Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 문장 구조와 시제 일치를 개선하세요. 'doing practice'는 어색하므로 구체적으로 어떤 연습인지 표현하고, 'spend'는 현재형으로 'spending'으로 바꿔 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 또한 계절을 언급할 때 이유나 빈도를 덧붙이면 더 구체적입니다. 문장은 최대 5문장으로 유지하되 주제 문장 다음에 한두 개의 구체적 세부사항을 연결어로 연결하세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I have several hobbies. I usually practice playing the guitar and spend time with my cats during the winter because I enjoy being cozy indoors. I also enjoy snowboarding on weekends when there is fresh snow.

Gợi ý: 불필요한 반복과 관사 사용 오류('a books')를 고치세요. 'liked like the drawing' 같은 중복을 피하고 대신 구체적인 예시나 이유를 덧붙이세요. 문장 연결을 위해 'especially' 앞뒤에 쉼표나 연결어를 사용해 흐름을 매끄럽게 만드세요.

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoyed reading books as a child, especially mystery novels because I liked trying to solve the puzzles. I also enjoyed drawing in my free time and often sketched characters from the stories I read.

Gợi ý: 응답은 명확하지만 좀 더 구체적인 정보를 추가하세요. 예를 들어 어떤 종류의 독서를 아직도 좋아하는지, 얼마나 자주 읽는지 등을 말하면 더 설득력 있습니다. 연결어 'however'나 'but'을 적절히 사용하고 문장 길이를 2~3문장으로 유지하세요.

Ví dụ: Not really; my hobbies have changed over time, but I still enjoy reading occasionally. I tend to read contemporary fiction now, and I usually spend an hour or two reading before bed.

Gợi ý: 어휘 선택과 문법을 다듬으세요. 'laying bed'는 틀린 표현으로 'lying in bed' 또는 'relaxing in bed'로 바꾸세요. 또한 대조를 분명히 하기 위해 'while'이나 'whereas' 같은 연결어를 사용하고, 운동의 종류나 빈도 같은 구체적 세부사항을 추가하세요.

Ví dụ: No, my hobbies are different from my family's. While they prefer watching TV, cooking, or relaxing in bed, I prefer exercising regularly, such as jogging or going to the gym, and spending time with my cats.

× I like doing practice and spend time with my cats in winter.

✓ I like practising and spending time with my cats in winter.

Use parallel gerund forms after 'like': both verbs should be in -ing form. 'Practice' as a verb in British English is 'practise'; in American English 'practice' as noun and verb differs. Ensure consistency and parallel structure: 'practising and spending'.

× Yes, when I was a child I liked reading a books especially I enjoyed mystery novels.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I liked reading books; especially, I enjoyed mystery novels.

Incorrect article 'a' before plural 'books' should be removed. Also two clauses need proper punctuation or conjunction. Use past tense consistently: 'liked reading books' and 'I enjoyed mystery novels'.

× I also liked like the drawing in my free time.

✓ I also liked drawing in my free time.

Redundant 'like' should be removed and use gerund 'drawing' after 'liked'. The construction 'liked like' is incorrect.

× Not really, my hobbies have changed over time but I still like reading sometimes.

✓ Not really; my hobbies have changed over time, but I still like reading sometimes.

Grammar is mostly correct; punctuation adjusted for clarity. 'Have changed' (present perfect) correctly indicates change over time, and 'still like reading sometimes' is appropriate. No tense error, only minor punctuation improvement.

× No, my hobbies are different from my family.

✓ No, my hobbies are different from those of my family.

Use 'different from those of my family' or 'different from my family's' for clarity. 'Different from my family' could mean the hobbies are different people.

× My family likes watching TV or cooking and laying bed, but I prefer doing exercise and spending time with my cats.

✓ My family likes watching TV, cooking, and lying in bed, but I prefer exercising and spending time with my cats.

Use gerunds in parallel: 'watching TV, cooking, and lying in bed'. 'Laying bed' is incorrect; use 'lying in bed'. 'Prefer' is usually followed by the gerund or 'to' + infinitive; here gerund 'exercising' is natural. Also add commas for clarity.