Part 1
Giám khảo
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Thí sinh
Yes, we have room checked. I mean night. Maybe my school want our students to make our achievements clear and know some things, uh, smell badly.
Giám khảo
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Thí sinh
Of course, some rules are so important because for example, having class on time or respect your teacher. But I think too many roles may be occur some converse the consequence you need to find the balance.
Giám khảo
Have you ever had a really dedicated teacher?
Thí sinh
Yes, my high school student teacher was so responsible at that time even not his class he even stand at there and to maintain the order in the class. Also they urge he want us have a good grade so all.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer to have more or fewer rules at school?
Thí sinh
Hmm I prefer have rules at school but I think maybe fewer is best because in China our student is too hard to study and also it's too tired. If there were more room we would feel it's so hard.
Giám khảo
Have you ever had a really strict teacher?
Thí sinh
Of course our high school math teacher, she is so a strict even a simple arrows she would angry to us and shouted to us how little things you couldn't remember. It's so terrible.
Giám khảo
Would you like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school?
Thí sinh
Of course not, because you know students then may be good but their parents are not even a little things. They may angry with you and decide you are not patient person and even you don't like their child. It's so terrible.
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Điểm: 40.0Gợi ý: 你的回答不够清晰,表达含糊且有语法错误。建议回答时直接说明学校的具体规则,并用简洁的句子表达。
Ví dụ: Yes, my school has several rules. For example, students must attend classes on time and keep the campus clean.
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Điểm: 55.0Gợi ý: 回答中有语法和用词错误,表达不够流畅。建议使用连贯的句子,明确表达观点并用具体例子支持。
Ví dụ: Yes, I believe some rules are necessary, like being punctual and respecting teachers. However, too many rules can be stressful, so a balance is important.
Have you ever had a really dedicated teacher?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: 回答结构混乱,语法错误较多。建议先明确回答问题,然后用具体细节支持,注意句子完整和逻辑连贯。
Ví dụ: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher in high school. He always stayed in the classroom to keep order and encouraged us to get good grades.
Do you prefer to have more or fewer rules at school?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: 表达不够准确,句子结构不完整。建议明确表达偏好,并用具体原因支持观点。
Ví dụ: I prefer to have some rules at school, but not too many. Because students in China already study very hard and too many rules would make it more stressful.
Have you ever had a really strict teacher?
Điểm: 45.0Gợi ý: 回答中语法错误较多,表达不清晰。建议用完整句子描述老师的严格,并举例说明。
Ví dụ: Yes, my high school math teacher was very strict. She would get angry and shout at us even for small mistakes, which was quite stressful.
Would you like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school?
Điểm: 40.0Gợi ý: 回答表达混乱,逻辑不清。建议先明确回答,再用具体理由支持,注意句子连贯。
Ví dụ: No, I would not like to work in a school without rules. Without rules, students might misbehave, and parents could blame teachers unfairly.
× Yes, we have room checked.
✓ Yes, we have rooms checked.
这里的room应为复数形式rooms,因为指的是多个房间。英语中可数名词表示多个时需用复数形式。
× Maybe my school want our students to make our achievements clear and know some things, uh, smell badly.
✓ Maybe my school wants our students to make our achievements clear and know some things that smell bad.
主语my school是第三人称单数,谓语动词want应加-s变为wants。smell badly应改为smell bad,因为smell是连系动词,后面应接形容词。
× But I think too many roles may be occur some converse the consequence you need to find the balance.
✓ But I think too many rules may cause some adverse consequences; you need to find the balance.
may be occur用法错误,正确表达应为may cause。roles应为rules。converse the consequence表达不正确,应为adverse consequences。句子结构混乱,需调整。
× Yes, my high school student teacher was so responsible at that time even not his class he even stand at there and to maintain the order in the class.
✓ Yes, my high school student teacher was so responsible at that time; even when it was not his class, he would stand there to maintain order in the class.
stand应改为stood(过去式),even not his class应改为even when it was not his class。句子中student teacher应明确指代。
× Also they urge he want us have a good grade so all.
✓ Also, he urged us to have good grades.
they和he指代不清,且语法混乱。urge后应接宾语加不定式结构。have a good grade应为have good grades。
× Hmm I prefer have rules at school but I think maybe fewer is best because in China our student is too hard to study and also it's too tired.
✓ Hmm, I prefer to have rules at school, but I think maybe fewer is best because in China our students study too hard and also they are too tired.
student应为复数students。prefer后应接不定式to have。too hard to study表达不自然,改为study too hard。it's too tired应改为they are too tired。
× If there were more room we would feel it's so hard.
✓ If there were more rules, we would feel it is so hard.
room应为rules。it's应为it is。
× Of course our high school math teacher, she is so a strict even a simple arrows she would angry to us and shouted to us how little things you couldn't remember.
✓ Of course, our high school math teacher was so strict; even for simple errors, she would get angry at us and shout at us about how little things we couldn't remember.
a strict前不应有so,且时态应为过去式was。arrows应为errors。angry后接介词at。shouted to us应为shout at us。
× Would you like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school?
✓ Would you like to work as a teacher in a school without rules?
rule-free school表达不自然,改为a school without rules更符合英语习惯。
× Of course not, because you know students then may be good but their parents are not even a little things.
✓ Of course not, because you know students may be good, but their parents don't care even about little things.
parents are not even a little things语法错误,改为parents don't care even about little things更通顺。
× They may angry with you and decide you are not patient person and even you don't like their child.
✓ They may be angry with you and decide you are not a patient person and even think you don't like their child.
angry是形容词,需用be动词。patient person前缺冠词a。even you don't like their child应改为even think you don't like their child。