Rules— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: この回答は内容が少し冗長で、文のつながりが弱いです。より自然で効果的な回答にするために、主題文を明確にし、具体的な例をつなげる接続詞を使いましょう。例えば、「For example」だけでなく、「because」や「so」などを使うと良いです。

Ví dụ: Yes, there were several rules at my school to ensure student safety. For example, we had to walk quietly in the hallways during class time because running could cause accidents.

Gợi ý: 回答は主題文がやや曖昧で、具体的な理由や詳細が不足しています。より説得力を持たせるために、理由や具体例を明確に述べ、接続詞を使って論理的に展開しましょう。

Ví dụ: Yes, I believe students benefit from having more rules because rules help maintain order. For instance, without rules, the school environment could become chaotic and unsafe for everyone.

Gợi ý: 回答は簡潔ですが、もう少し具体的な詳細や感想を加えるとより良いです。また、接続詞を使って文をつなげると自然になります。

Ví dụ: Yes, I had a very dedicated English teacher in junior high. He always paid close attention to my progress and gave me specific feedback, which helped me improve a lot.

Gợi ý: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、「spending time in fewer rules」は不自然な表現です。より自然な表現に直し、理由を詳しく述べ、接続詞を使いましょう。

Ví dụ: Personally, I prefer having fewer rules at school because it allows me to feel more relaxed and have greater autonomy in my daily activities.

Gợi ý: 文法や語彙の誤りがあり、意味が少し分かりにくいです。より正確な表現を使い、理由を詳しく述べ、接続詞で文をつなげましょう。

Ví dụ: Yes, I had a very strict math teacher when I was a child. For example, he would give us low scores if we left our dishes on the table during lunchtime, which I disliked because he was very severe.

Gợi ý: 回答は意味が通じますが、「school having more rules」は不自然な表現です。より自然な言い回しを使い、理由を詳しく述べ、接続詞で文をつなげましょう。

Ví dụ: If I were a teacher, I would prefer to work in a school with more rules because they help students behave responsibly and maintain discipline.

× For example, we had to walk in the hallway during the class.

✓ For example, we had to walk in the hallway during class.

The article 'the' before 'class' is unnecessary here because 'class' is used in a general sense. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural and grammatically correct.

× I think students can benefit from many rules.

✓ I think students could benefit from many rules.

Since the sentence is discussing a hypothetical or general possibility rather than a definite fact, 'could' is more appropriate than 'can' to express potential benefit.

× the society would be too chaotic to spend safely.

✓ society would be too chaotic to live in safely.

The verb 'spend' is incorrect in this context. The correct verb is 'live in' to express living safely in society. Also, 'the' before 'society' is unnecessary here.

× My English teacher always kept an eye on me and he always gave me specific feedback.

✓ My English teacher always kept an eye on me and always gave me specific feedback.

The pronoun 'he' is redundant here because the subject is already clear. Removing 'he' improves sentence flow and avoids repetition.

× Personally, I prefer spending time in fewer rules because I don't have to worry about many rules while spending time in school.

✓ Personally, I prefer spending time with fewer rules because I don't have to worry about many rules while spending time at school.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to 'rules' and 'school' here. The correct prepositions are 'with' for 'rules' and 'at' for 'school' to express the intended meaning.

× Yes I had when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a kid.

The auxiliary verb 'did' is needed to form the correct past tense response. 'Had' alone is incorrect in this context.

× My math teacher often scored us when we left our dish dishes during the lunch time.

✓ My math teacher often scolded us when we left our dishes during lunchtime.

The verb 'scored' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'scolded' meaning to reprimand. Also, 'dish dishes' is redundant; 'dishes' alone is correct. 'Lunch time' should be one word: 'lunchtime'.

× I disliked him because he was so severe.

✓ I disliked him because he was so strict.

The adjective 'severe' is not commonly used to describe a strict teacher. 'Strict' is the appropriate adjective here.

× If I were to be a teacher, I'd like to work in a school having more rules because students behave more responsibly, taking care of many rules.

✓ If I were a teacher, I'd like to work in a school with more rules because students behave more responsibly by following many rules.

The phrase 'having more rules' is awkward; 'with more rules' is better. Also, 'taking care of many rules' is unclear; 'following many rules' better expresses responsible behavior.