Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details with linking words. Correct tense and grammar (e.g., 'I have enjoyed drawing since childhood'). Avoid repetition like 'I think I'm good at it' and 'I just love it' back to back.

Ví dụ: I enjoy several hobbies, but baking and drawing are my favorites. I have enjoyed drawing since childhood, and I find it relaxing; for example, I often sketch landscapes when I have free time. Baking is another passion because I like experimenting with new recipes and sharing treats with friends.

Gợi ý: Provide a direct topic sentence and organize supporting details with linking words. Fix grammar and complete sentences ('I was a very playful girl'). Give specific examples rather than listing. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: Yes, I had many hobbies as a child. For instance, I loved drawing and also enjoyed dancing and singing; in addition, I often played games outside with my friends. I was a very playful child and spent most afternoons practicing new dance moves or sketching characters.

Gợi ý: Be clearer and more fluent: start with a direct statement, then add specific supporting details with linking words and correct grammar. Avoid short fragmented sentences like 'and I draw.' State frequency clearly ('I don't draw as often now'). Give a brief example of what you draw and why it takes long.

Ví dụ: Yes — drawing is a hobby I've had since childhood and I still enjoy it. It relaxes me and I used to draw every day, although I don't have time to do that now. For example, I often create detailed pencil portraits, which can take several hours or even days to finish because I focus on realistic shading.

Gợi ý: Answer directly and politely; avoid negative or awkward phrasing. Use correct comparative/adjective forms ('as creative as me' not 'as creativity as I am'). Provide a clear contrast and a specific similarity with a linking word. Keep sentences complete.

Ví dụ: Not really — most of my family have different interests, but my sister and I share a love of drawing. For example, we sometimes sketch together on weekends, and we both enjoy experimenting with color and composition.

× I draw since my childhood and I think I'm good at it and I find it enjoyable and I just love it.

✓ I have been drawing since my childhood; I think I'm good at it, I find it enjoyable, and I just love it.

Use 'have been drawing' (present perfect continuous) for an action that started in the past and continues to the present. 'Draw since my childhood' is incorrect because 'since' requires a present perfect form. Also add punctuation and conjunctions for clarity.

× I had a lot of hobbies and also one of them was drawing but others were also dancing, singing, playing with my friends outside.

✓ I had a lot of hobbies; one of them was drawing, and the others were dancing, singing, and playing outside with my friends.

Use 'the others' to refer to the remaining items in a list. Maintain parallel structure by using nouns or gerunds consistently (dancing, singing, playing). Move 'with my friends' to modify 'playing' clearly.

× I was so playful girl and.

✓ I was a very playful girl.

Sentence fragment: missing article 'a' and trailing conjunction 'and' should be removed. Use adjective order 'very playful' to modify 'girl' and finish the sentence.

× Yes I have and I still like doing this and it's drawing.

✓ Yes, I have, and I still enjoy doing it; it's drawing.

Use 'enjoy doing it' instead of 'like doing this' for natural phrasing. Add commas and semicolon for clarity. 'It's drawing' is acceptable but 'it' should refer clearly to the hobby.

× I think I'm good at it and I draw. Not really often currently but I used to draw every day when I was younger and it takes hours or even days for one drawing to done.

✓ I think I'm good at it, but I don't draw very often currently. I used to draw every day when I was younger, and one drawing could take hours or even days to complete.

Place adverbs ('currently') correctly after auxiliary verbs. 'Not really often currently' is awkward; use 'I don't draw very often currently.' 'It takes... to done' is wrong: use passive infinitive 'to be done' or active 'to complete'; 'one drawing could take' matches past habitual with possibility.

× Personally, I don't think so because my family is not as creativity as I am, but I think that I look like my sister because she also likes to do drawing and she's also such creativity person and I think we're both like some.

✓ Personally, I don't think so because my family is not as creative as I am. I think I resemble my sister because she also likes drawing, and she's also a very creative person; I think we like many of the same things.

Use adjective 'creative' not 'creativity'. Use 'as creative as' for comparison. 'Likes to do drawing' is awkward; use 'likes drawing'. Use article 'a very creative person'. 'We're both like some' is ungrammatical; replace with 'we like many of the same things' for intended meaning.