Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Make the answer more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid superlative adverbs like "extremely" twice, and add a brief specific detail (when or how often you dance). Keep to maximum 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, my main hobby is dancing. I started learning when I was a child and now I practice three times a week to improve my technique and fitness.

Gợi ý: Use clearer grammar and shorter sentences. Give specific examples and use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "also" or "in addition"). Avoid redundant phrases like "childhood days" and repetition of "extremely."

Ví dụ: When I was a child I enjoyed drawing and colouring; I used to draw every afternoon after school. In addition, I loved dancing and making small craft projects with my friends.

Gợi ý: Reduce hesitation and fix incomplete sentences. State the idea clearly, then add a specific detail (how often, what style, or why it matters). Avoid absolute claims like "every single day" unless believable; instead give a realistic frequency.

Ví dụ: Yes, dancing is a hobby I've kept since childhood. I usually practise ballet and contemporary for about five hours a week because it helps me express emotions and stay fit.

Gợi ý: Be more natural and concise. Remove fillers like "umm" and avoid redundant words ("whole heart wholeheartedly"). Add a specific example of a family occasion and link the ideas with a connective like "for example."

Ví dụ: Yes, my family also enjoys dancing. For example, at weddings and birthdays we often dance together to traditional songs, which always lifts everyone's mood.

× I am extremely fond of dancing and it has been my hobby since my childhood.

✓ I am extremely fond of dancing, and it has been my hobby since childhood.

Use of 'my childhood' is acceptable but 'since childhood' is more natural. Comma added before conjunction for clarity. Tense (present perfect) is appropriate for a hobby continuing to the present; no change to verb tense is needed.

× I vividly remember when I was a small kid I was extremely into colouring and a drawing has been an intimate part of my daily routine.

✓ I vividly remember that when I was a small kid I was extremely into colouring, and drawing was an intimate part of my daily routine.

Mixed tenses: 'I vividly remember' (present) refers to a past time, so actions described should be in past simple: 'drawing was' instead of 'has been'. Also remove article 'a' before 'drawing' because uncountable/general activity. Add comma and 'that' for clarity.

× So I think dancing, drawing and crafting was the hobby which I was extremely fond of during my childhood days.

✓ So I think dancing, drawing, and crafting were the hobbies that I was extremely fond of during my childhood.

Compound subject 'dancing, drawing and crafting' is plural, so use plural verb 'were' not 'was'. 'The hobby' should be plural 'the hobbies' or 'hobbies'. 'Which' is acceptable but 'that' is more natural in restrictive clauses. 'Childhood days' is redundant; use 'childhood'.

× Yes, I love dancing and it is the longest hobby which I ever had uh, since my childhood, I have been dancing every single day without a gap and uh, I think dance has been an emotional bond and, and uh, significant part in my.

✓ Yes, I love dancing, and it is the longest hobby I have ever had. Since my childhood, I have danced every single day without a break, and I think dance has been an emotional bond and a significant part of my life.

Run-on sentence split for clarity. Use present perfect 'I have ever had' for life experience. 'Have been dancing every single day' can be simplified to present perfect 'I have danced every single day' or keep continuous; both okay. 'Without a gap' is unnatural; use 'without a break'. 'Significant part in my' was incomplete; complete as 'significant part of my life'.

× Certainly my family loves dancing and we all are extremely happy when we dance.

✓ Certainly, my family loves dancing, and we are all very happy when we dance.

Comma added after 'Certainly'. 'We all are' is grammatically acceptable but 'we are all' is more natural. 'Extremely happy' is acceptable but 'very happy' is more natural; either is fine. This fixes adverb placement for natural phrasing.

× Umm, when we have any family gathering or party, we dance with our own whole heart wholeheartedly.

✓ When we have a family gathering or party, we dance with all our hearts wholeheartedly.

Phrase 'with our own whole heart' is awkward. Use fixed expression 'with all our hearts' and keep 'wholeheartedly' for emphasis (though slightly redundant). Article 'any' can be simplified to 'a' for natural speech.

× We perform the rituals and dance out.

✓ We perform the rituals and dance.

'Dance out' is unclear and nonstandard here. Simply 'dance' or 'dance together' is correct. Removed unnecessary particle for clear, natural expression.