Rules— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Clarify and correct grammar, use a clear topic sentence, avoid vague words like "news" and give specific examples with correct phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "for instance" or "also"). Keep answer under five sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, my school has several rules about student appearance. For instance, students are required to dye their hair black even if it is naturally brown, which many people find unfair. Also, female students must wear skirts of a specified length, which some consider restrictive. These rules feel outdated and limit personal expression.

Gợi ý: Good content and organization but reduce redundancy and tighten phrasing. Start with a direct topic sentence, use a linking word for contrast (e.g., "however"), and give one specific example of a helpful guideline. Watch small grammar points ("problem-solving").

Ví dụ: I don't think more rules would help students; in fact, too many regulations can harm independence and critical thinking. However, a small number of clear guidelines—such as mentoring for career planning—combined with encouragement would teach responsibility and problem-solving skills.

Gợi ý: Strong answer: clear topic sentence, relevant details, and outcome. To improve further, add a linking word and a specific example of what she did (e.g., stayed until 6 p.m., gave individual feedback). Keep the answer concise.

Ví dụ: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher in elementary school. For example, she stayed after school twice a week until 6 p.m. to give extra tuition and individualized feedback, so many of us improved significantly before exams.

Gợi ý: First, correct unclear phrasing ("I prepare for your rules" is incorrect). Begin with a direct topic sentence stating preference, then support with linked reasons and a clear specific example. Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

Ví dụ: I prefer fewer rules at school because more freedom helps students develop decision-making and problem-solving skills. It also fosters independence and creativity. For example, allowing self-directed projects where students manage their time teaches responsibility.

Gợi ý: Answer has many unclear and incorrect phrases ("I had a stroke", "cold shelter secondary school for run"). Begin with a clear topic sentence like "Yes, I had a very strict coach at my secondary school." Then give one specific example and explain the result. Check tense and vocabulary ("coach" vs "teacher").

Ví dụ: Yes, I had a very strict coach at my secondary school who insisted on punctuality and intense training. For example, when several players were late, he made the whole team run extra laps, which taught us discipline and later improved our performance.

Gợi ý: Clarify and correct grammar and awkward phrases ("I think I'll rule 3"). Start with a direct topic sentence, then explain reasons with linking words and a concrete example. Use plural/singular agreement and article usage ("open-ended projects", "self-directed learning").

Ví dụ: Yes, I would. I think a largely rule-free school could benefit students by encouraging independent thinking and self-directed learning. For example, allowing open-ended projects and supporting creative risk-taking would increase motivation and help students develop problem-solving skills.

× There are several news about the student appearance at my school.

✓ There is some news about student appearance at my school.

'News' is an uncountable noun and takes singular verb 'is' and does not use 'several'. Use 'some' or 'a piece of news' and remove the article before 'student appearance' to sound natural.

× For example, students must have keep their hair black even if it's naturally brown, which may find unfair and outdated.

✓ For example, students must keep their hair black even if it is naturally brown, which many find unfair and outdated.

Remove the unnecessary auxiliary 'have' and use correct verb form 'keep'. Use 'it is' instead of contraction in formal correction. 'Which may find unfair' is incorrect because 'find' needs an agent; use 'many find' to indicate people who consider it unfair.

× And female students are required to wear skirts of a specified lengths are ruled that some find restrictive.

✓ Female students are required to wear skirts of specified lengths, a rule that some find restrictive.

Original mixes two clauses without correct linking. Use 'skirts of specified lengths' (no plural article) and 'a rule that' to introduce the opinion. Remove leading 'And' for cohesion.

× I don't think more or less would be beneficial to students because too many regulations can deter them from developing independence and critical thinking.

✓ I don't think more or fewer rules would be beneficial to students because too many regulations can deter them from developing independence and critical thinking.

'More or less' is vague; when talking about countable 'rules' use 'more or fewer rules'. The rest of the sentence is correct.

× Instead, a few career guidelines combined with support and encouragement would help them learn responsibility and problem solving skills.

✓ Instead, a few clear guidelines combined with support and encouragement would help them learn responsibility and problem-solving skills.

'Career guidelines' may be odd in school context; 'clear guidelines' is more natural. 'Problem solving' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective 'problem-solving' before 'skills'.

× She often studied after classes to help struggling students and organized extra lessons before exams.

✓ She often stayed after classes to help struggling students and organized extra lessons before exams.

'Studied after classes' implies the teacher studied; use 'stayed after classes' to indicate she remained at school to help students. Past tense 'organized' is correct.

× So many of us improved a lot because she really went above and beyond to support us.

✓ Many of us improved a lot because she really went above and beyond to support us.

Remove redundant 'So' at start for clearer sentence. The meaning and tense are fine.

× I prepare for your rules at school because having more freedom encourages students to develop decision making and problem solving skills.

✓ I prefer fewer rules at school because having more freedom encourages students to develop decision-making and problem-solving skills.

'I prepare for your rules' is incorrect; likely intended 'I prefer fewer rules'. Use 'fewer' for countable 'rules' and hyphenate compound adjectives 'decision-making' and 'problem-solving'.

× For example, if students can choose self-directed projects and manage their own time, they learn to take responsibility.

✓ For example, if students can choose self-directed projects and manage their own time, they will learn to take responsibility.

Original present tense is acceptable, but adding 'will' fits the conditional result more naturally in this context. Either present or future can work; the suggested correction clarifies cause and effect.

× Yes, I had a stroke.

✓ Yes, I had a strict teacher.

'I had a stroke' is likely a speech recognition or typing error. Context asks about a strict teacher, so correct to 'I had a strict teacher.'

× The cold shelter secondary school for run, our Sports Club.

✓ He was the coach of our school's sports club and ran the training at the secondary school.

Original is garbled and ungrammatical. Rewriting clarifies the intended meaning: identifying the person as coach and describing his role. Use past tense to match narrative.

× He insisted on punctuality and very intensive training.

✓ He insisted on punctuality and very intensive training.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable. Consider 'intensive training' without 'very' or change to 'very intensive training' is stylistic. No mandatory correction required per list, but keep as is.

× Once he made the whole team run extra laps because several players arrived late, which taught us discipline and ultimately improved our performance.

✓ Once he made the whole team run extra laps because several players had arrived late, which taught us discipline and ultimately improved our performance.

Use past perfect 'had arrived' to show that players' lateness occurred before the coach made them run. This clarifies sequence of past events.

× Yes I would.

✓ Yes, I would.

Add comma after 'Yes' for correct punctuation. The modal 'would' is appropriate.

× I think I'll rule 3.

✓ I think I'd choose option three.

'I'll rule 3' is unintelligible. Likely meant to express preference for a rule-free school (option three), so rewrite to convey selection. Adjust modal to 'I'd' for conditional preference.

× School could benefit the students by encouraging independent thinking and the self-directed learning.

✓ Schools could benefit students by encouraging independent thinking and self-directed learning.

Use plural 'Schools' for general statement and remove unnecessary 'the' before 'students' and 'self-directed learning'. Also make 'self-directed learning' uncountable.

× For example, allowing open-ended project and supporting creative risk taking would increase motivation and help students develop problem-solving skills.

✓ For example, allowing open-ended projects and supporting creative risk-taking would increase motivation and help students develop problem-solving skills.

Use plural 'projects' to match general statement. Hyphenate 'risk-taking'. The rest is acceptable.