Hobby— Part 1 Báo cáo

Gợi ý: 話し方をより自然で簡潔にしましょう。主張（トピック文）を明確にし、理由を1つか2つに絞って具体例を加えると良いです。冗長な語句（"just because" など）は避け、文法や語順（"making baking" は不自然）を訂正してください。例えば動詞の形は単純に "baking" を使い、味や楽しみ方、頻度など具体的な情報を加えると高得点につながります。

Ví dụ: Yes. I enjoy baking sweets, such as muffins, pound cakes and cookies. I bake because I love experimenting with flavors and sharing treats with my friends. For example, last weekend I tried a lemon-mug cake recipe and everyone complimented its texture.

Gợi ý: 時制と語順に注意して、より自然な英語に直しましょう。冒頭でトピック文を簡潔に述べ、その後に具体的な状況（いつ・誰と・どこで・どんな気持ちで）をつけて説明してください。繰り返し表現（"very fun" と "kind of an adventure"）は一つに絞り、理由や具体例を添えると良いです。

Ví dụ: Yes. Catching insects was one of my childhood hobbies. During summer vacations I used to go to the park every day with my brother to catch cicadas. It felt like a small adventure because we explored trees and listened to the loud insects together.

Gợi ý: 答えをより直接的にして、言い回しを丁寧にしましょう。"boyish girl" の表現は不自然で曖昧なので避け、具体的にどんな遊びをしていたかを述べると説得力が増します。また、現在の趣味と過去の違いを理由とともに簡潔に説明してください。

Ví dụ: No, I don't have a hobby that I've kept since childhood. As a child I mostly played outdoors and did rough-and-tumble activities with my brother, but as I grew older my interests shifted to cooking and baking, which I now enjoy more.

Gợi ý: 文法（複数形や冠詞）を調整し、より自然で流暢な表現にしましょう。家族と一緒にする具体的な活動や頻度、感じること（例：学べることや会話の内容）を付け加えると内容が豊かになります。

Ví dụ: Yes. My mother also enjoys baking, so when I visit home we often bake sweets together. It's a great chance to chat and learn family recipes, and I always pick up tips about techniques like folding batter gently.

× My hobby is making baking sweets like muffins, pound cakes and cookies.

✓ My hobby is baking sweets like muffins, pound cakes and cookies.

The phrase 'making baking' uses two nouns/gerunds together incorrectly; remove redundant 'making'. Use 'baking' as the gerund to describe the hobby. Suggestion: Use a single gerund or noun phrase to describe activities (e.g., 'baking sweets').

× I like to bake them because I really love to eat them just because.

✓ I like to bake them because I really love to eat them.

The trailing 'just because' is redundant and informal, making the sentence awkward. Remove it for clarity. Suggestion: Avoid redundant phrases and keep the causal clause concise (e.g., 'because I really love to eat them').

× I'm catching insects was one of the hobbies I had in my childhood.

✓ Catching insects was one of the hobbies I had in my childhood.

Using 'I'm catching' mixes present continuous with past context. Use the gerund 'Catching' as the subject or past 'I used to catch insects.' Suggestion: For habits in the past, use past simple or 'used to' or a noun gerund as subject.

× In summer vacation I every day I went to a park to catch a lot of cicadas with my brother.

✓ During summer vacation I went to the park every day to catch a lot of cicadas with my brother.

Word order and prepositions are incorrect. Use 'During summer vacation' and 'every day' after the verb, and 'the park' if referring to a specific place. Suggestion: Place time expressions at start or after verb and use definite article for a specific park.

× It was very fun for me and it was kind of an adventure for me.

✓ It was very fun for me and kind of an adventure.

Repetition of 'for me' is unnecessary and wordy. Also 'very fun' is acceptable but 'really fun' or 'great fun' are more natural. Suggestion: Avoid repeating phrases; streamline to 'It was really fun and kind of an adventure.'

× Actually there's no such kind of hobby because when I was little I tend to play with my brother, so I was kind of like boyish girl.

✓ Actually there was no such hobby because when I was little I tended to play with my brother, so I was kind of a tomboy.

Tense mismatch: 'there's' (there is) is present but context is past; use past 'there was'. 'I tend to play' should be past 'I tended to play'. 'boyish girl' is unnatural; 'tomboy' is the correct noun. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and use appropriate vocabulary.

× But since I grew up I tried to become more like girl, so my hobby has changed since then.

✓ But as I grew up I tried to become more like a girl, so my hobbies have changed since then.

Tense and article issues: 'since I grew up' or 'as I grew up' is fine; 'tried' is past but 'has changed since then' requires consistency — using 'have changed' for plural 'hobbies'. Also add article 'a girl'. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement and consistent tense and include necessary articles.

× Yes, baking sweets is not only me but also my mother's hobby.

✓ Yes, baking sweets is not only my hobby but also my mother's hobby.

Sentence structure is incorrect: 'not only me but also my mother's hobby' wrongly treats 'me' as parallel to 'my mother's hobby'. Make both items possessive or parallel: 'my hobby' and 'my mother's hobby'. Suggestion: Use parallel structures when listing subjects or possessors.

× So when I go back to my home, I often bake sweet with my mother and that's a good opportunity to have a communication with her.

✓ So when I go back home, I often bake sweets with my mother, and that's a good opportunity to communicate with her.

Use 'go back home' (no 'my'), plural 'sweets', and 'bake sweets with' (plural). 'have a communication' is unidiomatic; use 'communicate with' or 'have a conversation with'. Suggestion: Use natural collocations: 'go back home', 'bake sweets', 'have a conversation' or 'communicate'.