Part 1
Giám khảo
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Thí sinh
Yes, there are lots of rules in my school and students need to follow these rules, although they will get punishments.
Giám khảo
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Thí sinh
I think students would benefit more from some rules because they can learn, uh, what rules are they, uh, going to follow to help them, uh, improve and also help them, uh, listen to the instructions, uh, what, uh, whether at school or at their house.
Giám khảo
Have you ever had a really dedicated teacher?
Thí sinh
Yes, I'm at a very dedicated teacher when I was in, uh, when I was at middle school and she's my Chinese teacher. Umm, I can always ask her questions. Uh, although it is uh, after class.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer to have more or fewer rules at school?
Thí sinh
I prefer to have fewer rooms at school because my school has a very strange rule that is we, uh, all the students need to go outside when it is break time. Uh, but I think sometimes, uh, it is so hot outside. So I think, uh, we can change this rule.
Giám khảo
Have you ever had a really strict teacher?
Thí sinh
Yes, I had a really strict teacher. He's he was my biology teacher at middle school and he always give us lots of homework and uh, we have just a few limit time to finish these homeworks and I felt really stressful.
Giám khảo
Would you like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school?
Thí sinh
I would not like to work as a teacher in this kind of school. First of all, uh, I'm not so interested at, in being a teacher. And secondly, I think rural free school, uh, would have lots of very naughty students. So, uh, I don't have the ability to control their, them.
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题,且内容较为简单。建议使用更自然的表达方式,并且避免重复和冗余。
Ví dụ: Yes, my school has many rules that students must follow to maintain order. If they break these rules, they usually face some form of punishment.
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 回答中有很多犹豫词和重复,表达不够流畅。建议简洁明了地表达观点,并使用连接词使句子更连贯。
Ví dụ: I believe having some rules is beneficial because they teach students discipline and help them follow instructions both at school and at home.
Have you ever had a really dedicated teacher?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答中语法错误较多,表达不清晰。建议使用正确的时态和句子结构,并补充具体细节。
Ví dụ: Yes, I had a very dedicated Chinese teacher in middle school. She was always willing to answer my questions, even after class.
Do you prefer to have more or fewer rules at school?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答中存在词汇错误(rooms应为rules)和重复,表达不够简洁。建议注意词汇准确性,并用更自然的表达方式。
Ví dụ: I prefer fewer rules at school. For example, my school requires all students to go outside during breaks, which can be uncomfortable when it's very hot.
Have you ever had a really strict teacher?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答中时态和语法错误较多,表达不够流畅。建议使用正确的时态和更丰富的词汇来描述感受。
Ví dụ: Yes, I had a strict biology teacher in middle school who assigned a lot of homework with tight deadlines, which made me feel very stressed.
Would you like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题,且用词不准确。建议使用更准确的词汇和句子结构,表达观点更明确。
Ví dụ: I wouldn't want to work in a school without rules because I am not interested in teaching, and I believe such schools might have many unruly students that are hard to manage.
× Yes, there are lots of rules in my school and students need to follow these rules, although they will get punishments.
✓ Yes, there are lots of rules in my school and students need to follow these rules, otherwise they will get punishments.
这里的although用法不正确,应该用otherwise表示“否则”,表示不遵守规则会受到惩罚。
× I think students would benefit more from some rules because they can learn, uh, what rules are they, uh, going to follow to help them, uh, improve and also help them, uh, listen to the instructions, uh, what, uh, whether at school or at their house.
✓ I think students would benefit more from some rules because they can learn which rules they are going to follow to help them improve and also help them listen to the instructions, whether at school or at their house.
原句中“what rules are they going to follow”语序错误,疑问句语序不适合陈述句,应改为“which rules they are going to follow”。此外,句子结构混乱,去掉多余的“uh”和“what”使句子更通顺。
× Yes, I'm at a very dedicated teacher when I was in, uh, when I was at middle school and she's my Chinese teacher.
✓ Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher when I was in middle school and she was my Chinese teacher.
“I'm at a very dedicated teacher”中“at”用法错误,应该用过去时“had”表示过去拥有某人作为老师。中学用“in middle school”更合适。
× Umm, I can always ask her questions. Uh, although it is uh, after class.
✓ Umm, I could always ask her questions, even after class.
这里表达过去习惯,应该用过去时态“could”,并且“although it is after class”表达不清,改为“even after class”更自然。
× I prefer to have fewer rooms at school because my school has a very strange rule that is we, uh, all the students need to go outside when it is break time.
✓ I prefer to have fewer rules at school because my school has a very strange rule that all the students need to go outside when it is break time.
原句中“rooms”应为“rules”,因为上下文讨论的是规则而非房间。
× Yes, I had a really strict teacher. He's he was my biology teacher at middle school and he always give us lots of homework and uh, we have just a few limit time to finish these homeworks and I felt really stressful.
✓ Yes, I had a really strict teacher. He was my biology teacher at middle school and he always gave us lots of homework. We had only a limited time to finish this homework and I felt really stressed.
“He's he was”重复错误,应为“He was”。“give”应为过去式“gave”。“a few limit time”表达错误,应为“a limited time”或“only a limited time”。“homeworks”不可数名词,应为“homework”。“felt really stressful”应为“felt really stressed”,因为“stressful”形容事物,“stressed”形容人。
× I would not like to work as a teacher in this kind of school. First of all, uh, I'm not so interested at, in being a teacher.
✓ I would not like to work as a teacher in this kind of school. First of all, I'm not so interested in being a teacher.
“interested”后面应接介词“in”,而非“at”。
× And secondly, I think rural free school, uh, would have lots of very naughty students. So, uh, I don't have the ability to control their, them.
✓ And secondly, I think a rule-free school would have lots of very naughty students. So, I don't have the ability to control them.
“rural free school”应为“rule-free school”。“control their, them”中“their”多余,应直接用宾格“them”。