Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: Câu trả lời có ý chính rõ ràng nhưng quá dài và lặp từ ("basketball" xuất hiện nhiều lần). Hãy rút gọn câu chủ đề, dùng 1–2 câu phụ để giải thích mục đích (thư giãn, rèn luyện sức khỏe) và thêm từ nối để mạch lạc. Ngoài ra nên dùng từ vựng phong phú hơn (ví dụ: unwind, stay fit, socialise).

Ví dụ: I enjoy playing basketball. I usually play at the weekend because it helps me unwind and stay fit after a busy week of school and projects.

Gợi ý: Câu trả lời có nội dung tốt và rõ ràng nhưng có một vài lỗi cấu trúc nhỏ và từ thừa ("used to have a hobby when" nên rút gọn). Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó nêu ví dụ cụ thể và lợi ích bằng liên từ (because/which).

Ví dụ: As a child, I used to build robots and model kits from toys my parents bought me. I liked it because it encouraged creativity and improved my problem-solving skills.

Gợi ý: Ý chính rõ nhưng câu có lỗi từ vựng và diễn đạt lộn xộn ("brand cost", "expand my collection of course and get knowledge"). Hãy nói rõ về đồ vật bạn sưu tập, lý do và một ví dụ cụ thể về việc bạn học được điều gì. Giữ tối đa 2–3 câu và dùng từ vựng phù hợp (e.g. "learn about car design, history").

Ví dụ: I've collected small car models, especially Hot Wheels, since I was a child. I enjoy it because it taught me about car design and history, and I love hunting for rare models to add to my collection.

Gợi ý: Câu trả lời thiếu tổ chức, có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và lặp, khiến khó hiểu ("whereas and more about playing basketball", "all my family members had a hobby"). Hãy trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng cấu trúc so sánh ngắn gọn, dùng thì đúng (present simple) và nối các ý bằng linking words (for example, while).

Ví dụ: Not really. For example, my sister prefers listening to music, while I enjoy playing basketball. My father likes playing pickleball, so although we all have hobbies, they are quite different.

× Yes, I actually have a hobby that involves playing basketball and I usually play basketball during the weekends and to relieve pressure from school work and all the projects that I'm currently involved in.

✓ Yes, I actually have a hobby that involves playing basketball, and I usually play basketball on weekends to relieve pressure from schoolwork and the projects that I'm currently involved in.

Use 'involves playing' is correct for activities, but 'during the weekends' is non-idiomatic; use 'on weekends'. 'School work' should be one word 'schoolwork'. Remove unnecessary 'and' before 'to relieve' and join ideas with a comma. Ensure parallelism and clarity by making purpose 'to relieve pressure' directly modify playing basketball. ID:8

× Well, when I was a child, I used to have a hobby when I built robots and models from the toys that my parents bought.

✓ Well, when I was a child, I used to build robots and models from the toys that my parents bought.

The phrase 'used to have a hobby when I built' is awkward and uses redundant structure. 'Used to build' correctly expresses a habitual past action. Remove 'have a hobby' and 'when' to make the sentence concise and grammatically correct. ID:5

× One hobby that I have had since childhood is collecting car models, especially the small Hot Wheels brand cost.

✓ One hobby that I have had since childhood is collecting car models, especially small Hot Wheels cars.

'Brand cost' is incorrect; likely meant 'cars'. Remove 'the' before 'small Hot Wheels' and use plural 'cars' to match 'collecting car models'. This fixes both word choice and number agreement. ID:14

× I think I really enjoy this hobby because it allows me to expand my collection of course and get knowledge.

✓ I really enjoy this hobby because it allows me to expand my collection, of course, and gain knowledge.

The phrase 'expand my collection of course and get knowledge' is unstructured. Insert commas around 'of course' as a parenthetical, and use parallel verbs 'expand' and 'gain' instead of 'get knowledge' for more natural English. ID:26

× Well no, my sister has a hobby of listening to music whereas and more about playing basketball and my father actually also plays sports but he play pickleball and all my family members had a hobby.

✓ Well, no. My sister's hobby is listening to music, while I am more into playing basketball. My father also plays sports; he plays pickleball. All my family members have hobbies.

Original contains multiple conjunction and tense errors. Use 'while' to contrast, correct pronoun/reference 'I am more into', fix verb agreement 'he plays', and use present tense 'have hobbies' for habitual fact. Break into shorter sentences for clarity and proper conjunction usage. ID:16}]}