Shoes— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Reduce repetition, use a clear topic sentence, add one or two specific details and linking words. Keep under five sentences. Correct grammar (e.g. articles, tense) and avoid repeating words like “buy”.

Ví dụ: Yes, I like buying shoes, but not very often. I usually buy a new pair for special occasions such as weddings or ceremonies because a new pair makes me feel comfortable and confident. For example, last year I bought leather shoes for a wedding because they matched my suit and felt good to wear all day.

Gợi ý: Start with a clear direct answer, use linking words (however, but) and give a specific reason and a brief result. Correct grammar (present perfect, articles) and provide a concise example.

Ví dụ: Yes, I have bought shoes online, mainly because prices are lower and there are frequent discounts. However, once I received a pair that did not fit and I could not wear it, so I returned it. Now I check size charts and reviews before buying online.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence with a specific amount, use linking words (but, however) and correct grammar (articles, plural). Be specific about currency and context and keep it concise.

Ví dụ: For everyday shoes I normally spend under 1,000 (local currency) because I prefer practical options. However, for special occasions like my wedding I am willing to spend more to buy a beautiful, high-quality pair.

Gợi ý: Give a direct answer, then contrast past and present with linking words (but, now, although). Fix grammar (plural/singular, verbs) and be specific about reasons (health, activity). Keep it within three sentences.

Ví dụ: Although I liked fashionable shoes when I was younger, now I prefer comfortable shoes. I choose comfort because it is better for my feet and overall health, and I am quite active so supportive shoes help me stay on my feet longer.

× I usually buy buy a shoe especially in special occasion such as weddings or ceremony because I would like to buy a new one and I would like to try it and it will make me comfortable and confident.

✓ I usually buy shoes, especially on special occasions such as weddings or ceremonies, because I would like to buy new ones and try them; they make me feel comfortable and confident.

The student used singular article 'a' incorrectly with a general activity; 'buy a shoe' should be plural 'buy shoes' for habitual action. 'In special occasion' should be 'on special occasions' (preposition and plural). 'Weddings or ceremony' needs plural 'ceremonies'. Use plural pronouns 'them' for 'shoes' and 'new ones' instead of 'a new one' to match plural reference. Also remove duplicated 'buy' and improve sentence flow. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general/habitual actions and match pronouns accordingly.

× Yes I have ones I try to order online because of the price is going down and they have a special discount if I buy the shoes online but unfortunately when I got it I can't wear it.

✓ Yes, I have. I tried to order online because the prices were lower and there was a special discount for buying shoes online, but unfortunately when I received them I couldn't wear them.

This sentence had multiple structure and tense issues. 'Yes I have ones' is unclear; use 'Yes, I have.' The student mixed present perfect and simple past; ordering happened in the past so use past tense 'tried'. 'The price is going down' should be 'the prices were lower' to match past context. 'They have a special discount' should be 'there was a special discount' or 'they offered a discount'. 'When I got it I can't wear it' mixes past and present; change to past 'when I received them I couldn't wear them.' Use plural pronouns for shoes. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and split into shorter clauses for clarity.

× Normally if the shoe for daily life I prefer to spend money less than 1000, but in some special occasions like my wedding date, I spend more money for my shoes because I would like to get a beautiful one.

✓ Normally, for everyday shoes I prefer to spend less than 1000, but on special occasions like my wedding day I spend more on my shoes because I want to get a beautiful pair.

The phrase 'the shoe for daily life' should be 'everyday shoes' (plural). 'Spend money less than 1000' is awkward; use 'spend less than 1000'. 'Wedding date' is unnatural; use 'wedding day'. 'Get a beautiful one' should be 'get a beautiful pair' to refer to shoes. Suggestion: use plural nouns when speaking generally and choose natural collocations ('everyday shoes', 'wedding day', 'a beautiful pair').

× Yeah, it's directed my head even I was young I prefer to buy a fashionable shoes, but from now on I prefer to wear a comfortable shoe because it's make my health is good and also the I I am a active person so.

✓ When I was young, I preferred to buy fashionable shoes, but now I prefer to wear comfortable shoes because they are better for my health and I am an active person.

The original mixes tenses and has incorrect expressions. 'It's directed my head' is unclear and incorrect; replace with 'When I was young' to indicate past preference. 'I prefer to buy a fashionable shoes' has article and number errors; use 'fashionable shoes' (no 'a') and past tense 'preferred' for the earlier time. 'From now on I prefer to wear a comfortable shoe' should be 'now I prefer to wear comfortable shoes' (plural). 'It's make my health is good' is ungrammatical; use 'they are better for my health'. 'The I I am a active person so' contains filler and article error; use 'I am an active person.' Suggestion: keep tense consistent when contrasting past and present, use correct articles ('a' vs none), and match subject-verb and number.