Shoes— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Clarify and correct vocabulary (e.g. “skate shoes” or brand names), use a clear topic sentence, and avoid minor repetition. Briefly add one specific detail about how often (e.g. every three months) with a linking word to improve coherence.

Ví dụ: Yes, I buy shoes fairly often because I go skateboarding a lot. Since I wear skate shoes that get worn down quickly, I usually replace them every three months or so.

Gợi ý: Be more precise and natural with phrasing (avoid “the brand of your website”); give one specific supporting detail like which websites or why it’s convenient, and use a linking word to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes, I often buy shoes online because I stick to a few trusted brands and I know my size in each one. For example, I usually order from the brand’s official website every two to three months because it’s convenient and has reliable returns.

Gợi ý: Correct vocabulary errors (e.g. “scarce” → unclear; likely meant “skate shoes”); give a clear topic sentence stating the price range, then explain the reason with a linking word. Avoid conflicting statements about price and ‘not buying expensive styles.’

Ví dụ: I usually spend between $100 and $200 on a pair of skate shoes, because they wear out quickly from heavy use. For example, I often replace them every three to six months, so I avoid premium-priced styles.

Gợi ý: Good clear preference and reason. Improve naturalness by refining phrasing (e.g. “when my shoes are too tight”), and ensure one linking word to connect reason and example. Keep it concise and natural.

Ví dụ: I prefer comfortable shoes because I bruise and get blisters when shoes are too tight. Therefore I choose cushioned, sporty sneakers instead of fashionable but stiff shoes.

× I usually wear specific brand of scale shoes which wear out quickly from constant use, so I replace them every few months.

✓ I usually wear a specific brand of skate shoes which wear out quickly from constant use, so I replace them every few months.

The sentence is missing an article before 'specific brand' and contains a typo: 'scale' should be 'skate'. Use the indefinite article 'a' before 'specific brand' because it refers to one brand in a general sense. Also correct the word to 'skate shoes' to match the intended meaning.

× For example, I usually order from the brand of your website once every few months.

✓ For example, I usually order from that brand's website once every few months.

The prepositional phrase 'the brand of your website' is unnatural and unclear. Use the possessive form 'that brand's website' or 'the brand's website' to show ownership. This makes the relationship between brand and website clear.

× I usually spend between $100 and $200 on a pair of scares because they wear out quickly from heavy use.

✓ I usually spend between $100 and $200 on a pair of skates because they wear out quickly from heavy use.

The word 'scares' is a misspelling; the intended noun is likely 'skates' or 'sneakers' depending on context. Correct the word to 'skates' if referring to skating shoes. This is a lexical choice rather than a grammar rule, but it affects meaning.

× I prefer comfortable shoes because I bruise and get blisters easily when my shoes are tied.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I bruise and get blisters easily when my shoes are tight.

The adjective 'tied' is incorrect in this context; the correct adjective is 'tight' to indicate shoes that are too snug. 'Tied' refers to fastening laces, not the fit. Use 'tight' to describe the uncomfortable fit that causes blisters.

× For that reason, I choose cushioned, sportive sneakers rather than fashionable but stiff shoes.

✓ For that reason, I choose cushioned, sporty sneakers rather than fashionable but stiff shoes.

The adjective 'sportive' is uncommon in English; the correct adjective is 'sporty' to describe sneakers designed for sport. Replace 'sportive' with 'sporty' for natural, idiomatic English.