Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Your answer is natural and informative, but it can be tightened and slightly corrected for fluency and precision. Reduce redundancy (e.g. 'take pictures of sunset' and 'landscape photography' overlap) and correct small phrasing issues ('sunset' → 'the sunset'; 'capture dramatic things' → 'capture dramatic scenes'). Use one linking phrase to connect ideas and keep within 3–4 sentences.

Ví dụ: I enjoy several outdoor hobbies. On weekends I often go hiking in the nearby mountains with my parents and photograph the sunset because I find it very relaxing. I especially like landscape photography, experimenting with different light and compositions to capture dramatic scenes.

Gợi ý: This is a clear and well-structured answer with good details and relevance. To improve further, add a linking word for cohesion and a brief specific example or result to enrich the content (e.g. a memory or achievement). Keep sentences concise.

Ví dụ: Yes. When I was a child I often played outdoor sports with my best friend, especially football and badminton. We met at the local park after school most days because it was close to our houses, and playing regularly kept me fit and helped me make lifelong friends.

Gợi ý: The content is good but the answer needs clearer phrasing and grammar corrections. Avoid awkward sentences ('remind me of that unforgettable') and be more specific about what 'unforgettable' refers to. Use a linking word to combine ideas and give a concrete example of a memorable trip or photo.

Ví dụ: Yes. I loved traveling as a child and it has remained my favourite hobby. For example, I often photograph landmarks such as the Forbidden City or Shanghai Disney Park because these photos help me remember unforgettable moments from my trips.

Gợi ý: The answer covers the question but has minor issues: some awkward phrasing ('at the weekend' → 'on weekends'; 'small spa day' is okay but '[...] to the local community. Com.' is unclear). Remove unclear fragments and use linking words to contrast (e.g. 'however' used well). Provide a brief example of a family activity to make it more specific.

Ví dụ: We mostly have different hobbies. I like shopping and watching new movies on weekends and sometimes treat myself to a spa day, whereas my family prefers gardening. However, we do share badminton, so we often play together at the local community centre.

× I especially enjoy landscape photography because I like experimenting with different light and compositions to capture dramatic things.

✓ I especially enjoy landscape photography because I like experimenting with different lighting and compositions to capture dramatic scenes.

The phrase 'light' as a noun in this context should be 'lighting' to refer to the quality and use of light in photography; 'things' is vague—'scenes' is more appropriate for photographs. This fixes the gerund usage and improves noun choice. Suggestion: use 'lighting' when discussing photographic light and choose specific nouns like 'scenes' or 'images.'

× On weekends, I often go hiking in the nearby mountains with my parents and take pictures of sunset, which I find very relaxing.

✓ On weekends, I often go hiking in the nearby mountains with my parents and take pictures of the sunset, which I find very relaxing.

'Sunset' as a singular event in a specific context needs the definite article 'the' when speaking about taking pictures of that phenomenon. Use 'the sunset' to refer to the particular sunset being photographed. Suggestion: include 'the' with 'sunset' in this context.

× Yes, when I was a child I often played outdoor sports with my best friend, especially football and badminton.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I often played outdoor sports with my best friend, especially football and badminton.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It uses past tense appropriately to describe childhood activities. Suggestion: none.

× We met at the local park after school most days because it was close to our houses and I loved playing because it kept me active and helped me make friends.

✓ We met at the local park after school most days because it was close to our houses, and I loved playing because it kept me active and helped me make friends.

Add a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses for clarity. Pronoun 'our' is correct. This is a punctuation/clarity improvement; grammar types list does not include punctuation separately, but adding the comma clarifies sentence structure. Suggestion: use a comma before coordinating conjunction joining independent clauses.

× Yes, when I was a child I loved traveling and as I grew up it became my favorite hobby.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I loved traveling, and as I grew up it became my favorite hobby.

Add a comma before 'and' to join clauses and maintain past-tense narrative consistency. The verbs 'loved' and 'became' are correctly in past tense. Suggestion: use punctuation to improve readability.

× I especially enjoy taking photos of scenic spots and landmarks in different cities like the Forbidden City or Shanghai Disney Park because it helps me remember the places I visit and remind me of that unforgettable.

✓ I especially enjoy taking photos of scenic spots and landmarks in different cities like the Forbidden City or Shanghai Disney Park because they help me remember the places I visit and remind me of those unforgettable moments.

Pronoun reference was inconsistent: 'it helps' refers to 'photos' (plural), so use 'they help.' The phrase 'remind me of that unforgettable' is ungrammatical; use 'those unforgettable moments.' Also 'of' after 'remind' is required. Suggestion: match pronoun number to antecedent and complete noun phrases (e.g., 'unforgettable moments').

× I enjoy shopping and watching recent movies at the weekend, and I sometimes treat myself to a small spa day, while my family prefers practical activities like gardening.

✓ I enjoy shopping and watching recent movies at the weekend, and I sometimes treat myself to a small spa day, while my family prefers practical activities like gardening.

This sentence is acceptable; regional variation allows 'at the weekend.' No grammatical correction needed. Suggestion: optionally use 'on weekends' or 'at the weekend' consistently.

× However, we do share one hobby, playing badminton, so we often go to the local community. Com.

✓ However, we do share one hobby, playing badminton, so we often go to the local community center to play.

The fragment 'Com.' is incomplete and unclear. 'Local community' needs a noun like 'center' and adding 'to play' completes the purpose. This fixes sentence structure and clarifies meaning. Suggestion: remove stray fragments and complete locations/actions (e.g., 'local community center to play').