Part 1
Giám khảo
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Thí sinh
I think our school has some several rules are restricted. One of the rules is that our clothing, which is we can't use, we can't wear the tank top or something. And also we cannot use cell phones during the class because people cannot focus at all.
Giám khảo
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Thí sinh
I think it is good to make some balance because if school make too much rules then students will get tired, feel tired or they easy to get suspended. So it is not good too many people made-up a suspension.
Giám khảo
Have you ever had a really dedicated teacher?
Thí sinh
Yes, I had it because the school loo was too strict. So I had to say to the teacher about this where it's very strict and this view is don't doesn't related in school, so we don't need to make that strict rule. So I said to the teacher.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer to have more or fewer rules at school?
Thí sinh
I think I prefer to prefer you at school because in three years ago we can use cell phone during the class and it was very useful because I have to use translate to understand the classwork. But for now they're prohibited to use the translate, so it is getting harder to understand the classwork.
Giám khảo
Have you ever had a really strict teacher?
Thí sinh
Yes, I had before when from last year the our attendance rule is changed and more strict and I actually had a excuse for the absence but my teacher didn't accept that excuse so it was very restrictive.
Giám khảo
Would you like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school?
Thí sinh
I think if I were that teacher, I should be more strict for the students because our school is kind of strict for the rules. But it is good when we became adults 'cause when we got a job our river is more strict, so it is good.
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答が不自然で文法的な誤りが多いです。より明確で簡潔な文を使い、文法を正しくすることが必要です。また、具体的な例を挙げて説明を補足すると良いでしょう。
Ví dụ: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students are not allowed to wear tank tops, and using cell phones during class is prohibited because it distracts students from focusing.
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 内容が曖昧で、文法や語彙の誤りも目立ちます。意見をはっきり述べ、理由を具体的に説明し、論理的に話を展開する練習をしましょう。
Ví dụ: I believe there should be a balance in school rules. Too many rules can make students feel stressed and may lead to more suspensions, which is not beneficial for their learning.
Have you ever had a really dedicated teacher?
Điểm: 40.0Gợi ý: 質問に対して直接的な答えがなく、内容が不明瞭です。質問の意図を理解し、具体的な経験や理由を述べる練習をしてください。
Ví dụ: Yes, I have had a dedicated teacher. She always helped me understand difficult topics and was very patient with all students.
Do you prefer to have more or fewer rules at school?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。意見を明確にし、理由を具体的に述べることを意識しましょう。
Ví dụ: I prefer fewer rules at school. For example, three years ago we could use cell phones during class to translate difficult words, which helped me understand the lessons better.
Have you ever had a really strict teacher?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 内容は理解できますが、文法や語順の誤りが多いです。より自然な表現を使い、理由や状況を詳しく説明すると良いでしょう。
Ví dụ: Yes, I had a strict teacher last year. The attendance rules became stricter, and even though I had a valid excuse for my absence, my teacher did not accept it.
Would you like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 回答が不明瞭で、文法的な誤りも多いです。質問に対して明確な意見を述べ、理由を具体的に説明する練習をしましょう。
Ví dụ: If I were a teacher, I would be strict with students because rules help maintain order. Also, strict rules prepare students for the real world where workplaces have many regulations.
× I think our school has some several rules are restricted.
✓ I think our school has several rules that are restricted.
'Some several' is incorrect because 'some' and 'several' both quantify nouns and should not be used together. Use either 'some' or 'several' to indicate quantity, not both.
× I think our school has some several rules are restricted.
✓ I think our school has several rules that are restricted.
The sentence structure is incorrect because 'rules are restricted' is not properly connected. Adding 'that are' clarifies the relationship between 'rules' and 'restricted'.
× One of the rules is that our clothing, which is we can't use, we can't wear the tank top or something.
✓ One of the rules is about our clothing; we can't wear tank tops or similar items.
The phrase 'which is we can't use' is incorrect. Pronouns and relative clauses should be used properly. Simplifying the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.
× And also we cannot use cell phones during the class because people cannot focus at all.
✓ Also, we cannot use cell phones during class because people cannot focus at all.
The preposition 'during the class' is better expressed as 'during class' in this context. 'During class' is the standard expression for referring to the time when class is in session.
× I think it is good to make some balance because if school make too much rules then students will get tired, feel tired or they easy to get suspended.
✓ I think it is good to have some balance because if the school makes too many rules, then students will get tired, feel tired, or easily get suspended.
'Too much rules' is incorrect because 'rules' is countable; use 'too many rules'. Also, 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'school'. 'Some balance' is better expressed as 'have some balance'.
