Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Correct verb forms (e.g., 'I recently graduated and obtained my blue belt'). Avoid redundancy like 'trying to keep myself busy and always stimulated.'

Ví dụ: I enjoy several hobbies, but currently I focus on jujitsu. I train three times a week to master the techniques, and I recently graduated to a blue belt after passing a formal grading.

Gợi ý: Provide a direct topic sentence, fix tense and agreement errors, and add a specific supporting detail or brief example. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'which') to connect ideas.

Ví dụ: Yes. As a child, I practiced judo and played soccer regularly. Because of judo, I learned discipline and concentration, which also helped me perform better in team sports.

Gợi ý: Begin with a clear topic sentence and correct pronunciation/text errors ('hob' -> 'hobby') and grammar ('has shaped', 'I enjoy it'). Give one concrete detail about how it shaped you to make the answer more specific.

Ví dụ: Yes, I have kept one hobby since childhood: reading manga. I have read manga since I was ten, and it has shaped my imagination and interest in storytelling, inspiring me to draw fan art and learn Japanese expressions.

Gợi ý: Start with a concise topic sentence, correct small errors and avoid fillers ('like', 'umm'). Provide a specific example or brief anecdote to support your statement and use linking words ('because', 'so').

Ví dụ: Yes, mainly with my younger brother. We are close in age and grew up playing soccer and judo together, and both of us are big fans of anime and manga, so we often recommend series to each other and attend local events.

× 'I recently graduate and obtain my blue belt.'

✓ 'I recently graduated and obtained my blue belt.'

'Recently' indicates a past action, so verbs should be in the past simple. Use the past forms graduated and obtained to match the time reference.'

× 'I have a lot of hobbies, I'm trying to keep myself busy and always stimulated.'

✓ 'I have a lot of hobbies; I try to keep myself busy and mentally stimulated.'

'I'm trying' suggests a temporary ongoing action; using simple present (I try) fits habitual hobbies. Also replace 'always stimulated' with 'mentally stimulated' for clarity and natural usage.'

× 'At the moment I'm practicing jujitsu, I train really hard to master all the techniques and I recently graduate and obtain my blue belt.'

✓ 'At the moment I'm practising jujitsu; I train really hard to master all the techniques, and I recently graduated and obtained my blue belt.'

'I'm practicing' is correct for current activity but needs punctuation to separate clauses. Also 'practising' (British) or 'practicing' (American) consistency matters. The past verbs were corrected to past simple to match 'recently.'

× 'I was practicing judo actually and soccer.'

✓ 'I practiced judo and played soccer.'

'Was practicing' can be used but 'practiced' and 'played' in past simple are more natural for habitual childhood activities. Use parallel verbs for coordination.'

× 'So that was the two main activities that I was doing and I really enjoyed it because it teach me discipline and how to stay focused.'

✓ 'Those were the two main activities I did, and I really enjoyed them because they taught me discipline and how to stay focused.'

'That' should be 'those' for plural; 'was' should be 'were' to agree with plural subject. Use past simple for completed childhood activities (did). Pronouns must agree: 'them' for plural activities. 'Teach' should be past 'taught' to match past tense.'

× 'The OB that I kept since childhood is reading manga.'

✓ 'The hobby that I have kept since childhood is reading manga.'

'OB' appears to be a typo for 'hobby.' Use 'have kept' (present perfect) to indicate an action continuing from childhood to present. 'Is reading manga' is acceptable but 'is reading manga' implies current action; 'is reading manga' here functions as a noun phrase describing the hobby.'

× 'Manga has been a big part of my life since I was 10 years old until now and actually shape it did shape my personality and I always enjoy.'

✓ 'Manga has been a big part of my life since I was 10 years old, and it has shaped my personality; I always enjoy it.'

'Since... until now' is redundant; 'since' plus present perfect (has been) is sufficient. 'Shape' should be past participle 'shaped' with present perfect 'has shaped' to show continuing result. Reorder for clarity and add object 'it' with 'enjoy it.'

× 'We only have like one year apart and so we we grow up together and we spend a lot of time like playing soccer and judo as well.'

✓ 'We are only about one year apart, so we grew up together, and we spent a lot of time playing soccer and judo as well.'

'Have one year apart' is incorrect; use 'are one year apart.' For past upbringing, use past simple 'grew up' and 'spent.' Remove filler 'like' and duplicate 'we.'

× 'And we also umm both big fan of anime and manga culture.'

✓ 'And we are both big fans of anime and manga culture.'

'Both' needs a verb and plural noun: 'are both big fans.' Add 'are' and plural 'fans' for grammatical agreement.