Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence naming a few hobbies, then give one or two specific details with linking words. Avoid repetition and filler sounds (uh).

Ví dụ: I have several hobbies, including painting, drawing and reading. For example, I enjoy painting landscapes because it relaxes me, and I read novels every week to improve my vocabulary and learn new ideas.

Gợi ý: Use past tense clearly when talking about childhood and organize the answer: state the hobbies, then explain one specific benefit using a linking word. Reduce hesitations and incorrect phrases like 'foreigner music'.

Ví dụ: When I was a child I enjoyed painting, reading and listening to foreign music. For instance, listening to English and Russian songs helped me learn new words and improve my pronunciation.

Gợi ý: Clarify unclear vocabulary (e.g. 'tumor' is wrong) and give a clear topic sentence naming the hobby. Explain briefly why it matters with a specific detail and use correct tense and vocabulary. Remove hesitations.

Ví dụ: Yes. I have painted since childhood — my grandmother taught me how to mix colors and hold a brush. Whenever I paint now, I remember her patience and feel connected to my family.

Gợi ý: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details and linking words. Explain one reason or give an example of when you cook together. Avoid vague or contradictory phrases like 'are allowed' and reduce fillers.

Ví dụ: Yes, my mother and I share hobbies like cooking and baking. For example, we often bake bread together on weekends and chat while preparing ingredients, which fills the kitchen with noise and laughter.

× I have a lot of hobbies such as I love paintings, I love drawing, I love reading, which is make me smart and uh, in my childhood, I love painting.

✓ I have many hobbies: I love painting, drawing, and reading, which make me smarter. In my childhood, I loved painting.

Errors: 'a lot of hobbies such as I love paintings' is awkward and uses plural noun form incorrectly; 'paintings' should be 'painting' when referring to the activity; 'a lot of' better as 'many' before plural noun; 'which is make me smart' has subject-verb agreement and wrong adjective form. 'Which' refers to multiple hobbies so use plural verb 'make' and 'smarter' as comparative. Tense consistency: when referring to childhood use past tense 'loved'. Suggestion: list activities as gerunds (painting, drawing, reading), use 'many hobbies', maintain subject-verb agreement and appropriate adjective forms, keep past tense for past events.

× So my parents, uh, allow me go to uh, some course.

✓ So my parents allowed me to go to some courses.

Error: 'allow me go' omits necessary infinitive marker 'to' and tense is present 'allow' but referring to past; use past tense 'allowed'. Also 'some course' should be plural 'some courses' or 'a course' depending on meaning. Suggestion: use 'allowed me to go to some courses' for past permission and include 'to' before verb.

× He cited, In my childhood, I do have several hobbies such as painting, reading and listening to some music, which is, uh, foreigner music and it helps me to learn some, uh, other languages such as English and Russian.

✓ In my childhood, I had several hobbies such as painting, reading, and listening to foreign music, which helped me learn other languages such as English and Russian.

Errors: 'He cited,' is irrelevant and pronoun misuse; 'I do have' is unnecessary emphatic present while referring to childhood—use past 'I had'; 'some music, which is, uh, foreigner music' uses wrong adjective 'foreigner' instead of 'foreign'; 'it helps me to learn' should match past timeframe 'helped me learn'. Suggestion: remove extraneous pronoun, use past tense for childhood, choose correct adjective 'foreign', and use 'helped me learn' without 'to'.

× I love doing this.

✓ I loved doing this.

Error: Tense mismatch—previous sentence describes childhood in past tense, so use past 'loved' to be consistent. Suggestion: match verb tense to timeframe being described.

× Yes, I do. Uh, since my childhood I have uh, habits, which is called tumor.

✓ Yes, I do. Since my childhood I have had a habit called 'tumor'.

Errors: 'since my childhood I have habits' should be singular 'a habit' if referring to one; present perfect 'have had' is appropriate to indicate continuing since childhood; 'which is called tumor' needs reordering: 'a habit called ...'. If 'tumor' is a wrong lexical choice, confirm intended word; here corrected assuming the student named the habit 'tumor'. Suggestion: use 'I have had a habit called X' or 'I have had this habit since childhood'.

× Uh, my grandmother taught me this and when I did do this, I uh, remember my grandma and I love it.

✓ My grandmother taught me this, and when I did it I remembered my grandmother and loved it.

Errors: 'when I did do this' is redundant; 'I remember' mixes present with past context—use past 'remembered'; 'I love it' should be past 'loved it' for past events. Suggestion: simplify to 'when I did it I remembered my grandmother and loved it.'

× Yes I do, my mother and I have same, uh, hobbies.

✓ Yes, my mother and I have the same hobbies.

Errors: missing article 'the' before 'same'; punctuation needed. Suggestion: use 'have the same hobbies' to indicate shared hobbies.

× Uh, both of us uh, like cooking, baking and uh, at the kitchen we made a lot of noise and our other family members hate this because both of us are allowed.

✓ Both of us like cooking and baking, and in the kitchen we make a lot of noise, which other family members dislike because we are noisy.

Errors: 'at the kitchen' should be 'in the kitchen' (preposition error); 'we made a lot of noise' mixes past with present—use present 'make' if habitual; 'hate this because both of us are allowed' is unclear and ungrammatical—likely meant 'they dislike it because we are noisy' or 'because we are loud'. Suggestion: use correct preposition 'in', match tense for habitual actions, and replace unclear clause with clear reason 'because we are noisy'.