Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is relevant and natural, but can be more concise and use clearer sentence structure. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundant phrases like "Of course, yes, I do have." Also provide a precise example (types of plants, numbers, or a recent activity) to make it more specific.

Ví dụ: I enjoy gardening. It helps me relax and connect with nature, and I particularly like growing native shrubs and vegetables. For instance, over the past three years I have planted about ten fruit trees and several raised beds of tomatoes, which supply my family with fresh produce.

Gợi ý: Grammar and clarity need improvement. Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, then give concise supporting details with linking words. Avoid long, run-on sentences and correct verb agreement and word choice (e.g., "I had two hobbies: singing and solving puzzles"). Explain briefly how each hobby affected you with a specific example.

Ví dụ: When I was a child I had two main hobbies: singing and solving puzzles. Singing made me happy and helped me perform in school concerts, while solving jigsaw puzzles improved my concentration; for example, I often spent Saturday afternoons completing 500-piece puzzles with my father.

Gợi ý: The response is on topic but a bit repetitive and contains small grammar issues. Use a concise topic sentence, follow with one or two specific reasons, and use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly. Avoid repeating phrases like "I do have" and correct tense/use of articles.

Ví dụ: Yes, I have been singing since childhood and I plan to continue. Because singing improves my confidence and communication skills, it could help me in future careers like teaching or performing, so I practice regularly and take vocal lessons to improve.

Gợi ý: This answer is unclear and contains awkward phrasing. Give a direct topic sentence stating whether you share hobbies, then explain with one or two specific contrasts using linking words. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., "different" instead of "contradicted behaviour") and provide concrete examples of your hobbies versus theirs.

Ví dụ: No, my hobbies are different from my family's. While they enjoy relaxing activities like watching movies and gardening for pleasure, I focus on hobbies that can benefit my career, such as learning languages and practicing singing; for example, I study English vocabulary for an hour each evening.

× Of course, yes, I do have.

✓ Of course, yes, I do.

The phrase 'I do have' is not incorrect grammatically but sounds redundant after 'Of course, yes.' Using 'I do' is more natural in spoken English. This improves fluency and removes unnecessary duplication.

× For example, I have planted so many trees at my home in the last few years.

✓ For example, I have planted many trees at my home over the last few years.

Use of 'so many' is informal and 'in the last few years' should be 'over the last few years' to indicate a period of time continuing to the present. Keep present perfect to show actions that occurred within that period.

× For sure I were having 2 copies particularly one is singing which gives me pleasure and the other one is solving puzzles which challenges my mind and keeps my mind busy all the time whenever I was free and it helps create in my mind some integral part of studies also.

✓ For sure I had two hobbies, particularly singing, which gives me pleasure, and solving puzzles, which challenge my mind and keep me busy whenever I was free; they also helped form an integral part of my studies.

Multiple errors: 'were having' is incorrect for a past habitual state — use simple past 'had'. '2 copies' is wrong word choice — use 'two hobbies'. Subject-verb agreement: 'solving puzzles' is plural so use 'challenge' and 'keep', not 'challenges'/'keeps'. Use 'helped' for past influence on studies. Improve punctuation for clarity.

× Yes definitely I do have a hobby of singing since my childhood too till now and I would like to continue this as my hobby and future also because for me it's it will open a lot of doors for me both professionally and personally.

✓ Yes, I have enjoyed singing since my childhood and I would like to continue it in the future because it will open many doors for me both professionally and personally.

When describing an action that began in the past and continues to the present, use present perfect 'have enjoyed' or 'have had'. 'Since my childhood too till now' is redundant; use 'since my childhood'. Remove duplicated words ('it's it will') and use 'many' rather than 'a lot of' for conciseness. 'Continue this as my hobby and future' is awkward — 'continue it in the future' is clearer.

× To be honest, I do have contradicted behaviour relative to my family members and so as with my hobbies also I have hobbies of like the things which are professionally and personally important for me.

✓ To be honest, my behavior differs from my family members' and, like my hobbies, I prefer activities that are professionally and personally important to me.

'Contradicted behaviour relative to my family members' is ungrammatical; use 'my behavior differs from my family members''. 'So as with my hobbies also' is awkward; rephrase for clarity. Use possessive 'family members'' and parallel structure 'professionally and personally important'.

× But if I have to talk about my family members, they are having the hobbies which gives them only pleasure.

✓ But if I talk about my family members, they have hobbies that give them pleasure only.

Use simple present 'talk' for general statements. 'They are having the hobbies' is incorrect — use 'they have hobbies'. 'Which gives' must agree with plural 'hobbies' so use 'give'. Place 'only' after 'pleasure' or rephrase 'hobbies that are purely for pleasure' for clarity.