Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct small grammar errors; include a clear topic sentence, two specific supporting details, and linking words. Also correct name/phrase usage (e.g., "a K-pop idol group called Curtis") and avoid redundancy like "helps me relax and also helps me to start my study."

Ví dụ: I enjoy listening to music, especially K-pop by a group called Curtis. For example, their upbeat tracks lift my mood when I study, and their slower songs help me relax in the evening, so music plays both motivational and calming roles in my daily routine.

Gợi ý: Start with a direct topic sentence and give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct small phrasing issues (e.g., "spend hours listening to" not "to listen to") and avoid vague statements like "different back then."

Ví dụ: Yes, I enjoyed listening to music as a child. For instance, I used to spend hours listening to children's songs and radio hits, and although my favorite artists have changed, music has consistently been an important part of my daily routine.

Gợi ý: Good clear answer and structure—keep it but add one specific example and a linking phrase to strengthen coherence. Avoid repetition of "new music and new artists" by varying phrasing.

Ví dụ: Yes, definitely. I've been listening to music since I was a child; for example, I used to collect mixtapes and now I make playlists. Although my taste has evolved, I still enjoy discovering emerging artists and new genres.

Gợi ý: Provide a concise topic sentence and add one specific example of a shared activity, using linking words for clarity. Fix small grammatical points (add comma after 'Yes,' avoid 'cheer' alone—use 'cheer together' or 'cheer each other on').

Ví dụ: Yes, I do. My older brother and I share similar music tastes; for example, we often exchange playlists and sing karaoke together at family gatherings, which helps us bond and discover new songs.

× Yes, I'd like to say listening to music is one of my favorite hobbies.

✓ Yes, I'd like to say that listening to music is one of my favorite hobbies.

Missing conjunction 'that' after 'say' makes the sentence sound awkward; adding 'that' clarifies the noun clause. Suggestion: include 'that' after verbs like 'say' when introducing a clause.

× I love songs by Curtis which is AK Pop Idol group.

✓ I love songs by Curtis, which is an AK-pop idol group.

Relative clause refers to 'Curtis' (singular), so 'which is' is acceptable, but punctuation and article are missing. Add comma before 'which' and include the article 'an' and hyphenate 'AK-pop' for clarity. Suggestion: use commas with nonrestrictive clauses and include appropriate articles.

× There's music really matches my mood and it helps me relax and also helps me to start my study.

✓ There's music that really matches my mood; it helps me relax and also helps me start my studies.

Missing relative pronoun 'that' before 'really matches' and awkward phrasing 'to start my study'. Use 'that' to link clause, remove unnecessary 'to' after 'helps', and use plural 'studies' or 'study session'. Suggestion: include relative pronouns and use natural collocations like 'helps me relax' and 'start my studies'.

× Of course, the artists that I liked were different back then, but music has always been a part of my life and I usually spend hours to listen to my favorite music.

✓ Of course, the artists I liked were different back then, but music has always been a part of my life and I usually spend hours listening to my favorite music.

After 'spend hours' the verb should be in -ing form ('listening'), not an infinitive ('to listen'). Also 'that' is optional and can be omitted for natural speech. Suggestion: use 'spend time' + gerund structure.

× Listening to music is a hobby that I have had since I was a little child.

✓ Listening to music is a hobby that I have had since I was a little child.

Sentence is grammatically correct but 'a little child' is slightly odd; prefer 'a young child' or 'I was little'. No grammatical correction required under given list; suggestion: use more natural phrase like 'since I was a child' or 'since I was little'.

× Yes I do. My older brother and I have similar tastes in music so we have always recommended our favorite songs to each other and also we love to sing together and cheer.

✓ Yes, I do. My older brother and I have similar tastes in music, so we have always recommended our favorite songs to each other, and we also love to sing together and cheer.

Missing commas for clarity and a missing comma after 'so'. Also 'cheer' is vague; contextually 'cheer' is acceptable but may need object (cheer along) — grammatically it's fine. Suggestion: add commas to separate clauses and place 'also' before the verb for natural rhythm.