Part 1
Giám khảo
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Thí sinh
When I was a schoolgirl there was several rules in my school said I don't like it. For example we have we have to work only laundress and it drive me crazy.
Giám khảo
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Thí sinh
From my point of view, uh, the most rural Sarah, the scores is getting down because I'm all for freedom.
Giám khảo
Have you ever had a really dedicated teacher?
Thí sinh
In my school year and at university stages, I have been at strict teachers control. Actually I like strict teacher because they are more disciplined and it is more opportunity to success in studies.
Giám khảo
Do you prefer to have more or fewer rules at school?
Thí sinh
It it depends on the things that rule was created. If it related to our forms too, I prefer fewer rules. If it pref it related to study, I prefer more rules.
Giám khảo
Have you ever had a really strict teacher?
Thí sinh
Yes, I have. Uh, she was a mathematics teacher. Actually I loved her because without any discipline and rules, there is no success in everything.
Giám khảo
Would you like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school?
Thí sinh
It would be a pleasure to work as a teacher because I am very smart and I want to try myself and other fields.
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Điểm: 48.0Gợi ý: Улучшите грамматику и ясность: используйте правильные времена и согласование (например, "there were several rules"); избегайте повторов; дайте чёткий основной ответ и один-два поддерживающих примера. Также уточните, что означает «work only laundress» — используйте корректную лексику ("do laundry" или "work as a laundress").
Ví dụ: Yes, there were several rules when I was at school. For example, students were required to help with laundry and cleaning, which I disliked because it took time away from studying.
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Điểm: 34.0Gợi ý: Сформулируйте мысль ясно и логично: начните с прямого ответа (yes/no) и объясните причину. Избегайте бессвязных фраз и ошибок согласования (например, "the scores are going down"). Используйте связки (because, however, therefore) для связности.
Ví dụ: I don't think more rules always help. In my view, too many strict rules can lower motivation and exam scores because students feel less free to think creatively.
Have you ever had a really dedicated teacher?
Điểm: 52.0Gợi ý: Уточните вопрос и приведите конкретный пример: назовите одного учителя, опишите его поведение и почему он был предан работе. Исправьте грамматику ("I have been under strict teachers' control" → лучше «I had strict teachers»). Используйте связующие слова для объяснения причин.
Ví dụ: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher at university. She enforced strict deadlines and offered extra help after class, which helped me improve my grades and study habits.
Do you prefer to have more or fewer rules at school?
Điểm: 50.0Gợi ý: Дайте чёткий общий ответ, затем поясните с конкретными примерами. Исправьте грамматические ошибки ("It depends on why the rule was created"). Используйте противопоставление (however, whereas) чтобы показать разницу между типами правил.
Ví dụ: It depends on the purpose of the rules. For rules about personal appearance, I prefer fewer restrictions; however, for rules that protect learning time, I think stricter rules are better.
Have you ever had a really strict teacher?
Điểm: 58.0Gợi ý: Добавьте детали и конкретный пример того, что делала учительница: как именно её строгость помогла вам. Сократите общие фразы и укажите результат (например, оценки улучшились). Используйте связки (for example, as a result).
Ví dụ: Yes, my high school math teacher was very strict. For example, she required regular quizzes and extra homework, and as a result my problem-solving skills and exam scores improved.
Would you like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school?
Điểm: 40.0Gợi ý: Ответьте прямо на вопрос о работе в школе без правил и объясните своё мнение конкретно. Избегайте хвастливых формулировок («I am very smart») — лучше сказать о навыках. Используйте причину и пример (because, for instance).
Ví dụ: I wouldn't prefer to teach in a rule-free school. Without basic rules, classroom management would be difficult; for example, students might be noisy and disruption would harm everyone's learning.
× When I was a schoolgirl there was several rules in my school said I don't like it.
✓ When I was a schoolgirl there were several rules at my school that I didn't like.
В данном предложении следует использовать 'there were' с множественным числом 'rules'. Также предлог 'in' заменён на 'at' для обозначения школы, относительное слово 'that' добавлено для связи, и глагол в отрицательном предложении приведён в прошедшее время: 'didn't like'.
× For example we have we have to work only laundress and it drive me crazy.
✓ For example, we had to do only laundry work, and it drove me crazy.
Предложение было некорректно структурировано: повтор 'we have' неуместен, 'laundress' заменён на существительное 'laundry work', и глагол во второй части должен быть в прошедшем времени 'drove' для согласования времен.
× From my point of view, uh, the most rural Sarah, the scores is getting down because I'm all for freedom.
✓ From my point of view, during the most recent semester, the scores are going down because I am all for freedom.
Оригинал содержит непонятную фразу 'most rural Sarah' — предполагается 'most recent semester' или аналог. Глагол 'is' несогласован с множественным 'scores', нужно 'are going down'. Используйте понятные выражения времени и согласование подлежащего и глагола.
× In my school year and at university stages, I have been at strict teachers control.
✓ During my school years and at the university stages, I was under strict teachers' control.
Использование предлогов и времён было ошибочным: 'during' лучше для периодов, 'was' для описания прошедшего опыта, а 'under strict teachers' control' корректно выражает идею контроля; добавлен притяжательный апостроф для 'teachers'.
× Actually I like strict teacher because they are more disciplined and it is more opportunity to success in studies.
✓ Actually I like strict teachers because they are more disciplined and provide more opportunities for success in studies.
Нужно множественное число 'teachers', 'more opportunity' должно быть 'more opportunities', и структура 'provide opportunities for success' является естественной; 'it is' удалено как лишнее.
× It it depends on the things that rule was created.
✓ It depends on the reasons why a rule was created.
Повтор 'It it' исправлен, 'things that rule was created' заменено на корректную фразу 'reasons why a rule was created' для ясности и грамматической правильности.
× If it related to our forms too, I prefer fewer rules.
✓ If it relates to our uniforms too, I prefer fewer rules.
Глагол должен быть в настоящем 'relates' для условия общего характера; 'forms' вероятно неверное слово — предположено 'uniforms'. Также согласование времен: при условных предложениях общего факта используйте present simple.
× If it pref it related to study, I prefer more rules.
✓ If it is related to studies, I prefer more rules.
Фраза 'pref it' бессмысленна; правильная конструкция 'If it is related to studies' использует правильный порядок слов и форму глагола 'is related' для пассивного значения.
× Yes, I have. Uh, she was a mathematics teacher. Actually I loved her because without any discipline and rules, there is no success in everything.
✓ Yes, I have. She was a mathematics teacher. Actually I loved her because without any discipline and rules, there is no success in anything.
Заменено 'in everything' на более естественное 'in anything' в отрицательных конструкциях; убраны лишние 'Uh' и объединён стиль. 'There is' сохранено как правильное 'there is no'.
× It would be a pleasure to work as a teacher because I am very smart and I want to try myself and other fields.
✓ It would be a pleasure to work as a teacher because I am very interested and I want to try myself in other fields.
'Very smart' не соответствует контексту профессионального мотива — лучше 'very interested'. Добавлено 'in' перед 'other fields' и исправлена фраза 'try myself in other fields' для естественности.