Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Make the answer more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "about" and repeating "I like to read"). Use slightly richer vocabulary (e.g., "competitive multiplayer games" and mention a favourite book or genre).

Ví dụ: I enjoy two main hobbies: reading and playing video games. For gaming, I mostly play competitive multiplayer games like League of Legends because I like team strategy. For reading, I prefer contemporary fiction and recently finished a novel about city life, which I found very engaging.

Gợi ý: Improve grammar and add specific details to make the answer more vivid. Begin with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, and connect sentences with linking words (for example, "because" or "so"). Mention frequency or a memorable event to add content.

Ví dụ: Yes, I used to play football with my friends a lot when I was a child. We went to the park almost every weekend and sometimes practiced for hours because we wanted to get better. I remember once we entered a small local tournament and felt very proud when our team won a match.

Gợi ý: Make the response grammatically correct and clearer. Use a concise topic sentence stating the hobby has continued since childhood, then contrast past and present with linking words (e.g., "whereas", "now"). Avoid filler words like "uh" and correct verb forms ("have played"). Provide a specific game or genre for clarity.

Ví dụ: Yes, I have played video games for most of my life. When I was a child I preferred open-world games like Minecraft because I enjoyed exploring, whereas now I mostly play competitive multiplayer games such as Valorant for quick, strategic matches.

Gợi ý: Clarify relationships and give specific examples. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add supporting details with linking words like "for example" or "also". Correct small grammar issues ("plays beats" -> "creates beats" or "produces beats") and explain what you do as a DJ to show depth.

Ví dụ: Yes, music is a common hobby in my family. For example, my parents enjoy listening to a variety of genres, I sometimes mix tracks and DJ at small parties, and my younger brother produces beats on his laptop using digital software.

× I like to play games and read books. About playing games. I like to play player versus player games. And about reading, I like to read.

✓ I like playing games and reading books. For games, I enjoy player-versus-player games. As for reading, I like to read various books.

Use verb + -ing (present participle) after 'like' to express general preferences (Grammar Problem Type 10). 'Like to play' is acceptable but using 'like playing' is more natural when listing hobbies. Also combine short fragments into complete sentences and add hyphens in 'player-versus-player' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'like playing' and 'like reading' for hobbies and avoid sentence fragments.

× When I was child, I loved to play football with my friends.

✓ When I was a child, I loved to play football with my friends.

The noun 'child' requires the definite article 'a' in this expression (Grammar Problem Type 22). Omit or add correct articles depending on noun count and specificity. Suggestion: Use 'a child' for singular nonspecific references.

× In my childhood I always went to park with my friends and kicking a ball for a day.

✓ In my childhood I always went to the park with my friends and kicked a ball all day.

Use the preposition 'to the park' (Grammar Problem Type 11) and maintain consistent verb forms: 'kicked' (past tense) to match 'went' (Grammar Problem Type 5). Also use 'all day' to mean for the whole day. Suggestion: Use 'to the park' and keep verbs in the same past tense when describing past habitual actions.

× Yeah, I think I have been played games over the whole of my life and uh, when I was a kid I played open world game, but now I like to play player but play.

✓ Yes, I think I have been playing games my whole life. When I was a kid I played open-world games, but now I prefer player-versus-player games.

Use the present perfect continuous 'have been playing' to express an action continuing up to the present (Grammar Problem Type 6). 'Have been played' is incorrect because 'been' must be followed by the present participle. Use plural 'games' and hyphenate 'open-world' and 'player-versus-player'. 'Prefer' better expresses change in preference. Suggestion: Use 'have been playing' for continuous actions and maintain correct adjective-noun and hyphenation conventions.

× Everyone in my family loves to listen to music. Also I like music even sometimes I play DJ and also my younger brother play beats.

✓ Everyone in my family loves listening to music. I also like music; sometimes I DJ, and my younger brother plays beats.

Use 'listens' pattern: after 'loves' use verb + -ing (Grammar Problem Type 2 and 10). 'My younger brother play' is incorrect for third person singular; it should be 'plays' (Grammar Problem Type 2). Use concise phrasing: 'I DJ' instead of 'I play DJ'. Suggestion: Use third-person singular verb form 'plays' and use '-ing' after verbs like 'love' when describing activities; simplify phrasing for clarity.