Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 回答总体自然且信息明确，但有些冗余（“listening to music and drawing”重复说明），句子可更精炼并加入一两个具体细节（例如喜欢的音乐类型或画画的风格/材料）。同时注意最多不超过5句。建议用一个主题句说明爱好，然后用1-2句具体说明何时、如何进行并说明原因。

Ví dụ: Yes, I have several hobbies, mainly drawing and listening to music. I often draw in my bedroom for an hour each evening, usually working with pencil or watercolours. Listening to indie and classical music helps me concentrate and makes the process more relaxing.

Gợi ý: 回答简洁且相关，给出了原因，表现良好。可以通过加入具体细节（比如常画的主题或开始画画的年龄）以及使用连接词使表达更连贯，从而进一步提升。

Ví dụ: Yes, my favorite hobby was painting when I was a child. I often painted landscapes and portraits from the age of seven, because being introverted made painting a private way to express my feelings. As a result, it became a habit that shaped my creativity.

Gợi ý: 回答内容丰富但语法与表达不够准确，有语病（例如“loved the painting things”、“is an essential”）。句子略显冗长且缺少连接词。建议整理为3-4句：先说持续的爱好，再交代时间线和现在状态，最后说明原因并给出具体方式（如printmaking）。注意语法一致性。

Ví dụ: Yes, painting has been my hobby since I was seven. I continued to study art and now I major in it at university, specialising in printmaking. Because of this long involvement, art is more than a hobby to me; it helps me express ideas and relax after a busy day.

Gợi ý: 回答意思明确但表达有错误和不清晰的词汇（“traditional Chinese bargain”不合适，且“I'm not accurate about that”不自然）。建议改用正确词汇描述（例如 'traditional Chinese game'），并补充具体对比或举例（例如家庭活动频率或如何互相尊重）。同时避免口头语“uh”。

Ví dụ: No, my hobbies are different from my parents'. They enjoy playing mahjong, a traditional Chinese game, while I prefer painting and printmaking. Although we have different interests, we respect each other's pastimes and sometimes join family game nights.

× I usually spend time in my bedroom drawing while I listen to music because it helps me to relax and have fun.

✓ I usually spend time in my bedroom drawing while listening to music because it helps me relax and have fun.

句中原为“while I listen to music”，此处更自然的结构是用现在分词短语“while listening to music”与动词“spend time ... drawing”并列，避免重复主语，使句子更简洁流畅。另外“helps me to relax”中不需要不定式的“to”，可用“helps me relax”。建议用现在分词连接动作，保持句子紧凑。

× I have loved the painting things.

✓ I have loved painting since I was a child.

原句中“the painting things”结构不自然，且意义不清。使用现在完成时表达从过去到现在的持续喜好时，应使用“have loved + 动名词”并可加时间状语“since I was a child”。同时移除多余定冠词和名词“things”，直接用动名词“painting”。

× I was 7 and now I'm majoring in art at university.

✓ I was seven when I started, and now I'm majoring in art at university.

原句“ I was 7 and now I'm majoring...” 缺少时间连接信息，造成连接两个独立信息显得突兀。改为“was seven when I started”可以说明开始画画的时间，使句子结构更完整、信息更连贯。

× So art for me isn't just a hobby, is an essential part of who I am because it's helped me express ideas and relax.

✓ So art for me isn't just a hobby; it is an essential part of who I am because it has helped me express ideas and relax.

原句缺少主语“it”在第二分句中，应使用完整句“it is an essential...”。另外时态应与之前的现在完成时保持一致，使用“has helped”而非“it's helped”（口语缩写虽可，但在书面更清晰写为“it has helped”）。也用分号或句号分隔两分句更符合书面语。

× No, my parents love mahjong, which is a traditional Chinese bargain, but I'm not accurate about that.

✓ No, my parents love mahjong, which is a traditional Chinese game, but I'm not very good at it.

原句中“traditional Chinese bargain”用词不当，mahjong是“game（游戏）”而非“bargain（讨价还价）”。此外“I'm not accurate about that”表达不自然，想表达“我不擅长/不懂”应使用“I'm not very good at it”或“I don't know much about it”。建议用“game”替换“bargain”，并用自然的能力表述。