Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 1) 发音和流利度：减少填充词（uh, um）并尽量连贯表达。2) 结构：先给出直接回答（主题句），然后用一两句具体细节支持（为什么喜欢、如何从中获益）。3) 内容：用更准确的词汇，如 “selling my artwork online” 和 “earn some extra money” 替代口语化或错误短语。4) 句子长度控制：不要超过5句，保持自然且信息完整。建议练习带有连接词的复合句以提高连贯性。

Ví dụ: Yes, I have several hobbies, including swimming and drawing, but I prefer drawing because it helps me relax. In addition, I sometimes sell my artwork online to earn some extra money, which motivates me to improve my skills.

Gợi ý: 1) 语法与时态：注意过去时的使用（when I was a child，I loved / I used to）。2) 结构：先给主题句（是或不是），然后用一两条具体细节说明（在哪里画、父母的反应等）。3) 用词准确：避免重复（my house, my house）并用正确名词形式（drawings, illustrations）。4) 流利性：减少犹豫词并练习连贯表达，使叙述更清楚。

Ví dụ: Yes, when I was a child I loved drawing on the walls, so my house was covered with my drawings and anime illustrations. As a result, my parents often got very angry and had to repaint the walls.

Gợi ý: 1) 时态一致性：描述过去持续到现在时应使用现在完成时或现在完成进行时（I have loved drawing since childhood / I have been drawing since I was a child）。2) 词汇准确性：纠正错误词组（animate sales → anime-style; quickest sketches → quick sketches; comma commissions → commissions）。3) 结构：先回答是否有长期爱好，然后给出具体细节及现在情况（如何挣钱、画什么）。4) 控制填充词，句子不超过5句。

Ví dụ: Yes, I have loved drawing since I was a child, especially anime-style pictures and quick sketches. I still enjoy it today, and I even earn some extra money by doing commissions and selling my illustrations online.

Gợi ý: 1) 句子准确性：纠正错误表达（are not really enjoy → really enjoy cycling / do enjoy cycling）。2) 结构：先直接回答（Yes/No），然后给出支持细节（how often, where, why）。3) 用词自然：使用短语 like “go on short trips nearby” 和 “a relaxing way to spend time together”。4) 流利性：减少犹豫词并保持句子紧凑，不超过5句。

Ví dụ: Yes, my parents really enjoy cycling, and we often cycle around our neighborhood. For example, on our days off we usually go on short trips nearby because cycling is good exercise and a relaxing way to spend time together.

× Yes, I have several hobbies such as swimming, drawing or saying, but I prefer drawing because it helped me relax and I also sometimes uh uh, sell my artwork online.

✓ Yes, I have several hobbies such as swimming and drawing, but I prefer drawing because it helps me relax and I also sometimes sell my artwork online.

错误类型为动名词/动词形式错误。原句中“saying”用错，应该是“drawing”；“helped”时态不合（应与现在习惯相符用一般现在时“helps”）；多余停顿词去掉并将并列项用“and”。建议：列举爱好时用相同结构（swimming and drawing）；谈及习惯或常态用一般现在时（helps）。

× It uh, could uh, help me to earn allowance from it.

✓ It could help me earn some allowance from it.

错误类型为过去时/情态动词搭配问题。原句多余不必要的“to”和重复语气词，应简化为“help me earn”。情态动词“could”可表示能力或可能性，后接动词原形。建议：情态动词后直接用动词原形，避免不必要的“to”。

× Yes, actually when I was child I really into draw on the walls Yeah and my house, my house wall were were full of my uh, prints and anime illustration umm that uh make my parents get so mad.

✓ Yes, actually when I was a child I was really into drawing on the walls. Yeah, the walls of my house were full of my prints and anime illustrations, which made my parents very angry.

错误类型为现在时/一般过去时混用及名词形式错误。需要说明： - “when I was child”缺定冠词，应为“when I was a child”。 - “I really into draw”缺助动词/be动词且动词应为动名词，改为“I was really into drawing”。 - “my house wall were were”拼写重复且主谓数不一致，改为“the walls of my house were”。 - “anime illustration”应为复数“anime illustrations”。 - “that uh make my parents get so mad”时态应为过去“which made my parents very angry”。 建议：回忆过去的事情用一般过去时，注意冠词和动名词，以及主谓一致和名词单复数。

× Actually, when I was child, I love drawing, especially animate sales, uh, pictures and the quickest sketches, and I still enjoyed it today.

✓ Actually, when I was a child, I loved drawing, especially anime-style pictures and quick sketches, and I still enjoy it today.

错误类型为过去时/现在时混用及词汇错误： - “when I was child”缺冠词，应为“a child”。 - 描述过去爱好应使用过去时“loved”。 - “animate sales”是拼写/词汇错误，应为“anime-style”。 - “the quickest sketches”意义不明，改为“quick sketches”。 - 描述现在仍然喜欢时用一般现在时“I still enjoy it today”。 建议：注意时态一致性，过去习惯用过去时，现在仍然持续用现在时；检查拼写和搭配。

× And nowadays I can even earn some, uh, extra money by, uh, doing a comma commissions and selling my illustration online.

✓ And nowadays I can even earn some extra money by doing commissions and selling my illustrations online.

错误类型为动名词形式和名词复数错误。应使用动名词短语“by doing commissions”并去掉多余词“a comma”；“illustration”应为复数“illustrations”。建议：用“by + 动名词”表示方式或方法；注意去掉干扰性口语填充词并使用正确复数形式。

× Yes, my parents are not really enjoy riding bicycles and we often, uh, cycle around our neighborhood.

✓ Yes, my parents really enjoy riding bicycles and we often cycle around our neighborhood.

错误类型为形容词/副词或动词搭配错误。原句中“are not really enjoy”语法错误，应为“really enjoy”或“do not really enjoy”；根据上下文应为肯定句“really enjoy”。建议：主语+动词时注意使用适当结构（若否定应用“do not enjoy”或“I/they are not ...ing”），并避免不必要的否定或语气词。

× Umm, for example, when my parents, uh, I have days off, we usually go on short trip or nearby, uh, because cycling is a good exercise and uh, uh, a relaxing way to spend time together.

✓ For example, when my parents and I have days off, we usually go on short trips nearby because cycling is good exercise and a relaxing way to spend time together.

错误类型为时态/句子结构和名词复数错误： - “when my parents, uh, I have days off”词序错误，应为“when my parents and I have days off”。 - “go on short trip or nearby”需改为复数“go on short trips nearby”或“go on a short trip nearby”。 - 去掉多余的“uh”等填充词；“cycling is a good exercise”中“a”可去掉更自然为“cycling is good exercise”。 建议：注意并列主语的顺序与连接词，复数名词与单数名词的选择，以及去掉口语填充词以保持句子流畅。