Part 1
Giám khảo
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Thí sinh
Yeah, though I have graduated 4 years, I still remember some strict rules in my school years. For example, we had a strict dress code requiring uniforms and no longer here for girls until high school. Even for the university students, they were not allowed to stay outside overnight.
Giám khảo
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Thí sinh
Well, I don't think so. I think loading students with too many rules is suffocating and sometimes backfire. Students will feel frustrated and sometimes rebellious instead of focusing on their academic success or personal growth.
Giám khảo
Have you ever had a really dedicated teacher?
Thí sinh
Yes, I was blessed to have such a dedicated teacher in my middle school. She genuinely cared about us, not only our academic success but also our personal issues. She often spent her free time chatting with us about all kinds of things and gave us useful advice.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer to have more or fewer rules at school?
Thí sinh
To be honest, I'd prefer fewer but smarter rules. I think no one would really enjoy being overly controlled on small things and can't express themselves casually.
Giám khảo
Have you ever had a really strict teacher?
Thí sinh
Yes, she was my maths teacher in my middle school and she wanted to see the perfect behavior and academic performance from each student. If someone behaves badly, she would ask him to stand for the whole class outside the classroom.
Giám khảo
Would you like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school?
Thí sinh
Absolutely not and I think they will become a nightmare though I am against too many rules on students but I think they are still needed. It's hard to imagine a school without any rules. Teachers, for example. Teachers need rules to guarantee the class can go on smoothly.
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不够自然,如“no longer here for girls”表达不清晰,建议使用更准确的表达方式,并注意句子结构的完整性。
Ví dụ: Yes, although I graduated four years ago, I still remember some strict rules at my school. For instance, we had a strict dress code that required uniforms, and girls were not allowed to have long hair until high school. Additionally, university students were not permitted to stay out overnight.
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Điểm: 80.0Gợi ý: 回答表达较为清晰,但存在语法错误,如“sometimes backfire”应为“sometimes backfires”,建议注意主谓一致,并适当使用连接词使表达更连贯。
Ví dụ: Well, I don't think so. I believe that loading students with too many rules can be suffocating and sometimes backfires. As a result, students may feel frustrated and rebellious, which distracts them from focusing on their academic success or personal growth.
Have you ever had a really dedicated teacher?
Điểm: 90.0Gợi ý: 回答内容丰富且表达自然,但可以通过增加连接词使句子之间衔接更流畅。
Ví dụ: Yes, I was blessed to have such a dedicated teacher in my middle school. She genuinely cared about us, not only regarding our academic success but also our personal issues. Moreover, she often spent her free time chatting with us about various topics and gave us useful advice.
Do you prefer to have more or fewer rules at school?
Điểm: 85.0Gợi ý: 回答简洁明了,但“can't express themselves casually”表达略显生硬,建议使用更自然的表达方式,并适当扩展理由。
Ví dụ: To be honest, I'd prefer fewer but smarter rules. I believe that no one enjoys being overly controlled over minor things, as it restricts their ability to express themselves freely.
Have you ever had a really strict teacher?
Điểm: 80.0Gợi ý: 回答内容具体,但句子结构较长且缺少连接词,建议分句并使用连接词提高表达的连贯性。
Ví dụ: Yes, she was my math teacher in middle school, and she expected perfect behavior and academic performance from every student. If someone misbehaved, she would ask them to stand outside the classroom for the entire class.
Would you like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school?
Điểm: 75.0Gợi ý: 回答中句子连接不够自然,存在断句问题,建议合理使用连接词并调整句子结构,使表达更流畅。
Ví dụ: Absolutely not. Although I am against too many rules for students, I believe some rules are necessary. It's hard to imagine a school without any rules because teachers need them to ensure classes run smoothly.
× Yeah, though I have graduated 4 years, I still remember some strict rules in my school years.
✓ Yeah, though I graduated 4 years ago, I still remember some strict rules from my school years.
这里应该使用一般过去时,因为动作发生在过去的具体时间点(4年前)。'have graduated 4 years'结构不正确,应该是'graduated 4 years ago'。
× For example, we had a strict dress code requiring uniforms and no longer here for girls until high school.
✓ For example, we had a strict dress code requiring uniforms and no longer hair for girls until high school.
原句中'no longer here'应为'no longer hair',这里是拼写错误,且'no longer'后应接名词或动词,表示不再允许留长发。
× Even for the university students, they were not allowed to stay outside overnight.
✓ Even for the university students, they were not allowed to stay outside overnight.
此句语法正确,无需修改。
× I think loading students with too many rules is suffocating and sometimes backfire.
✓ I think loading students with too many rules is suffocating and sometimes backfires.
主语是单数'loading students with too many rules',谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式'backfires'。
× She genuinely cared about us, not only our academic success but also our personal issues.
✓ She genuinely cared about us, not only about our academic success but also about our personal issues.
'not only'后面缺少介词'about',使句子结构完整,表达清晰。
× If someone behaves badly, she would ask him to stand for the whole class outside the classroom.
✓ If someone behaves badly, she would ask him to stand outside the classroom for the whole class.
介词短语位置错误,'stand outside the classroom'应紧跟动词,'for the whole class'放在后面更符合英语习惯。
× Absolutely not and I think they will become a nightmare though I am against too many rules on students but I think they are still needed.
✓ Absolutely not. I think they will become a nightmare. Though I am against too many rules on students, I think they are still needed.
原句连接词使用混乱,导致句子冗长且难以理解,应拆分为多个句子,并正确使用逗号和连词。
× Teachers need rules to guarantee the class can go on smoothly.
✓ Teachers need rules to guarantee that the class can go on smoothly.
在'guarantee'后面应加上连词'that'引导宾语从句,使句子结构完整。