Part 1
Giám khảo
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Thí sinh
Absolutely. There are several rules in my school, including how to behave, how to, uh, how to use water or electricity and so on. And I think these rules can help people to follow these rules and behave correctly.
Giám khảo
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Thí sinh
The answer may be yes. Uh, with small rules people students can know what to do or and what not to do. By choosing the right choice, they can behave well and not to behave in the wrong way.
Giám khảo
Have you ever had a really dedicated teacher?
Thí sinh
Yes, I have. My English teacher in middle school was really dedicated because he always stayed after class to give some students who really need extra support and sometimes she even gave me private lessons to improve my speaking skills.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer to have more or fewer rules at school?
Thí sinh
I prefer to have these rules because I think with this rules students can have more freedom to develop their full potential and choose how to complete their homework. This kind of environments encourage creativity and self-discipline.
Giám khảo
Have you ever had a really strict teacher?
Thí sinh
Absolutely, I had a very strict teacher in high school. He was all. He was very demanding and always reminded us to study hard and never cheat during exams because he wanted us to improve good study habits. I think although he was strict but he also helped me improve a lot.
Giám khảo
Would you like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school?
Thí sinh
Maybe I wouldn't like because, uh, working as a teacher in real free students needs a lot of patience and it may cause a lot of energies. So as a person who with less energy, I couldn't do this job well.
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答中存在重复和语气词“uh”,影响流畅性。建议减少重复表达,避免使用填充词,使回答更自然简洁。
Ví dụ: Yes, my school has several rules about behavior and resource usage, such as water and electricity, which help students act responsibly.
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答中语法错误和重复较多,且表达不够清晰。建议使用更准确的句式,避免重复,增强表达的逻辑性。
Ví dụ: Yes, I believe having clear rules helps students understand acceptable behavior and make better choices.
Have you ever had a really dedicated teacher?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: 回答中性别代词混用,且句子结构稍显复杂。建议注意代词一致性,简化句子结构,使表达更准确。
Ví dụ: Yes, my middle school English teacher was very dedicated. He often stayed after class to help students and even gave me private lessons to improve my speaking.
Do you prefer to have more or fewer rules at school?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法错误(如冠词使用)和单复数不一致,建议注意语法细节,提升表达准确性。
Ví dụ: I prefer having some rules because they give students the freedom to develop their potential and decide how to complete their homework, which encourages creativity and self-discipline.
Have you ever had a really strict teacher?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答中有语句不完整和连接词使用不当,建议注意句子完整性和逻辑连接,使表达更流畅。
Ví dụ: Yes, I had a strict high school teacher who was very demanding. He always reminded us to study hard and avoid cheating, which helped me develop good study habits.
Would you like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答中语法错误较多,表达不够清晰。建议简化句子结构,避免使用填充词,提升表达的准确性和自然度。
Ví dụ: I probably wouldn't like working in a school without rules because it requires a lot of patience and energy, which I might not have.
× And I think these rules can help people to follow these rules and behave correctly.
✓ And I think these rules can help people follow these rules and behave correctly.
动词help后面不需要加to,直接用动词原形。这里去掉to更符合英语习惯。
× Uh, with small rules people students can know what to do or and what not to do.
✓ Uh, with small rules, students can know what to do and what not to do.
small rules前缺少冠词,且people和students重复,去掉people更合适。
× By choosing the right choice, they can behave well and not to behave in the wrong way.
✓ By choosing the right choice, they can behave well and not behave in the wrong way.
动词not后面不加to,直接用动词原形。
× My English teacher in middle school was really dedicated because he always stayed after class to give some students who really need extra support and sometimes she even gave me private lessons to improve my speaking skills.
✓ My English teacher in middle school was really dedicated because he always stayed after class to give some students who really needed extra support and sometimes he even gave me private lessons to improve my speaking skills.
前面称呼老师为he,后面却用she,代词不一致。且need应为过去式needed,与过去时态保持一致。
× I prefer to have these rules because I think with this rules students can have more freedom to develop their full potential and choose how to complete their homework.
✓ I prefer to have these rules because I think with these rules students can have more freedom to develop their full potential and choose how to complete their homework.
this rules中this应改为these,因为rules是复数。
× This kind of environments encourage creativity and self-discipline.
✓ This kind of environment encourages creativity and self-discipline.
kind of后面接单数名词environment,动词也应用单数形式encourages。
× He was all.
✓ He was strict.
句子不完整,缺少谓语和补充信息,改为完整表达。
× I think although he was strict but he also helped me improve a lot.
✓ I think although he was strict, he also helped me improve a lot.
although和but不能同时使用,去掉but更符合语法。
× Maybe I wouldn't like because, uh, working as a teacher in real free students needs a lot of patience and it may cause a lot of energies.
✓ Maybe I wouldn't like it because, uh, working as a teacher in a rule-free school needs a lot of patience and it may consume a lot of energy.
real free应为rule-free,缺少冠词a;energies用法不当,energy为不可数名词。
× So as a person who with less energy, I couldn't do this job well.
✓ So as a person with less energy, I couldn't do this job well.
who后面缺少动词,改为with less energy更通顺。