Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 文法と語彙の正確さを高め、冗長な表現を減らしてください。例えば冠詞や動詞の形（"I've several" → "I have several"、"about one once a month" → "about once a month"、"I constantly working" → "I constantly work"）を直すと自然になります。また、回答は5文以内に収め、話のつながりを示す接続詞（"because"、"so"、"and"）を適切に使って論理的に説明してください。具体的な頻度や場所、感想を短く明確に述べると効果的です。

Ví dụ: I have several hobbies, including traveling, playing golf and strength training. I usually play golf with friends about once a month because it helps me stay healthy and mentally relaxed. I also practice regularly at the driving range to improve my swing.

Gợi ý: 内容は良いですが、言い回しの自然さと語順を改善してください。冗長な語句（"those war games" は不明瞭）や重複（"with with"）を避けましょう。接続語を使って理由や状況を簡潔に説明するとより説得力があります。5文以内で具体的なエピソードや頻度を添えると良いです。

Ví dụ: Yes. I spent a lot of time playing video games as a child, especially Nintendo titles like Mario Kart and Super Smash Bros. I enjoyed them because they were fun and social, and I often spent hours competing with friends in multiplayer races and battles.

Gợi ý: 時制と表現の誤りを直してください（"I will be running since childhood" は不自然）。過去から現在に続く趣味を表す場合は "I've been running since childhood" が正しいです。また、文を簡潔にまとめ、頻度と理由を明確に述べましょう。接続詞で文をつなげると流れが良くなります。

Ví dụ: Yes, I've been running since childhood and it has become part of my routine. I like running because it needs no special equipment and I can stop when I'm tired. These days I usually run for an hour near my home twice a week to stay healthy and feel refreshed.

Gợi ý: 文法ミスと語順の改善が必要です。例えば冠詞や複数形（"on weekend" → "on weekends"）、時制（"when my schedule arose" は不自然）を修正してください。繰り返し語（"that that"）を避け、理由や頻度を簡潔に述べると自然な応答になります。

Ví dụ: Yes, I share a hobby with my father: golf. He taught me how to play a few years ago, and since then I've become really interested in it. I usually practice at a golf course on weekends when my schedule allows.

× Yes, I've several hobbies including traveling, playing golf and doing strength training.

✓ Yes, I have several hobbies including traveling, playing golf and doing strength training.

The contraction 'I've' stands for 'I have' but is commonly used for possession with an article: 'I have several hobbies' is clearer and more natural. Use the full form to avoid ambiguity and ensure correct article/noun usage.

× I usually play golf with friends about one once a month and the activity help me stay healthy, stay mentally focused and relaxed.

✓ I usually play golf with friends about once a month and the activity helps me stay healthy, mentally focused and relaxed.

Remove the redundant 'one' before 'once' and use the third-person singular verb 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'the activity'. Also streamline repetitive 'stay' for conciseness.

× I constantly working on improving my swing by practicing regularly at the driving range.

✓ I am constantly working on improving my swing by practicing regularly at the driving range.

The sentence is missing the auxiliary verb 'am' required to form the present continuous tense 'am working'. Adding 'am' makes the present continuous correct.

× I was especially into Nintendo titles like Mario Kart and Super Smash Bros and those war games that were both relaxing and social engaging.

✓ I was especially into Nintendo titles like Mario Kart and Super Smash Bros and those war games that were both relaxing and socially engaging.

Use the adverb 'socially' to modify 'engaging'. 'Social engaging' is incorrect because an adverb is needed to modify the adjective 'engaging'.

× I'd often spend hours competing with with friends in multiplayer races and battles.

✓ I'd often spend hours competing with friends in multiplayer races and battles.

There is a duplicated word 'with'. Remove the extra 'with' to correct the pronoun/preposition phrase 'competing with friends'.

× Yes, I will be running since childhood and it's something that's become part of my routine.

✓ Yes, I have been running since childhood and it's something that's become part of my routine.

Use present perfect continuous 'have been running' to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present. 'Will be running' incorrectly indicates future.

× I find it practical because it requires no special equipment and I can stop whenever I'm feeling tired.

✓ I find it practical because it requires no special equipment and I can stop whenever I feel tired.

Use simple present 'I feel' instead of progressive 'I'm feeling' for habitual or general states; both are acceptable but simple present is more natural here.

× These days I usually go for a one hour run near my home twice a week, mainly to stay healthy and mentally refreshed.

✓ These days I usually go for a one-hour run near my home twice a week, mainly to stay healthy and mentally refreshed.

Compound modifiers before a noun should be hyphenated: 'one-hour run'. This clarifies that 'one-hour' modifies 'run'.

× Yes, I actually have the same hobby as my father and that's golf.

✓ Yes, I actually share the same hobby as my father, which is golf.

Rewriting to 'share the same hobby' and using a clause 'which is golf' improves clarity and style; original is understandable but slightly informal.

× He told me how to play a couple of years ago and since then it's become something that that I'm really absorbed in.

✓ He told me how to play a couple of years ago and since then it's become something that I'm really absorbed in.

Remove duplicated 'that'. Also 'absorbed in' is acceptable; ensure only single 'that' is used.

× I usually go to a golf course to practice on weekend, mainly when my schedule arose.

✓ I usually go to the golf course to practice on weekends, mainly when my schedule allows.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'golf course' when referring to a habitual place. 'On weekends' is the correct plural/time expression. 'When my schedule arose' is incorrect tense/verb; use 'allows' for present habitual meaning.