Part 1
Giám khảo
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Thí sinh
To be honest, I've already graduated from the university a couple months ago, but if there is one rule that I need to point point out which UMM was the same throughout all of my school years, is that you never can be late for the class, otherwise there will be consequences that you need to face.
Giám khảo
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Thí sinh
Well, I must admit that rules are one of the main factors in order to improve students grades, but I don't believe the numbers of the rules are is what makes the role beneficial for the students as well.
Giám khảo
Have you ever had a really dedicated teacher?
Thí sinh
Yes, not only one but quite a few. But if there is one teacher that I need to point out today would be my physics teacher. Back in high school, she was totally dedicated to education. Even she overlooked her own health. When we were in the second grade of the high school, she passed out of the cancer.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer to have more or fewer rules at school?
Thí sinh
As I mentioned, the benefits of the rule for the school and for the students not dependent on the quantity of the rules, but the quality, so I prefer fewer rules at school, which can help us to be dedicated to our studies.
Giám khảo
Have you ever had a really strict teacher?
Thí sinh
Yes, I've had a really strict teacher out back in 3rd grade of the elementary school. Before we leave the school we have to memorize few pages of tasks but if we couldn't finish them we we weren't allowed to go back to our home and sometimes we have to memorize it till it's all dark.
Giám khảo
Would you like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school?
Thí sinh
To be honest, I don't wanna be a teacher in a rule free school because I'm fewer rules might be easier for the students to stay in school, but hard for the teachers. And there are really high bargains for teachers to be able to teach in a rule free schools.
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 你的回答有些冗长且重复(如“point point out”),建议简洁明了地回答问题,并避免重复。可以先直接回答问题,然后补充具体细节。
Ví dụ: I graduated a few months ago, but one important rule at my school was that students must never be late for class; otherwise, they would face consequences such as detention.
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 回答中语法错误较多,且表达不够清晰。建议使用简单句子,注意主谓一致,并明确表达观点。
Ví dụ: I think rules help students improve their grades, but having too many rules does not necessarily make them more helpful.
Have you ever had a really dedicated teacher?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清楚的地方,如“passed out of the cancer”应为“passed away from cancer”。建议使用正确表达并补充具体细节。
Ví dụ: Yes, I had several dedicated teachers. For example, my high school physics teacher was very committed; she even ignored her health problems and sadly passed away from cancer when I was in the second year.
Do you prefer to have more or fewer rules at school?
Điểm: 65.0Gợi ý: 句子结构复杂且有语法错误,建议简化句子并明确表达观点。
Ví dụ: I prefer fewer rules at school because the quality of rules matters more than the quantity, and fewer good rules help students focus better on their studies.
Have you ever had a really strict teacher?
Điểm: 70.0Gợi ý: 回答内容具体,但有语法错误和重复词汇。建议注意语法和避免重复,同时用连接词使表达更流畅。
Ví dụ: Yes, in third grade, I had a very strict teacher. We had to memorize several pages of tasks before leaving school, and if we failed, we were not allowed to go home until we finished, sometimes even after dark.
Would you like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school?
Điểm: 60.0Gợi ý: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议使用完整句子,避免口语缩写,明确表达观点。
Ví dụ: I would not like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school because fewer rules might make it easier for students to stay, but it would be harder for teachers to manage the class.
× I've already graduated from the university a couple months ago
✓ I graduated from the university a couple of months ago
The present perfect tense 'I've already graduated' is incorrect with the specific past time expression 'a couple of months ago'. The simple past tense 'I graduated' should be used instead.
× a couple months ago
✓ a couple of months ago
The phrase 'a couple months ago' is missing the preposition 'of' which is required to correctly express the quantity of months.
× if there is one rule that I need to point point out which UMM was the same throughout all of my school years, is that you never can be late for the class
✓ if there is one rule that I need to point out which was the same throughout all of my school years, it is that you can never be late for class
The sentence has redundancy ('point point'), incorrect word order ('you never can be late'), and awkward phrasing. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness.
× late for the class
✓ late for class
When referring to attending classes in general, the definite article 'the' is not used before 'class'.
× you never can be late for the class
✓ you can never be late for class
The modal verb 'can' should be placed before 'never' to form the correct negative modal verb phrase.
× students grades
✓ students' grades
The phrase needs a possessive apostrophe to indicate that the grades belong to the students.
× the numbers of the rules are is what makes the role beneficial
✓ the number of rules is what makes the rule beneficial
'Number' should be singular when referring to a quantity, and 'rule' is misspelled as 'role'. Also, 'numbers' should be 'number' and 'rules' should not have 'the' before it in this context.
× the numbers of the rules are is what makes the role beneficial for the students as well
✓ the number of rules is what makes the rule beneficial for the students as well
The pronoun 'the' before 'numbers' is unnecessary and 'role' is a typo for 'rule'. The verb agreement also needs correction.
× she passed out of the cancer
✓ she passed away from cancer
The phrase 'passed out of the cancer' is incorrect. The correct expression for dying is 'passed away from cancer'.
× passed out of the cancer
✓ passed away from cancer
The preposition 'out of' is incorrect here; 'from' is the correct preposition to indicate cause of death.
× Even she overlooked her own health
✓ She even overlooked her own health
The adverb 'even' should precede the verb 'overlooked' for correct emphasis and word order.
× few pages of tasks
✓ a few pages of tasks
The phrase 'few' without 'a' implies almost none, while 'a few' means some. 'A few' is appropriate here.
× Before we leave the school we have to memorize few pages of tasks but if we couldn't finish them we we weren't allowed to go back to our home
✓ Before we left school, we had to memorize a few pages of tasks, but if we couldn't finish them, we weren't allowed to go home
Tense consistency requires past tense 'left' and 'had'. Also, 'a few' is needed, and 'go back to our home' is better as 'go home'.
× Before we leave the school we have to memorize few pages of tasks but if we couldn't finish them we we weren't allowed to go back to our home
✓ Before we left school, we had to memorize a few pages of tasks, but if we couldn't finish them, we weren't allowed to go home
The sentence mixes present and past tenses. It should be consistently in the past tense to describe past events.
× we we weren't allowed to go back to our home
✓ we weren't allowed to go back to our home
The repetition of 'we' is a typographical error and should be removed.
× I don't wanna be a teacher in a rule free school because I'm fewer rules might be easier for the students to stay in school
✓ I don't want to be a teacher in a rule-free school because fewer rules might make it easier for students to stay in school
'Wanna' is informal and should be 'want to'. The phrase 'I'm fewer rules' is incorrect; it should be 'fewer rules might make it easier'. Also, 'rule free' should be hyphenated as 'rule-free'.
× rule free school
✓ rule-free school
Compound adjectives before a noun should be hyphenated to clarify meaning.
× there are really high bargains for teachers to be able to teach in a rule free schools
✓ there are really high barriers for teachers to be able to teach in rule-free schools
The word 'bargains' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'barriers'. Also, 'a rule free schools' is incorrect; it should be 'rule-free schools' without 'a'.