prefer to buy to have' is awkward and incorrect. Use 'prefer to buy more comfortable shoes' and clarify purpose with 'for daily use' or 'for walking outside'. Remove filler 'like'.