× if school make too much rules then students will get tired
✓ if the school makes too many rules, then students will get tired
The subject 'school' is singular and requires the verb 'makes' in third person singular form. Also, 'too much rules' is incorrect; 'rules' is countable, so 'too many rules' is correct.
× if school make too much rules then students will get tired
✓ if the school makes too many rules, then students will get tired
'Too much' is used with uncountable nouns; 'rules' is countable, so 'too many' is correct.
× or they easy to get suspended.
✓ or they easily get suspended.
'Easy' is an adjective; the adverb 'easily' should be used to modify the verb 'get suspended'.
× So it is not good too many people made-up a suspension.
✓ So it is not good if too many people get suspended.
The phrase 'too many people made-up a suspension' is incorrect. 'Made-up a suspension' is not a correct expression. The intended meaning is likely 'too many people get suspended'.
× Yes, I had it because the school loo was too strict.
✓ Yes, I had one because the school rules were too strict.
'Had it' is vague; 'had one' refers to a dedicated teacher. 'Loo' is likely a typo for 'rule'. 'Was' should be 'were' to agree with plural 'rules'.
× Yes, I had it because the school loo was too strict.
✓ Yes, I had one because the school rules were too strict.
'Loo' is incorrect; it should be 'rules' (plural). Therefore, the verb should be 'were' to agree with plural subject.
× So I had to say to the teacher about this where it's very strict and this view is don't doesn't related in school, so we don't need to make that strict rule.
✓ So I had to tell the teacher that it was very strict and that this view doesn't relate to school, so we don't need to make such strict rules.
The sentence has incorrect pronoun usage and verb forms. 'Don't doesn't' is incorrect; use 'doesn't'. 'Related' should be 'relate'. Also, 'say to the teacher about this' is better as 'tell the teacher that'.
× So I said to the teacher.
✓ So I told the teacher.
The verb 'say' is usually followed by 'to someone'; 'tell' is more appropriate when indicating the person being informed.
× I think I prefer to prefer you at school because in three years ago we can use cell phone during the class and it was very useful because I have to use translate to understand the classwork.
✓ I think I prefer fewer rules at school because three years ago we could use cell phones during class and it was very useful because I had to use a translator to understand the classwork.
'Prefer to prefer you' is incorrect; likely meant 'prefer fewer rules'. 'In three years ago' should be 'three years ago'. 'Can use' should be past tense 'could use' to match 'three years ago'. 'Translate' should be 'a translator'.
× in three years ago we can use cell phone during the class and it was very useful
✓ three years ago we could use cell phones during class and it was very useful
'In three years ago' is incorrect; 'three years ago' is correct. 'Can use' should be past tense 'could use' to match the past time reference.
× But for now they're prohibited to use the translate, so it is getting harder to understand the classwork.
✓ But now, they are prohibited from using the translator, so it is getting harder to understand the classwork.
'Prohibited to use' should be 'prohibited from using'. 'Translate' should be 'translator' as a noun referring to a tool or person.
× Yes, I had before when from last year the our attendance rule is changed and more strict and I actually had a excuse for the absence but my teacher didn't accept that excuse so it was very restrictive.
✓ Yes, I had one before. Since last year, our attendance rule changed and became stricter. I actually had an excuse for the absence, but my teacher didn't accept it, so it was very restrictive.
The sentence has tense inconsistencies and article errors. 'Had before when from last year' is awkward; 'since last year' is better. 'Is changed' should be 'changed'. 'More strict' should be 'stricter'. 'A excuse' should be 'an excuse'.
× I actually had a excuse for the absence
✓ I actually had an excuse for the absence
'Excuse' begins with a vowel sound, so the article 'a' should be 'an'.
× Would you like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school?
✓ Would you like to work as a teacher in a school without rules?
'Rule-free school' is understandable but less common; 'a school without rules' is clearer and more natural.
× I think if I were that teacher, I should be more strict for the students because our school is kind of strict for the rules.
✓ I think if I were that teacher, I would be stricter with the students because our school is kind of strict with the rules.
'Should' is less appropriate here; 'would' expresses hypothetical situations better. 'More strict' is better as 'stricter'. 'For the students' should be 'with the students'.
× But it is good when we became adults 'cause when we got a job our river is more strict, so it is good.
✓ But it is good when we become adults because when we get a job, our boss is stricter, so it is good.
'Became' should be 'become' to match present/future context. 'Cause' should be 'because'. 'River' is likely a typo for 'boss'. 'Is more strict' is better as 'is stricter'.